A Parallel Space

Crystalline snowflakes from the sky free fall through the light

Each transformed through the trails of cold atmospheric flight

Unaware of the other, innocent one, each in her own right

Our lives fly in a parallel space where heart and souls unite

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Connection melded by a visceral montage construing seers insight

Cold winds blew our destinies into survival that clings melted tight

Twins in a slivered glass mirror sees each hold the other upright

Our lives fly in a parallel space where heart and souls unite

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Each sculpted separately set on a sown passage of scripted write

Constellations converge to cross our paths as chosen sisters alight

Stars collide as chaotic gods clash swirling each in destinies blight

Our lives fly in a parallel space where heart and souls unite

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Frozen snowflakes melt into tears in warm compassion’s sight

Whirling fear dissipates cajoling the ice storm to sleep at night

Two pair of feet touch hell's embers to reach for heaven's height

Our lives fly in a parallel space where heart and souls unite

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Crystalline snowflakes from the sky free fall through the light

Reaching out our battered souls hold the pen steady to rewrite

Forever for each other then neither left alone through the fight

Our lives fly in a parallel space where heart and souls unite

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You are my beloved friend, I understand your pain and I will never abandon you

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Jo_Goldsmith11 4 years ago

wow. This is so beautiful and the song is so perfect. You are Amazing!

Thank you for your plight, your words tell me. Everything is all right!

Shalom :)


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Oh, thank you, Jo. I have an absolutely amazing best friend that lives in N. Carolina now. She has had a deluge of devastating events; the loss of her only grandson, then the loss of her 24 year old daughter and the loss of her Florida home and as you would expect, her own physical health. Life has not been kind. I wish I could take all her pain away and turn it into joy, but all I can do is be there for her and let her know I love her unconditionally. She does the same for me. I don't know where I'd be without her in my life. Thank you so much for reading this piece and your beautiful comment, Jo. Shalom


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epigramman 4 years ago

...Billy Buc must be snoozing right now - I didn't think he ever snoozed at the Hubs ..... so this is my chance .....


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epigramman 4 years ago

....Amy , thank God you are back for I have missed you!

During your sojourn in other places I had to go 'cold turkey' and hang out down at the bar for hubbers who pine for other hubbers when they are away - and yes I went on a bender (shame on the vulnerable side of me) and in order to cure my hangover I crawled back to you on my hands and knees begging you to never leave your faithful readers alone like this again ...... it is was hell for me; I could only imagine what the others went through.

And here are these spectacular words again and how you weave them on your artist's canvas and they are stars each and everyone of them - yes Amy, you are a starmaker of words - so your name this time around will be Amy Starmaker - and I can't say I have ever seen/read words put together in this way before. And you always maintain that delicate balance between intellect and emotion in such a lyrical and absorbing way - this is high minded writing I would say for high minded individuals - you never pull any punches and your artistic integrity is always intact! lake erie time 6:50pm


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suzettenaples 4 years ago from Taos, NM

Amy, what a beautiful poem and what a beautiful strength in your friendship. We start out fragile as a snowflake but on parallel paths we can come together in strength. I like the snowflake metaphor and the cold weather - great metaphor for the difficult times each of you have experienced. May the gods be good to you both!


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whonunuwho 4 years ago from United States

Well done and well received, Amy. My daughter's name is Amy(It means beloved). This was a wonderful display of emotionally charged words and expressed exquisitely on paper and painted with the skill of an artistic brush. The metaphor of the snowflake, not unlike the souls of each, though different, able to meld and form a thing of unfathomable beauty. Thank you for his lovely flight of the mind.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

...well, Mister C, can you feel me hugging you right now? On a bender or not, you are one lovable crazy diamond. Your beautiful words are what make me feel like I am home at the hub. You always make me feel so much better than I am. You are making me cry, but it's good tears of gratitude for your generosity and true caring. Now I know how Sally Fields felt when she accepted her Oscar saying "You like me, you really like me!" Nothing feels better. Thank you with all my heart.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

My dear friend, Suzette, I want to run this by you, because I know you will be honest with me. Did you see the snowflake metaphor in the individuality of each snowflake and how I tried to relate it to the individuality of each of us? And did the words "swirling" and "whirling" bring to mind snowfall? It was my intention and if I missed the mark, I'd rather know than not. I'm asking you, because I respect you as a teacher. mentor, superb writer and friend. Thank you sincerely for reading this, leaving me a truly inspiring message and an awesome wish. Sending you a hug from St. Lou


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear whonunuwho, I love my name, as out of all the names to choose, my parents gave me one that means "beloved". You comment is spoken like a true artist, which you are, and I thank you for bestowing breathtaking words that leave me stunned, uplifted and grateful. I would say I now know what it means to feel "beside myself". Thank you, my friend.


