A Chorus of Complaints

A Chorus of Complaints


The thick clouds followed the contour of golden hills

moving with flocks of sea ghosts,

traveling through the coast,

it was a strange return

for the young men who would burn

after the explosion left the sea,

tears hid beneath God’s polished cheek-bones,

as war ghosts were floating beyond

the green tangle of wilderness,

life done, survivors none,

as clouds passed over the sun,

life wanted more,

but the angels knew that wasn’t possible,

as their angelic feet threaded lightly over the mosaic floor,

there were no choices,

as the soldiers heard the voices,

passed loved ones came to show the way,

with candles lit for such a dreary day,

death had no constraints,

but life echoed a chorus of complaints,

dark shadows were contemplating,

and God was weary with waiting,

his voice thundered with indignation,

as he witnessed the doom,

and the spirits took time

inspecting their burial tomb.



© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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citychick 5 years ago from Ulster County, New York

Frank;

Thanks for your e-mail. I love this poem - it's so descriptive and evocative. I hope to read more...be well.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Citychick thanks


lovedoctor926 3 years ago

Your writing just keeps getting better and better. Good imagery..

"tears hid beneath God’s polished cheek-bones."

"as their angelic feet threaded lightly over the mosaic floor,"


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

aaahhh go on.. really go on..LOL bless you girl


lovedoctor926 3 years ago

My pleasure:) Lol.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks :)


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

I enjoy all of your work Frank but I have to say that I love how deep you can be when we are not looking into the work of a murderer in progress or his aftermath. It allows me to imagine some of your different layers.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

moms are you checking out my layers? fresh...


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

Lol, yes my fun, flirtatious, faithful friend Frank. I can see your fantastic layers. You should not leave them hanging out if you don't want them to be checked out. Lol.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL oh im leaving them out so check away my friend!!! LOL


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

Lol. How I adore our playful banter. Never change!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

you mean wear the same clothes forever?


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

You wear clothes!? Last visual I got you were hanging out of windows naked... LOL!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL you're too funny girl ...


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

Loved this Frank--there is a stillness about this that stays with me


Sunnie Day 3 years ago

Your imagery Frank is beyond words! You are so talented. I see you have been published and I surly need to check out your books..Do you have a collection of poems that you have done?...This was awesome!

Sunnie


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Audrey and sunnie for your wonderful comments :)


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xstatic 3 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Beautiful work here Frank! The imagery is so imaginative.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much X-Man :)


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justateacher 3 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Great work once again...no one does imagery as well as you!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much justateacher :)


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time2rite 3 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

Such vivid imagery that is beautiful even in destruction. Frank, you've done it again: kudos!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Time :)


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phdast7 3 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Frank - This seems different to me - good different, actually very good different. I like it a great deal, very somber, and the cadence of your words and phrases and the water imagery brings to mind a "dirge." Very well done. Happy New Year.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Phdast7


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phdast7 3 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Just stopped by to read this again, and I like it even more this time. This is excellent poetry, Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

bless you phdast7


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Hmm, as it just so happen, I literally just finished and laid down a book called, "In Harms Way" about the sinking of the USS Indianapolis before I read this. Your poem just emphasized the imagery in my mind of those lost at sea and on the battlefield. Great work, Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks wayne barrett for the read :)


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tobusiness 24 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Frank, this is powerful and so very vivid, you really excel with the imagery. beautifully done.


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thank toobusiness bless you


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Bishop55 24 months ago from USA

This was sad for those that lost their lives, I liked the separation you described between two realms as it all played out. It was a very active/ busy story/poem in such few lines. Bravo friend.


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much and good to see you Bishop..happy holidays :)


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tillsontitan 24 months ago from New York

Even in the midst of war and destruction you add a touch of beauty. Though God seems to be a tad ticked off, the angels come to greet the passed souls and lead them to eternity. There is some beauty in that, really.

If we have to die, and we do, it would be comforting to know there is an angel waiting to take us where we need to go (hopefully upwards). Am I rambling here? Guess I best go on.....

As always, beautiful!

Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting.


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much til for reading my complaints :) bless you


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FlourishAnyway 22 months ago from USA

Well done, Frank!

Angels knew that wasn’t possible; God was weary with waiting -- loved these lines in particular.


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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Flourish...:)

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