A Friday Night Date

Sometimes his mind would drift,

He felt like quitting,

Three murders on a single shift,

The suspect was an eighteen year old

Male prostitute,

Who targeted men who are old,

Rob and kill them,

And leave them in the cold,

Their deaths was his joy,

A drug addict, white boy,

No respect for life,

Stabs them deep,

With an old kitchen knife,

Sometimes watches the blood seep,

After witnessing the dead bodies,

Any crime detective could lose sleep,

The interrogation went well,

The boy admitted being at the hotel,

Claimed the old man attacked him,

And he killed in self defense,

The detective completed the statement

And he left the room,

Lies neatly swept with a broom,

The kid stood up,

And used the two-way mirror,

Mind so simple,

As he would pop a pimple,

Checking his watch

As if he were running late,

Maybe contemplating a Friday night date.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

A coldblooded killer, no compassion or remorse, next he'll comb his hair, take a sidelong glance at himself in the mirror, then a thumbs up for looking so good.

Great sketch here Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much X-man for reading my Friday night date


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

This poem really is frightening freaky Frank.. Lies neatly swept with a broom. Good imagery! A heartless criminal.. You've described this scene very well. I wouldn't want to cross paths with this serial killer that's for sure.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

I think you could handle yourself Marlene LOL thanks for sharing my Friday Night Date


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

LOL.. I think you are starting to know me better. oh, I meant creepy, not freaky..


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Sometimes the scariest thing about psychos is how normal and insignificant they are. Not that I know any, I must add; but when you see them after they've been caught. Frank, You still give me the shivers...:) when I read you poems.


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

I was hooked on true crimes for a number of years, your writings bring back memories of many of those. Great imagination.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Yeah Marlene you got a tuff side... and bless you for that.. toobusiness you are dead on I agree with you 100% and I too like the crime hooks Jackie thanks for stopping by bless you guys


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acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

I think I am gonna have nightmares now!!! Great hub though as always.


Valleypoet 4 years ago

It's a weird feeling knowing there are people out there somewhere, that can kill another without any remorse. You have a great crime niche here Frank...and you don't disappoint. :-))


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

You really explain the problem here so well and get into the mind of the criminal. It's certainly scary to know that there are real people like this out there, not so far away. Thank God we have dedicated police and detectives.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

yeah Acae.. bet you thought this was going to be about a Friday night date.. right? LOL thanks for stopping by.. Frank


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Valleypoet and Blossoms for sharing your thoughts bless you both Frank :)


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Peggy W 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

As others have already stated...it is scary knowing that people like this exist and have so little respect for life. You paint vivid pictures with your words!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Peggy thanks for stopping by :)


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Moms-Secret 4 years ago from Central Florida

Amazing what people are capable of when they have justified their reasons in their own mind.

You are keeping me company tonight Frank. I suspect I will be talking to you on your other hubs.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

I got your back!!!


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marcoujor 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Frank,

You show time and time again how a few well-penned words can relay a whole bunch of substance.

The subjects that you write about are difficult. Your style has great impact and leaves no doubt in the reader's mind.

Voted UP and UAI. Hugs, Maria


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks marcoujor, that was a nice comment bless you :)


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Waheed Chuahdary 4 years ago from United States

Great hub and great story in this hub.. This one is amazing for me.......

Thanks for sharing this voted up..


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Waheed


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up. Creep city. Made me think of the actual serial killer on the loose now in Brooklyn, N.Y. who has already shot three shopkeepers. Another great chiller. Keep them coming. Passing this on.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by Gypsy :)


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Highland Terrier 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

Excellent.

Got the creeps just reading it.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping to read my Friday night date Highland...


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank.

Loved the line, "Lies neatly swept with a broom"

Voted up and away

Take care :)


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

"Maybe contemplating a Friday night date."

Makes me glad I'm not on the dating scene :)

Happy Thanksgiving Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by Sueswan and Justasksusan happy thanksgiving to you folks and bless you :)


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

I've met a few of these freaks in my time. Without hesitation or regard for human life, coacharoaches in disguise, slithering around the back alleys of discontent, nothing to gain in life, treating a life like a flipped out cigarette. Standing over their victims while adjusting their ties and rubbing their hands and wiping their oxford shoes from the blood stains appearing on them. Yes it happens in every walk of life my friend. Well written, the message was there. Voted up and shared.


Sunnie Day 4 years ago

Chilling Frank..another picture of a cold blooded killer with no heart. You are the master of this type of writing, mystery unsolved as the killer continues to make his way to other victims. Great job!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Vincent and Sunnie for reading my Friday Night Date bless you both :)


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Frank. You have a way with words that captures the imagination. What a great descriptive piece. I watch a lot of crime TV and it always amazes me, the casualness of the criminals who are like this. They nap in the interrogation room faced with unknown charges in the homicide department. Who could sleep? This guy.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks pegcole for visiting my Fridaynight date


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epigramman 3 years ago

Oh Frank you were and still are one of my favorite writers of 2012 and Epi-man has been perfectly well behaved lately but after reading this film noir gore fest - lol - I am ready for some poetic blood lust of my own and I promise -lol - not to disappoint - you are such an excellent writer and you can say so much with so few words. This one is actually one of my favorites from you and that's saying a lot - sending you warm wishes for your health, happiness and prosperity in the new year from lake erie time canada 6:24pm


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Epi.. Bless you and let me know when you post :) Frank

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