A Rap Rant

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The Smoking Confessional of an Ageing Hipster:


Bored are we

who childishly

surrender sanity

to shun reality.

In the shade of a tree,

back to bowers

and hours

and not forget

flowers.

And fishing

and wishing

and chopping

and plopping.

When thoughts swirl

an unfolding whirl

of unbegotten

images flow

into the caves

where such thoughts go.

Is it any better that instead

they go here on the page

as I pluck them

from the flow?

As the pages fill with

un-notable observations

on the life of the writer

with low self esteem?

The lost youth of Bridgette

combined with the mental

-------- of a midge.

Won't want to rhyme

and expose the crime

of the whine

about nothing at all.

Leaves in the fall

grass left uncut.

Moss in the well.

Doors are all shut.

Painting a sound

that is truly profound.

Master the monster

and then move on.

To dwell in the entrails

would really be wrong.




Moon softly calls

to a different song.

My lovely friend Bobby

has known all along.

Something in the earth shifted

as the stock market crashed.

The bank lost our Billions

Thrown RSP's to a tither.

I need a small bench

and maybe a wrench.

I need a nice hunch

and maybe some lunch.

Life is a twitter,

no time to be bitter

Love it or leave it

It won't get much

brillianter.

Yes Eminem you showed

us Whiteys the way,

But then so did Ginsberg

So let's not be fey.

I pray (do I pray?)

the days away,

play away.



The yawn of the hours

without powers,

the stalemate

of the soul,

when finding our self

was next to Godliness.

The bottom line?

Ignore it and it will

go away.

A moment to say

It's better this way,

than all wrapped in

lines, and lines

that don't rhyme,

and won't take the time

to get it right.

In the light

such a sight,

the light,

a celebration

in the night.

Sweet moonlight bright,

a tonic alright.

This poem is turning into

such a fright.

Most undeniably light-weight

and un-wondrous.

How did Sylvia command

her dark hand?

How did her esteem

intervene?

What would you call

her rhyming scheme?

Is it free?

Is it verse?

Is it drawn by a hearse?

Is it wordy and concise?

Is it a puzzle

to be answered twice?

Is it trickey poetic device?

Who is it for?

Why isn't there more?

Did she burn all the evidence?


Weary now with this pen.

I write it and then,

I write it again.

Over and over

the years coming in.

A whirl and a swirl

contained in my pen.

Gets sloppy, then choppy,

then sinks again

into nosey Neighbor

sighting poet,

in the garden again.

Poet sighted with a pen,

gifted in the ways of when.

A tool for every now and Zen.

In Chinese?

Maybe not worth a Yuan.

I procrastinate,

vegetate,

ruminate, hesitate.

Writing has no redeeming social value?

Is it just a pathological

putting lines on paper?

So I've been told.

But I hold,

I grow cold

with that interpretation.

Limiting myself to the positive,

I absolve to live by

the voice in my head.

In the spirit

of Georgia O'Keeffe.

Amen.

It's all too much,

my brain is weary.

The "how to"

eludes me.

Enjoying a full retreat.

The quiet seat,

in the sun lit

winter garden.

Dear God thank you for pardon!

For allowing this reprieve

from cares and woes.

I stoop to bow to thee

And thank you sweet Lord

for all you've given me.


Comments 42 comments

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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Photographer, poet, family historian, what other talents do you have in store to share. Short stories and a novel?

This moved right along, a lot on your mind, a lot made to rhyme. And a lot to think about.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Ah Thank you mckbirdbks for having a look! I was so pleased to find a "poem" I had written that was long enough.


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

It is one of the few poems that does not have a introduction paragraph.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Haha...that is why I was so happy to find the right length, let it explain itself...


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

This came right off the page as it was written two years ago, I left out a few lines, it was too long.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

I lied mckbirdbks, it was three years ago.


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

haha now i'll be suspicious of every word:)


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

I wanted to do a music video with, but didn't know if allowed.


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

Hi there,

Lots to ponder and read on this wonderful poem..filled with lots of turns and deep thoughts. Great job..

Take care,

Sunnie


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

I don't think I have seen a music video on any of the pieces that had 'contest' as a tag. So, no one is sure.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you so much Sunnie Day for giving it a shot. I guess I could have used some footnotes to help with that. Let's see, There's mention of Bobby Zimmerman, Sylvia Plath, ummm, a neighbor who shall remain nameless, and hmmm, that's probably it!


