Meeting Lizbeth - Chapter One

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Nighttime

He held her in his arms and rocked her as he sang. His voice was soft for such a big man. She loved him so much she sometimes thought her ten-year-old heart would break. Every night they were alone in her room while he sang and rocked. The strength in his arms made her feel safe and loved. He was her whole world and everything she did she did to please him.

She knew her mother was in the next room performing her nighttime rituals. Washing, no cleansing her face, as her mother had corrected her many times.

"You need to take care of your beauty little girl because it will fade soon enough."

Her mother always called her "little girl." Her mother spent more time getting ready for bed than she did sleeping in it! Of course, she had to have her eight hours no matter what. If she put less makeup on in the morning, then she'd have less to take off at night. Lizbeth wasn't really complaining. She was happy her mother was in the next room because she had her dad all to herself, every night at least for a little while.

Her favorite was songs from the Five Pennies, the movie she had watched with her Daddy. When he finished singing he gently kissed her head and laid her in her bed.

"Daddy loves his little girl from now to eternity."

She replied, "and all the way back Daddy." They both giggled and kissed each other goodnight. Oh' how she loved him!

Her Mother

In the next room, her mother was totally oblivious to the tender scene between father and daughter. Actually, she couldn't care less. She had consented to the adoption ten years ago to keep him quiet. All he ever talked about was having a daughter of his own. A little girl to love and watch grow. He dreamed of watching her learn about life and finally of walking her down the aisle. It was all he talked about. Louise didn't want to have children and was not disappointed when she learned her body didn't either.

"Mrs. Sanders, I'm sorry but you won't ever be able to have children. Your fallopian tubes are blocked so that your husband's sperm cannot meet and fertilize your eggs. We could try to surgically correct the problem but I'm afraid it would be futile in your case."

That was what the doctor had said. She tried to hide her elation from the doctor, playing the poor victim. She told her husband how sad and unfair it was, but she couldn't have children.

He was heartbroken but comforted his wife, knowing how horrible she must feel. It was hard to look sad over something that gave her so much joy, but she pulled it off. After several years of listening to him go on and on about the daughter he wanted to have and how they could adopt like so many millions of others, she gave in. She knew they could afford a nanny and hoped she wouldn't have to spend too much of her precious time with someone else's child.

She had married him because he was absolutely gorgeous and being rich didn't hurt. His blonde hair laid in waves all over his head and his blue eyes were like looking into the ocean. He was over six feet tall and there wasn't a body part that didn't have muscles. He carried himself with regal dignity. Oh, he was a little soft-hearted but that just added to his appeal. She didn't know back then that all he wanted in life was children and back then she wouldn't have cared. Being Mrs. Tom Sanders was all she wanted. She really did love him in her own Louise Porter way.

Her Father

He'd always loved children. He was an only child and felt the loss of having siblings. He spent many a lonely hour wishing for a brother or sister. He vowed when he married he'd have tons of kids.

When he'd met Louise, he was taken by her beauty. She could be cold at times, but he knew that came from her wealth and being an only child. He knew because he was an only child. Their courtship had been short. The wedding was a huge, political affair. After all, any Sanders - Porter wedding was a social event with payback to favors owed. His family had money and so did hers. The society pages were full of articles and pictures about both of them and their wedding made the front page. None of that mattered to him. He was in love with Louise and was looking forward to their life together with their own family.

Louise could be difficult at times, but she was such a beautiful woman. Her long auburn hair swayed when she moved her head. It was almost fluid. It had fair hair woven in with the darker chestnut strands making it shine so much it almost glowed. Her brown eyes were copper colored. They sometimes sparkled like a new penny. Her features were small and perfect all making her a vision to behold. She knew how to dress to show off her figure, just on the edge of sexy. He was such a lucky man.

Until the day she came home from the doctor's office and said she couldn't have children. He felt a cold pain shoot through his heart. This couldn't be. All he'd ever dreamed about was a house filled with children and now none! Oh is heart ached. He reached for Louise to comfort her, but she seemed oddly composed. He chalked it up to her love for him, not wanting him to see her pain. That wasn't the smartest thought he'd ever had.

