A Chasm Would Open


Empty future,

hardly can remember the past,

the water rushing fast,

eyes tight,

and her ghost was like

silver in the moonlight,

she was much too exhausted

to put up a decent fight,

ship sinking,

her spirit thinking,

the ghosts of the other passengers

were blinking,

the visuals caused so much harm,

the sea crushing bodies,

as she felt God’s shift in her arm,

all the waves and water

would rush suddenly

in a horrific downward spiral,

some ghosts tangled,

while others flying free,

and then a chasm would open

on the sea,

and that was the reality,

as hope prayed,

and someone stuck out their hand

in an awkward, futile aid,

a knot of fear came,

then stayed,

no shame,

as the heavens would call her name.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

A beautiful capture here Frank . I saw a picture quite clearly when I read.

A fine capture .

That last gulp of air that everyone I saw die , takes , God alone knows what being manifested in those moments. It's only fair for us to think they know anything.

When you know nothing you are truly dead. But until then you will know all what you are supposed to.

Great capture.

Bless.


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shimmering Dawn 4 years ago

You just created another poetic Titanic with your words. Be a blessing! Peace!


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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Felt like I was floating over the sea with spirits all around. Good work Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Sky for taking a sailwith me and thank you shim dawn for your titantic comment and senoritaa thanks for sharing this poem with me :)


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

You have captured a moment in time beautifully.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Jackie :)


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

A great poem, beautifully expressed.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you again blossom :) Frank


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Frank, you always seem to amaze me with your poetry. Deep poetry my friend. Voted up, awesome, and interesting. Have a good one.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

and you amaze me with your tattoo lessons LOL thanks for stopping by


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phdast7 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Perhaps the greatest compliment I can offer you, is to say that I held my breath as I read your poem. Quite sad and beautiful and elegiac.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much PHdast7.. bless you


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ahorseback 4 years ago

Frank , such tragedies are almost to reak to imagine ,but you did it here my friend !


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you a horseback :)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

Very very nice Frank. Up and shared and all that jazz!


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Debby Bruck 4 years ago

Hi Frank ~ Voted up as with all the others who recalled the name of a great ship that went under. Blessings, Debby


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you PDX and Debbie for stopping by :)


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

"And her ghost was like silver in the moonlight..." Hauntingly beautiful.


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wingedcentaur 4 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

Nice one, Frank. Despite the fact that I've taken to dabbling in poetry lately, I have always been a bit intimidated by it. However, I understood everything you were saying here (or, I thought I did) and it was eerily beautiful; and I didn't feel like an uncultured clod.

It strikes me that this poem strikes a rather similar theme of the short story of yours I just read, "A Terrifying Apparation." In both, death was the force that set protagonists "free," as it were.

Good Job. Voted up, awesome, and eerily beautiful again.

Take it easy.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you cyndi1o for stopping by and thank you winged for recognizing my flaws or strengths however you wanna look at it when it comes to death LOL bless you both


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

winged.. thank you so much for sharing your thoughts on my work


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Ah--you create a wonderful sense of mood in this piece Frank! Well done!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Audrey, good to see you


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Moms-Secret 2 years ago from Central Florida

I have missed reading your poetry and how fitting that I could read this in the month so suited for it.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

hey stranger how have you been


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lisavanvorst 2 years ago from New Jersey

Wonderful poetry Frank. Great hub once again!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Lisa :)

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