A Haiku- Togetherness

Lasting love lasts forever.

Together forever. Parting wasn't in the contract.
Together forever. Parting wasn't in the contract. | Source

Enduring love endures.



Togetherness now,

If I swing too far, catch me

We're sharing each vow.


Forever lasting,

The true love tests our metal,

'midst love and fasting.


A home for children,

They can always come back to...

Hearts still love for then.


© 2012 Demas W. Jasper All rights reserved.

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Comments 38 comments

Victoria Lynn profile image

Victoria Lynn 4 years ago from Arkansas, USA

If I swing too far, catch me

We're sharing each vow.

I love those lines. This haiku paints a real picture of love and relationships. Very neat piece! Many votes!


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flashmakeit 4 years ago from usa

I like the part that reads

A home for children

They always can come back to


katyzzz profile image

katyzzz 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

Deep and meaningful, a lovely haiku, well done


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rebeccamealey 4 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

How sweet. Haikus are always from the heart I think, and yours clearly is. Voted up and awesome!


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Freya Cesare 4 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Aaaah... so lovely!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and awesome. These lines A home for children,

They can always come back to... made me remember that even though I had a childhood I have no complaints about I always wished my parents lived in a house like you see in the movies where families gather. We always lived in apartments.


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Billjordan 4 years ago from Houston

beautiful poem it swing to far catch me!!!


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

Simply beautiful! A warm, loving home...some of us didn't have parents with such beautiful priorities! upupand away, P..


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Victoria Lynn: I'm glad my Haiku struck a resonating note with you. Poets don't design fancy words, but prefer to express resonating feelings. Thanks.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

flashmakeit: Isn't it great when a reader picks out and comments on a portion of your Hub that they liked? Thanks for commenting in that way about this one.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

katyzzz: Trying to capture one of the essences of a single word we all use, is a good challenge which has the writer asking "what does that word mean to me?" If the echo which comes back from a reader replies "I see what it means to you," the writer's challenge has been met. Thanks.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

rebeccamealey: Togetherness is a sweet elixir, isn't it! Nonsense can be from the head, but any really true sweetness must come from the heart.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Freya Cesare: A "so lovely" from a so lovely Hubber is a compliment I will always gratefully accept. Thank you.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Gypsy Rose Lee: Recall the saying "Home is where the heart is." It isn't size, boards, or brick and mortar. It's the spirit of the home you are returning to and the memories you want to be able to cherish. If parents can create that in a home for their children, a tent works just fine. I'd say "a childhood I have no complaints about" means it did.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Billjordan: I searched for the visual image which could convey through symbolism the thought I wanted to express in that portion of the Haiku. Relationships do have times when one partner might "swing too far" but the other partner's love can prevent a painful fall in keeping with their shared vow. I think it's important for us all to remember that, and be ready to save more than just the day.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

ImKarn23: We each have limited time for writing and expressing, even if we did so full-time. What should we use that time to express? Some choose to express sadness, heartbreak, frustrations, etc., and that is all well and good for all thoughts have a place in writing. "Togetherness" has the priorities we give to it, and I chose this kind, which I am glad pleased you.


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breakfastpop 4 years ago

I love this poem. It speaks to me.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

breakfastpop: I am so glad you do (and it does.) I think you will like today's, too. Let me know.


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Wonderful line, catch me if I swing to far.

Voted up and beautiful.


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picklesandrufus 4 years ago from Virginia Beach, Va

great haiku!you nailed what togetherness is all about. vote up!


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

wow great Haiku.. you are so good at this I love to read your poems

Blessings to you

Debbie


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Great Haiku..Voted up and beautiful...


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Just as a swing comes back after it goes forth, so my Hub comes back with your wonderful comments...all a poet ever needs. Thanks writer20, picklesandrufus, Deborah Brooks, and always exploring, for reading and commenting here.


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cherylone 4 years ago from Connecticut

Great job, again. I love reading your stuff!


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

cherylone: I'll call that a "fan mail"! Thanks, I'm glad you do.


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

How passionate is this haiku, such beautiful, heartfelt words. Lovely indeed! In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Faith Reaper: His love is always ours through His sacrifice. His gift of life is ours to magnify. His gift of the companionship of the Holy Ghost is ours when and while we live righteously so we may follow its promptings. That togetherness (with the Holy Ghost) is one we must honor each day, each moment, even in our choice of surroundings.


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Perspycacious, what a beautiful reply. Yes, He first loved us, and that is why we now can love others and even ourselves, as we are made in His image --- fearfully and wonderfully made. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Faith Reaper: Beg to differ: we were not made fearful for the scripture says that "God hath not given us a spirit of fear..." even though Solomon in Ecclesiastes said that the sum of the Gospel is to "fear God and keep the commandments...". Even our existence is a miracle as I know you know. God bless.


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

No, we are not made fearful, but "fearfully and wonderfully made," as it says in His Word (Psalm 139:13-14) In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Faith Reaper: an ancient version of that verse (14) was cited in “The Bible On One Page" as reading, Psalm 139:14 You are fearfully wonderful . But I agree that the current KJV, NIV, and AmStd carry the version you were using. Incidentally, if you are not familiar with "The Bible On One Page", here's the link to that wonderful website resource: http://www.jrsbible.info/bible.htm


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Thank you Perspycacious, I will check it out. That means we are just fine and shouldn't believe the lies of the enemy, but we are fearfully and wonderfully made, as we are made in His image, in the likeness of Christ, and He is telling us how precious we are in His sight. "Perfect love cast out fear." I know about that first hand. You are also precious to He. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

Faith Reaper: Have you heard the talk given by another Christian about her ride with a serial killer? I do not have the particulars in mind off the top of my head, but as I recall her testimony she converted him on that ride and he surrendered to authorities and made his peace with God. Powerful story. Others must have heard her recounting and can give more information. Have a great weekend.


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

Home is where the heart is...such a sweet thought Demas...


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

raciniwa: Where else could we dig and be sure to find treasure? Everyone's collected photos tell a good part of the story. Do we predominantly photograph things or people? That provides a clue to where we are at this point in our lives. For photographs of people give them a score of 2. For photographs of beauty give them a score of 1. For photograps of possessions give each of them a score of -1, and see what an album's score is. The most current album of one's own photos is the best "current indicator".


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phdast7 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Moving haiku. Glad I took time to read them. Have a wonderful week. :)


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

phdast7: I am glad you did, too, and I extend my wish for a triumphant week for you and yours.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond Author

This is an interesting submission due to its low score of 49, its relatively high views, and 37 comments so far. Poems (of any kind) just do not normally seem to score well.

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