A Beaten Path Traveled

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As I travel

along a beaten path


it’s revealed to me

reality

created to drown me

in fear

in myself

alone

and aware

of how alone

I am

how can I bear


to spend another night

in reckless thought,

reclusive dreaming,

lonely sentiment,

lustful longing,

hopeful torment


lost in imagination

trapped inside

the very mind

that thinks these thoughts

and writes these words

not spoken

not heard



with allegiance

to elegance,

I reminisce

my sorrows

upon blankness

for all to witness

for all to see

in clarity


I stand before

my foreign reflection

without a direction

revealing to me

my vanity

and the errors

of my ways

my fatal mistakes


something breaks me

keeps me here


hearing her voice

recalling her choice

inhaling her scent

missing ascent

into bliss

in her kiss

in her eyes

in her lips

in her grasp

in her grip


Something…

always draws me

to her memory



© copyright Ben D.A 2011



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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thank you qudsia, for checking out the ones I shared :D


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QudsiaP1 5 years ago

The difference between reality and imagination, the constant battle within... Wonderful Ben.


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allexia26 5 years ago

You are very talented I love it


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

I know what you mean.... :\


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raghavrathi 5 years ago from Dehradun, Uttarakhand, India.

it was my pleasure........

n i hope tht some day, i also vud b able to write so good.....


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

raghavrathi - it's great to wake up for work, and read such great comments...makes the day a bit better, thank you very much


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raghavrathi 5 years ago from Dehradun, Uttarakhand, India.

the pain expressed in the poem is immense and it has been even more beautifully written...!!!

Certain points bound me and m still thinking abt it after about 20 mins of reading and re-reading it......

gr8 work!


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

I like the part foreign reflection. many times i've looked in the mirror and not recognized or liked the person i saw staring back at me. memories can be good or they can be hard. but every memory reminds us of who we are, and where we are now.


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crystolite 5 years ago from Houston TX

Nice hub,thanks.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

essi - thanks a lot

erth - That is so nice to hear...thank you :]


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erthfrend 5 years ago from Florida

Everything I read from you draws me in, takes me away and I am speechless! Wow...another excellent excellent poem!


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essiheart 5 years ago from Chicago, IL

Wonderful. It conveys such a feeling of desperation, and really makes you feel all the sensory details. :)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks a bunch, arb :]

that is very kind of you


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arb 5 years ago from oregon

Ben, my favorite. When poetry leaves the line and takes us hostage for a moment, it is born again with each and every read. Beautiful and I shall vote it so.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thank you very much, Ian. Loss, indeed. Sometimes I just have to let it pour out of me.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

Loss, perfectly trapped in words. Loved it.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

b4u2 - Thanks for showing up and commenting, and I'm not sure if that picture is real or created.

ellie - yeah but I feel better now haha, thank you

Mentalist - spot on man


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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

Consenting to memory,lamenting over lost contentment.;)


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

Heartbreaking and beautiful, Mr. Writings. Well done.


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b4u2 5 years ago from 22 f u!

I don't know how i got here but it must be one of those things that is magic~No coincedents huh?Great stuff,u don't know me im new here.Is that a real ghost in that pic?Anyway thanks 4 sharing ur poem~


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Ralwus - haha, that's the last thing I need, probably. I appreciate your interest and comments ( which are most flattering ). I hope you enjoy reading much of my writing, as I will yours. If I wasn't so tired, I would be reading more now haha. Thanks again


ralwus 5 years ago

Keep writing like this and you'll have more women than you can handle son. Live!


thisismylife9123 5 years ago

wow, that's amazing. i will not lie to you and say that you will forget about her and not feel anymore pain, but i will say that the pain will slowly fade and you will find that life goes on and someone else will come along and make you complete again.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

HaHa..... well....


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Randy, I understand you want my full attention ;]


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

Will you ever be able to purge her through poetry? Life is chapters Ben. Time to turn the page?


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thank you mckbird


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Splendid writing.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks man


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Uni_te 5 years ago

Beautiful.. And way too true. Feel better, man.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Nellie - wow, really? I wasn't quite expecting that reaction, that means a lot to me, thank you. This was a painful one...


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Ben! Utterly and magnificently beautiful, painfully poignant and presented majestically!

What more can I say? This is an epitome of your poetic expression! Surely a powerful muse directs your thoughts and fingers as you write!

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