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epigramman 4 years ago

....well actually Amy in reference to your Sally Fields quote - the 'L' word in question that I was thinking of had L at the beginning and E at the end - but two other letters instead in the middle.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Awwww, Mister C, I'm sending the same back across Lake Erie to you. Thank you for caring, you crazy diamond, you.


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

Amy, what a wonderful metaphor. I may have missed the mark, but I see us all as snowflakes, swirling around each other, randomly hitting and missing the mark, finally finding a resting place....and when that place is found, we are not alone. No single snowflake is ever alone.

Beautiful.....what a lovely gift this Friday morning!

love,

bill


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breakfastpop 4 years ago

This is a beautiful tribute to deep and lasting friendship. Your are so gifted. Up, beautiful and awesome.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Bill, You hit the nail on the head, and said it in a beautiful way. I'm so happy you like this piece. I don't think my friend has seen it yet, but I'm going to leave the gift for her to find on her own. Thank you for reading this one and leaving your poetic words for me, my friend. Love from St. Lou


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Poppy, Thank you so much for making my day with your visit and words. ..actually you made my whole weekend! Love you, my sweet friend.


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breakfastpop 4 years ago

Love you back....


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sligobay 4 years ago from east of the equator

Meet Me In St Louie was a great old movie and this is a great new poem. Snowflakes as metaphors can be used to emphasize individuality and uniqueness as employed here. They are also well employed metaphors for transience and lack of permanence because many are short-lived. Like feathers in the wind, i.e. Forest Gump, they can symbolize serendipity and lack of control as they are blown about by the wind. Your use of snowflakes here for "bonding" of unique to unique is brilliant and original. I have never read about snowflakes being used metaphorically in this way. It is totally permissible, "poetic license" to bend a metaphor to fit your theme, whereas the same cannot be said of a simile. This is a brave write, Lady Lancelot. Your "courage" encourages me. Peace to you and your friend.


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

This is beautiful Amy. I know your friend will love this spectacular poetry. May you both keep flying in that parallel space, each finding happiness and fulfillment. Cheers..


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, sligobay, for your visit and a most thoughtful, truly beautiful comment. When I began thinking about this piece, I tried to liken the "chance", the seemingly arbitrary circumstances that draw one person to another resulting in a meaningful relationship. I thought about the unique formation of every snowflake, like each human being, and the arbitrary nature of falling snow, even in a blizzard one snowflake falling next to another or maybe blown next to another completely different one, landing unpredictably. Though the snowflakes melt, they melt to another and in effect bond. Where the results end, no one knows...just like any relationship. My thinking is a little loose, maybe a little crazy even, but so is the nature of life. I am thrilled, Gerry, that you not only read my piece, but understand and gave my message your astute consideration. You have a brilliant mind and your words are a source of continuing inspiration and are extraordinarily special to me. Thank you


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Ruby, I hope Laura likes this. I have a feeling she will. She has a beautiful heart, like you Ruby, so you telling me you think she will love it, reassures me. I will officially stop worrying, my sweet friend. Hugs to you from St. Lou


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The Frog Prince 4 years ago from Arlington, TX

Some of this gets hard to read through the pain. I'll leave it right there with this one.

TFP


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suzettenaples 4 years ago from Taos, NM

Yes, yes, and yes, Amy. Each of us is the individual snowflake in the poem - I didn't mean to gloss over that. But, I just focused in on you and your friend in my comment. Yes, each of us is a snowflake on a parallel space falling and you say "Our lives fly . . ." So it does relate to all of us. Yes, the swirling and whirling does give the image of a snowfall most definitely. A soft, beautiful snowfall, in fact. This is just a lovely poem, Amy and we all are hoping to merge heart and soul with someone. We are delicate and fragile snowflakes - this is just beautiful. I just love how you think and how you are able to put it into these lovely words and poems. Each of your poems is a treat!