As time went on he realized, she had no love for children and not being able to have any was a blessing to her. It was as much of a blessing to her as it was a curse to him. He thought about it day and night. He tried to decide if he wanted a boy or a girl. If he had a choice which would he choose? All the while their life went on. New house, new car, social events, even sex, but still he felt empty. He started talking to her about adopting. At first she was adamant if she couldn't have children of her own she didn't want any. Why would she want a stranger's child in her home and in her life? He was not giving up though and brought it up every chance he had. He had decided he wanted a girl. He talked of the great love they had that they could share with a child. How a child's laughter would fill their empty home. He even said they could hire a nanny if it would make it easier for her.

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I would appreciate your comments about Chapter One to help guide me with future chapters. This is my introduction to Lizbeth, a character I have written about two times before.

Chapter One Part II

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Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

her mother's rather banal prose doesn't do justice to the anguished content, she consented to the adoption for all the wrong reasons but this introduction is honest and moving ... please keep me posted when the next installment comes out.. I keep finding most of Hub's alerts in spam... Frank


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marcoujor 23 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

Well, it's been a long time since I have been so entranced with such a story line, dear Mary...in fact, it may be as far back as 'Gone With The Wind'...so I am hereby naming you my modern day Margaret Mitchell.

Your writing style has a way of drawing me in from the very first sentence and you never let me go. I grow attached to your characters in a very personal way (hmmm, sounds like a certain Mr, Friedman around here...??)

I want more please... any time you're ready!!

Voted UP & UABI and sharing. Have a peaceful weekend. Love and hugs, Maria


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Yes Frank, mother Louise is certainly not a model mother. I will let you know when the next installment is out. Thank you for the kind words.

Maria you do turn a girl's head. Margaret Mitchell.....oh how I wish. Mike Friedman? Another great probably out of my reach too, his writing is just so marvelous. Well you've put me in great company now I'll have to climb the ladder and see if I can reach their feet!

Thanks so much for the votes and shares. Sending love and hugs right back to you my friend.


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klidstone1970 23 months ago from Niagara Region, Canada

Boy, that woman's cold. You definitely painted her in that light, Mary, leaving your readers wanting more. Keep them coming! Best wishes, Kim.


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billybuc 23 months ago from Olympia, WA

Chapter one??? Is this a book? If so I am thrilled! Love the story. Intriguing, honest, flows well, good word choice, good characterization...you've got it all so far, my friend. Carry on!


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Phyllis Doyle 23 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

Oh - yes, Mary, do continue on with Lisbeth's story. The love between father and daughter can have a great influence on Louise's heart and the relationship between mother and daughter. I am anxious to see which direction this story goes. Well done, Mary - carry on.

Up and shared.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Kim sometimes great beauty comes with a cold heart....I may have to use that line. I'm hoping to keep 'me coming. Have a good weekend.

Bill you have made my day! Yes, it's that story that's been rattling around in my head and could be my novel. Your praise is all the encouragement I need to start writing more. Thank you.

Oh Phyllis, thank you. It is exciting to think you want to know more about my story.


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always exploring 23 months ago from Southern Illinois

Wow Mary, that is one coldhearted woman! She has everything except the most important aspect, that's love for a child. I really like this story. Your description of Louise was so detailed, I was able to see her in my mind's eye. See ya next time.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

It's funny Always exploring, I was afraid I didn't say enough. Thanks for stopping by and more importantly for wanting to come back!


Ghaelach 23 months ago

Good evening Mary.

Hope it isn't to cold for you in up-state NY.

You have me at a stage where I've got to turn the page to carry on, but there's no page. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Take care Mary and have a nice weekend.

Ghaelach


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bravewarrior 23 months ago from Central Florida

It's a good think Lizbeth's daddy loves her and makes her feel special. Does she sense her mother doesn't love her? I don't think I like her mother which makes her an interesting character.

I'll be following this story, Mary. I'm curious to see what kind of adult Lizbeth becomes.