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

I never thought of foot notes..I should have used some in my hubs as well..hahaha.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

I'm so happy Sunnie, that you spend time visiting when I just saw your note that you've had a long fun day and ready for some shut eye, thank you again!


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

No, Epi just used footnotes in his 'Long Gone John'


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Hey mckbirdbks, thanks for scouting it out. You're the best.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

I've just re-read your first comment mckbirdbks. In answer to that question, what it is I do, I had to go and dabble in everything just a little, like a Jack (a Jill) of all trades. So now I know a little about a lot of things and not enough about anything.


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hello snakeslane. Listened to any experts lately? Knowing a little about a lot is the only way to go.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Well good. I will fit right in.


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ubanichijioke 5 years ago from Lagos

A sweet, sad and emotional rap poem. Lol

love the flow and play on words and felt like rapping along. Awesome!


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

you aready have


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Really urbanichijioke? Your words are music to my ears! I wrote this one full moon night when I was "house-sitting" at a beautiful waterfront property with gorgeous gardens stretching out in all directions in the moonlight. It was January, so not much growing, but the mood of the place was heavenly and I guess I caught that spirit. I was also relieved to be away from my own situation where a neighbour kept pushing all boundaries and would ambush me every time I went out in the yard. Thanks for checking out my rant, so happy made you feel like rapping along.


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cashmere 5 years ago from India

I suppose such beautiful surroundings had to be so inspiring. Beautiful poem. Thank you for reading my story as well.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Hi cashmere, I enjoyed your story it was beautiful. Thank you for taking the time to visit me.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

You are a wordsmith who cares a lot about picking up a word to convey desired meaning. I very much loved the interplay of words. I whirl and swirl into the labyrinthine and then see the beautiful dawn.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Hello Vinaya Ghimire, there is a lot of swirling and whirling to get through in this rant, thank you for your kind comment.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon

wow. love it Eminem would be proud!


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Thanks PDXKaraokeGuy I coulda used him here for backup.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon

I'm quite the rapper myself. my karaoke name is White Chocolate!


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Really? White Chocolate? That is cool, PDXKaraokeGuy... now I am embarrased about my rap song.


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epigramman 5 years ago

...superb writing all the way to the hub bank - if the pure expression of poetry writing were to be rewarded by dollar signs you would become a billionaire with this epic piece - a poetic manifesto, if you will, and I really did appreciate the cultural references, especially Georgia O'Keefe, my favorite painter of flowers. lake erie time 1:54pm


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Aww, thank you epigramman man! We have a mutual admiration society going on this morning (morning here, time change has me boggled). a billionairess poet, that would be something to see!


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jhamann 5 years ago from Reno NV

I feel a connection with this poem, at times I feel like it is retelling of a life I have lived and things I have loved, (like Ginsberg, and Plath poems and painings by O'Keefe.) Thank you.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Hi Jhamann, so happy you could connect with what's being told in this rap song/rant. There's a lot of disconnected thoughts going on, but hopefully if you get the references that brings it together some. This may be a tribute to the poets that give me inspiration. Music, poetry and art go hand in hand in my chaotic ramblings.


Derdriu 4 years ago

Snakeslane, What a determined, hypnotic, relentless poetic rap! In particular, the ironic philosophy, the rhyming words, and the striking words all work to communicate the emotions and experiences which both encourage and frustrate writing.

Thank you for sharing, etc.,

Derdriu


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Derdrui, I throw those words right back at you for your determined, hypnotic, relentless poetic comments on so many of my Hubs! Thank you so much.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

never be embarrassed!


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Too late...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

well, alright


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DREAM ON 4 years ago

I checked out this rap right before bed now it will play in my mind all night long.Wonderful work.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Dream On, Thank You! Your comment makes me smile... sweet dreams.


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epigramman 3 years ago

....this is epic writing my sensational Snakeslane and one of my favorites by you - there is much be admired here because it takes me on a poetic journey to different places in my mind through yours ....

and I'm quite sure Lenny would approve too - sending you warm wishes from the cold wind chills of lake erie time 12:59am and listen to Sly and the Family Stone and havin' a funky good time


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Hey Epi epic is such a wonderful compliment. Thanks for bringing me back to the rant.

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