Amy, you are too kind ! Thanks for the compliments. There are many here on HP that could help you, but I treasure that you chose me. I am such a fan of your poetry and you have to gather these up and put them into a book. These must be around for posterity. I predict that you will make the literature books someday!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I appreciate that you recognize the pain, Frog Prince. I tried not to be melodramatic, but real. Mainly, my best friend and I love each other and help each other through what life hands us. On that note, it has a very positive message. Hope I didn't bum you out. Thank you for the visit and your words, Jim.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you so much, Suzette, for indulging my questions. I feel so much better hearing your ideas in detail. I know you are busy, and I am very grateful for your time and help. I can't tell you how much I appreciate your expert tutoring, Suzette. I've learned so much from your hubs and from your comments. You've broadened my horizons and always inspire me to push on. Your prediction is beyond my wildest imagination, but I do want to put together a book of poetry. Again, Suzette, my deepest thanks to you, an inspirational teacher and friend.


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drbj 4 years ago from south Florida

I saw beauty in your poetry, Amy, in your description of the crystalline snowflakes, each unique and different, yet melding/melting together in the end. I also saw deep sadness because they are transitory and fragile and die at the end.

But that is the story of life, from the moment we are born we live until we die. So do live for the moment but know that your brilliant poetry will NEVER die. Promise!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Oh, drbj, you are so beautiful. Thank you. Yes, death is inevitable, but though the snow melts, all we know is that it goes back into the earth, maybe to live on as a life source for the trees or grass or flowers nearby. Just as we don't know about the hereafter until we die, I do believe in eternity, whatever that may be. And, while we are alive, the fact that there is ultimately death, means I don't want to waste a moment. Even if I'm doing nothing, I want to enjoy that moment rather than feel guilty for doing nothing. I don't take life for granted anymore, esp friends, family, pets...everything. Thank you so much for your magnificent descriptive words, drbj. You always inspire and motivate me, and more than that, you make me feel like nothing is impossible. Trust me...you make a world of difference on my outlook.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and beautiful. Marvelous words the image of frosty, silvery snowflakes and being united in heart and soul. Wonderful and passing this on.


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

I don't know how or where we dropped off commenting on each others work. This piece literally floored me as your metaphors were so crystal clear and melted on my soul as they hit the page. Souls being compared to snowflakes is brilliant. I often felt that when we passed we became like meteorites and shooting stars blasting through the universe of time and forever eternal.

I totally agree with your thinking to live for the moment and enjoy every waking hour so when we do sleep we can have pleasant dreams of our day's events. Life is so darn short and like a flash we are gone, melting snowflakes being tossed and blown around until we finally hit the ground and melt into the earth to become one again with it.

Amy I pray you this comment finds you well. I know you have had many struggles these past couple of years with loss. Please forgive me and accept my apologies for being tardy on reading your great work. You are a brilliant creative writer/artist and poet. My blessings this day go out to you. Hugs to you my friend.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Gypsy girl. I am grateful for your gift to me regarding the specifics of this piece that you liked. I can't think of a more rewarding way to learn. Bless you, my sweet friend.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Ken, for the kindness of your message. I thought maybe I had, unintentionally, left a comment to you that somehow seemed thoughtless. It is a peril of the written word since the nuances of verbal expression are lost here. I am relieved to know this is not the case.

I am thrilled to see that you understand my "snowflake" metaphor and am grateful that you have given me your time and attention to do so. Every comment is a gift in the discussions that raise my level of sensitivity and awareness, not only as inspiration for my work, but an appreciation of the brilliant minds that comprise my friends, a family, here at the hub. The kind generosity I receive is a source of hope for me. Your words lift me up and encourage me to keep writing. Through you, Vincent, and everyone here, I have found what makes me feel alive, vital and good about myself. The world looks bright, promising and infinitely full of hope, with endless possibilities. Thank you for that, my friend.


Ausseye 4 years ago

Hi Amy Parrallel: I feel like I am standing in the very heart of the artic, snow swelling around and I am left seeking to ponder my fate. And your poem is responsible. The warm pleasure of your pros melts the crystal ice coming my way and brings a teardrop of passion for my appreciation. It must be rewarding to be able to bring such a brilliant soul to your expression that sends our ( the readers) senses to points where we experience a new level of thrill. Love your work.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Ausseye, You bring a new level of thrill with the reward of your soulful expression to me with words that leave me feeling like I am standing atop a mountain right now. Nothing could make me happier than the positive message you've left me, which will sustain me whenever I have doubts. Thank you so much, Ausseye, for powerful words that will give me courage forever.