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Sunshine625 23 months ago from Orlando, FL

Doctors aren't perfect, they make mistakes do. Miracles happen. Nice to meet you Lizbeth, hopefully your mother lightens up! :)


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Gaeltacht it's freezing here but I'm staying indoors writing ;). So glad you enjoyed, I just hope I can keep up the momentum.

Sha I don't think Lizbeth likes her mother either. I'm sure Louise will be a doozy. Thanks so much for reading.

If anyone knows about doctors fallibility it's you Linda. As for the mother, time will tell.


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mckbirdbks 23 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hello Mary. You have given us sketches of three unique characters. One is too hot, one is too cold, and one perhaps just right. Now build the sets and imbue fire into them. You can take us in so many different directions. Anxiously waiting for more.


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BlossomSB 23 months ago from Victoria, Australia

This beginning has caught my interest and I'm looking forward to finding out more about this family.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Hi Mike. Perhaps they are the modern day three bears. I hope I can build that fire and keep your interest.

Thanks Blossom, hope they will continue to intrigue you.


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PegCole17 23 months ago from Dallas, Texas

Mary, This great beginning to your story makes me want more. Your development of the characters is really setting the stage for what I imagine will be a whirlwind of twists and turns. Hooray for this enticing chapter one. Awesome and beautiful, that's for sure. Oh, and I loved the music.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Flattered that you enjoyed my story Peg as I love your writing. I used to sing my kids the songs from The Five Pennies so it was a no brainer to put it in here.


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PegCole17 23 months ago from Dallas, Texas

You are one that has always supported my fiction, Mary, and it has really kept me going in times of doubt. You are truly talented and a gifted writer. Keep 'em coming. I'll keep reading. Here's to getting our novels published this year!


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thanks Peg. Our mutual admiration and respect will hopefully take us both to the top! Thanks Again dear friend.


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DDE 23 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

You have shared such an interesting and well written story. A perfect way in showing your true talent.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thank you DD, glad you enjoyed.


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mary615 23 months ago from Florida

I'm glad I read this Hub, but wish I had read it before the next chapter. I'll be trying to keep up with your story. I'm anxious to see if the Mother lightens up and begins to love this little girl.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Time will tell Mary. Louise is an odd character for sure.


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fpherj48 23 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Til...Part I is marvelous. I love it.....the story, the characters, your wonderful writing style....I floated through it's entirety.

Already, I want to hug their precious daughter...and kidnap her and her handsome sweet Daddy, to take them away from Broomhilda-I love-myself-who-do-you-love?

But....I don't really know what's coming, do I? Chomping at the bit...I'm going straight to Part II. So far so Fab, girlfriend! Up++++


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MartieCoetser 23 months ago from South Africa

Mary, I enjoyed this first chapter and look forward reading the rest :)


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

It seems Paula, that great minds do indeed think alike, but....I love yourself too. Tom's a great guy for sure.

Thanks Martie glad you enjoyed.


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fpherj48 23 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Hey GF...I did not realize you were welcoming notation of corrections on open comment...(which I probably wouldn't so anyway).....Check your email Mrs. Craig.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Will do my friend.


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Genna East 23 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

Hi Mary. I don’t often read stories with ongoing installments (Mike – Mckbirdbks - is one of a few exceptions), but, as with Mike’s skillful writing, this one had me immediately hooked. You pulled us in, right out of the gate, and held us with compelling character development and storyline. I look forward to reading more, and am on my way to CH II. :-)


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thank you so much Genna. I'm hoping I can keep up the momentum as these characters are now living in my brain!


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Jodah 23 months ago from Queensland Australia

This is a very good start to a story Mary. I know I am late reading it an you have already written some more chapters, but I'll get there. This was well written and draws the reader in. Beats me how Tom ever married Louise though..seems all she has is looks and money.. well I guess that is enough for some people :) Anyway, voted up. Well done.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Jodah, always good to see you here. Thanks for the compliments. There could be more to Louise, we never know.


