A Hollowness Inside

The child’s scream

was etched in his mind,

frenzied thoughts emerged,

driving him insane,

as they collided inside his brain,

it was an odd sensation,

and his face was dampened

with perspiration,

the only sound he could hear

was the child’s voice,

which sounded in his ear,

the child, pale skin,

dark hair,

small and very thin,

on the kitchen floor,

stabbed,

then stabbed some more,

all this sociopath could see

were the ghosts of the murdered children,

huddled in masses

yearning to be free,

day after day,

he felt consumed,

killing wasn’t a desire, but a need,

and after the murder,

the terror became his daily feed,

it was more like a command,

as he fought back the urge

to take the child’s lifeless hand,

he lured them with a variety of candies,

the wonderful shapes and sizes,

but only death became the secret prizes

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and awesome. Wow talking about crazies out there and serial killers. This one's a real sicko. Unfortunately sometimes we read things like this in newspapers. Well done starts slow and builds up to many, many shivers.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

good morning gypsy and thank you for stopping by


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Hello Frank, great writing, as always. Too bad the world is full of - as Gypsy Rose Lee says - sickos! They give us lots to write about, unfortunately.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

I agree thank you cyndi10 :)


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tsmog 4 years ago from Escondido, CA

intense


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks tsmog


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Gypsy48 4 years ago

Awesome poem about such a horrible reality. Voted up and awesome.


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Angelme566 4 years ago

This line strike me most-killing wasn’t a desire, but a need,


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Oh MY FRANK!! this is scary because it is so true.. You really described it so well.. I hung on with every word.. awesome and scary at the same time

Blessing

Debbie


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Voted up and awesome. You have really written a scary poem and is sounds so real.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Gypsy, Angelme and Our Dear Ms Brooks for stopping by my hollowness.. and Joyce its always good to see you bless you all


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

Wow, a horrible thing done up well. Definitely different.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

This one hits hard because we read of things like this all the time. The world carries far too many sickos.

Well written to get the feel of lays in this serial killers mind across.

Has my vote too


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

What a cinematically thrilling verse this is my friend! Awesome to the core

The way you bring about each word in the poem is fantastic...

Brilliant from each point of view


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Jackie for taking the time to read my entry and Rosemay yes.. I try to offer what might lay in the serial killer's mind and thank Rahul for leaving your footprints bless you guys :) Frank


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

Great imagery Frank. You paint a good picture for your readers with your words. Looking forward to reading more of your books. Sorry for the late comments, I haven't been on hubpages too much lately. You know you are one of my favorite and greatest fans. Happy Friday!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

I know you got my back Marlene.. bless you girl :)


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girishpuri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

scary but true, voted up, Frank


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by girishpuri


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Voronwe 4 years ago

Great portrayal of a sociopath's mind! Chilling really, so vivid. And I was just watching Clint Eastwood's "Changeling" a couple days ago. This could be written for the psychopath in that movie. Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

wow clint eastwood is one of my favorite actors.. from Rawhide.. to dirty harry..:)


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Andera 4 years ago

An 'awesome' read, for lack of a better... button.

The ending really leaves us hanging, with no resolution, no anything. The murders will continue.

Captivating, even if for a short while.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Andrea.. bless you girl :) Frank


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Ah Frank, you make me weep. The world can be a terrible place and the most innocent are at great risk. Your writing puts us there and makes us aware which is necessary is we are to rid the world of evil. Thank you Frank for sharing your writings with us. Even when painful they teach.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

H-- thanks so much for actually reading between the lines :) Frank


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank,

An excellent portrayal of a serial killer.

Voted up and away.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Sue.. just bless you :)


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

oh, here you go again Frank, weaving a macabre so gross it makes our insides churn...fantastic...


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Raci for stopping by :)


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FlourishAnyway 24 months ago from USA

This just makes me wonder what was done to him to make him like that. You capture his motives well, Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you flourish..bless you

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