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Jlava73 4 years ago from Cyberspace and My Own World

I can clearly imagine you and your friend as parallel snowflakes drifting together through time and space. Your mind is Brilliant and Beautiful Amy and your talent extraordinary - life can be brutal and unkind and your friend is lucky to have your devotion to lift her up when she needs it most.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

You are too kind, Jlava. Thank you for your confidence boosting words to me. The way I see things, I am the lucky one, as my best friend is always there for me, right by my side, as I am for her. We are both fortunate to have recognized when destiny put our paths next to each other. With Laura as my friend and I her's, we are never alone in life.


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Amy,

You are amazing in talent and beautiful in your heart. One can always tell much about another just by seeing their heart shine so brilliantly, especially went it is always an outpouring of love to others. This world is a brutal place to be, and we all can make a choice to either just walk by another one in trouble, or stop to lend a hand. Very powerful poem dear one. Voted Way Up to the Heavens, except funny. God bless you. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Faith, Thank you for your inspiring words. It's funny, Faith, because although I know that everything is a choice, in some ways, I can't just walk away. I wouldn't be able to sleep at night if I intentionally made the choice to turn away from any living entity that I could help, even in a very small way, My best friend and I are different personalities, but share in our level of compassion for all living things. We are not only always "there" to support each other, we balance each other. My life would be so much less without her. She is, literally, a blessing, and beyond any organized religion, tells me beyond a shadow of a doubt, God's love exists. I've come to believe that we find God in each other, rather than a church. Thank you, Faith, for the gift of your beautiful words to me.


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b. Malin 4 years ago

This Poem sounds like it came from a very Strong Woman, who has seen her share, and held her own...Who has been a Giver, as well as a Taker...Life is what we make it, whatever that might be.

Amy, I know look forward to Following your Hubs.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

b. Malin, You've made my day and I'm headed over to your space. I can't wait to read your work. Thank you so much!


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RobinGrosswirth23 4 years ago from New York

We do live in a parallel universe. If we are fortunate, we get to see that life doesn't have to be an isolating experience and that there are others who have similar experiences (hearts unite as you beautifully stated).


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Robin. It is a slice of Heaven to be accepted and loved for oneself, without pretense, and not only in spite of imperfections, but because of them. It's like looking into God's eyes.

Thank you for your visit, Robin, and your profound comment.


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Docmo 4 years ago from UK

Only from a heart as vast as yours can spring such a message of love and support from the comforting thought of lives united in parallel flight. The swirling image of snowflakes conjure the landscape of bleak midwinter; the chaotic Gods play celestial chess with destinies; knowing there are lives in parallel, sculpted out of hope and a mutual handhold of support and understanding is what make humanity go forth with united hearts. Your words, as ever. Are a magical medley of a musical meteor shower.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Docmo, not only for your encouraging message, but some brilliant metaphors of your own; "chaotic gods play celestial chess with destinies" is graphic precision I wished I'd conjured, specificially the idea of playing a game of celestial chess...it's brilliant, Mohan. When I think about the gift of your inspiring words, handed to me straight from your brilliant mind, it blows my mind. You've got my brain firing with new inspiration. Thank you, Mohan.


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

A beautfful poem and wonderful declaration of friendship. I know it will bring comfort where there is little to be had.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, xstatic. My friend, Laura, found it and she cried telling me "She loves it." In the best of times and the worst of times, having someone special to share everything with matters. My BFF makes the good, even better, and the bad, bearable. At those times, when there is little comfort, we are "there" for each other.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon

Well done amy. I have a hard time rhyming two lines together without sounding trite yet you always manage to rhyme the same sounds in your work and each one sounds fresh and new. Nice work.


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Amy Becherer 3 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Oh, PDXKaraoke, your words start my new year on a resounding note! Thank you so much. Peace in 2013, my writer friend.


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CrazedNovelist 3 years ago from Hampton, GA

Loved this like always Amy. :) You have a way with words ;) By the way I LOVE your song choice... My Immortal is an awesome song... Evanescence... I haven't heard from them in a while. Do you remember Amy Lee winning a Grammy for that song?


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Amy Becherer 3 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I actually asked my BFF, who lives in N. Carolina, for help in choosing the music to accompany this piece. She gave me several suggestions, as she is in the entertainment business (a singer). My Immortal is one of her favs, too. I am ashamed to admit I had never heard the song before Laura told me about it. I love it. Makes me wonder what else I've been missing in the vast world of music? I actually do worry about living my whole life and missing something as awesome as that song.

Love your visits and comments, Aubrey. You always make me feel philosophical. Hugs to you, my sweet friend.

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