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Jo_Goldsmith11 23 months ago

I very much enjoy reading this beautiful saga about the father and daughter relationship. You have really done a beautiful job and I look forward to reading your part two! :-)

Shared and vote for: awesome, beautiful, interesting, and you are one of a kind! :-)


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Oh Jo, I appreciated but laughed at your comment "you are one of a kind". When I was in third grade my teacher (a nun) told me I was a unique individual...still smiling. Thanks for the votes and share.


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Faith Reaper 23 months ago from southern USA

Dear Mary,

You are one extraordinaire storyteller! This one hooks us right from the start and, as dear Maria stated, does not let us go. I could feel the tenderness and sweetness in the relationship between the daughter and daddy, so touching. Maybe he chose a little girl to love for eternity because he knew the love between he and his wife was one-sided, being she loves herself so much?

I am catching up here, and see you have been publishing away, dear lady.

Up ++++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

Excellent!


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Thank you for taking the time to go back and read. It will be interesting to see where this whole thing goes. I hope you keep reading. Thanks so much for the votes and shares!


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pstraubie48 22 months ago from sunny Florida

A good way to judge if a piece of writing is worth the time is if you want to know 'more, what's next."

And clearly I do.

I am off to read the next Chapter.

I am not huge book critic by any means but perhaps more dialogue would add more interest...just a thought. Off to read Chapter 2.

Angels are on the way....voted up+++ g+ shared ps


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annart 22 months ago from SW England

You've got me hooked, Mary! I'm rather behind with reading hubs at the moment so I'm catching up on this story. I don't usually go for 'chapters' but I knew yours would be good. You don't disappoint.

Off to read the next now.

Ann


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tobusiness 22 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

This promises to be a very enjoyable read, a real pleasure so far, but I must admit to reading chapter II first. Interesting characters, looking forward to seeing where you take it next.


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aviannovice 22 months ago from Stillwater, OK

Lead on, Mary…so far, so good!


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Patricia I am certainly open to any suggestions that might improve my work. Glad you enjoyed and appreciate your votes and shares. Thanks for the angels, I hope they're coming your way as well.

I've been away for three days Ann so I'm a bit behind too. I'm so thrilled you enjoyed!

tobusiness it makes me feel good to know you're enjoying reading.

Thank you Deb. Hope I don't disappoint.


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btrbell 22 months ago from Mesa, AZ

Hi Mary! I am a little late to this party but must say I am intrigued! Lucky for me, I can sail right through chapters 1 and 2! I am looking forward to reading more! Up+, my friend!


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Never too late Randi, always welcome. Hope your intrigue continues as you read on my friend.


Lesleysherwood 21 months ago

Awe man... she sounds such a b...ch. Silly man going for looks alone! Can't wait to hear what's going to happen next. I hope she's not horrible to the girl, but then again, we need tragedy in fiction. Excellent hub, voted up and shared.


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tillsontitan 21 months ago from New York Author

Lesley, he's not the type to marry for looks alone. He knows there's a good person somewhere in there. Glad you want to know more.


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Nell Rose 21 months ago from England

Hi Mary, loved the story, and I can see you have already done part two? just found this on facebook, so I already love it!


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tillsontitan 21 months ago from New York Author

Thanks for starting at one. Hope you enjoy.


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Homeplace Series 20 months ago from Hollister, MO

I'm late arriving, but happy that I did. Thanks for sharing this very interesting story... ;-)

I see lots of possibilities... will be interesting to see which way it goes... ;-)


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tillsontitan 20 months ago from New York Author

Thank you William. I enjoy your writing so much it means a lot to me to have you say my story is interesting.


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Melissa Orourke 20 months ago from Roatán, Islas De La Bahia, Honduras

Your description brings life to the words. Easy to picture Louise. I will continue reading with pleasure!


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tillsontitan 20 months ago from New York Author

Thank you Melissa. I hope you continue to enjoy.


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cam8510 19 months ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

I enjoyed the beginning of this story very much. I'll be back for more.


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tillsontitan 19 months ago from New York Author

So glad to have you on board Chris. Hope you enjoy the whole story!

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