A Terrible Dream, or Was It? An Answer to Billybuc's Challenge to Write a Dream Sequence

Eagle Flying

She had the speed of an eagle on the currents and an eagle's eyes as well.
She had the speed of an eagle on the currents and an eagle's eyes as well. | Source

In the Dark of Night

The children. She had to protect the children. That horrible man was there again watching them and glaring. He eyed them up and down and seemed to be willing himself to suck their life. Who was he? Why was he here? Before she could answer her own questions he was gone....and with him the children.

She could let anything happen to herself but not the children. She had to protect them and save them from danger. She began hunting for the man but every road was a dead end. No matter which street she picked there was no way out. Turning around and going back street after street making no progress.

She knew it was futile to continue trying that way so she took to the air. When she flapped her arms she began to rise off the ground. The harder she flapped the higher she went. Once she was up above all the buildings she could allow herself to glide on the wind while her eyes searched the ground below. She had the speed of an eagle on the currents and an eagle's eyes as well. She could see the smallest details so far below.

It was dark, darker than any night she'd ever known and yet she could see the faces below her. Some with evil shining in their eyes, others with no life in their eyes at all. Some were worried, some were sad, it was all in their eyes. She didn't recognize this world but she knew this was where he had taken the children. She wanted to cry. Her heart hurt so bad for the children but she knew she didn't have time to weep or feel sorry for anyone. She had to keep flying. She had to find him before something bad happened.

The Noise

She heard a loud noise. Was it a bang or a shot? She wasn't sure but it woke her immediately. She sat straight up in bed and realized she had been dreaming that terrible dream again. It came so often and the terror of it left her cold and fearful. She had to protect her children and couldn't imagine the helplessness she always felt in the dream.

Flying was not only her way to find the children but it seemed it was her escape from an evil world. A world where she had no control but to get away. Why was she having this dream more and more frequently? She ran to each of the children's rooms peeking in to make sure they were safe in their beds. She chuckled when she got to Tommy's room as she saw him almost hanging off the bed. He was a restless sleeper and she never knew what position he would be in.

She tried to quietly sneak into Tommy's room but he opened one eye. "Mommy, is Daddy here?" "No, not tonight" she said and covered him up. Since her husband David had left three months ago it had been hard to explain to the boys where he was. She wasn't going to tell them that their beloved father had left them for a younger woman, how could she? They adored their father but she knew better. She knew his dark side and knew how selfish he could be. Of course she was afraid he would try to take the boys away from her, he was that spiteful. Though she knew it she couldn't understand it. He was the one who had left them, she had done nothing. He was the one looking for a better life, without her and the children. How could he think life would be better without his children and that was what scared her.

What if he realized life couldn't be better without his children? What if he decided he wanted his boys with him? The bang she heard this time was her heart against her rib cage. Thumping and beating harder as it filled with fear. That was her fear, the fear of losing her children.

The Christmas Party

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The Other Woman

Delia worked with David. She'd met Delia several times and knew David had worked a lot more overtime in the last year but thought it was just because he had been promoted and needed to prove himself. Delia was his assistant and needed to work with him. He always called to tell her he'd be working late and would have dinner out. The boys resented his absence but she explained Daddy had to work and didn't like being away from them any more than they liked it.

The day she found the lipstick stains on his shirt made her think it was too cliché. She remembered hearing that old song, "Lipstick on Your Collar", how silly. She actually shrugged it off telling herself she was overreacting. Things might have been okay and they were, until she found a pair of lace undies in his pocket. Then she knew. The sweat on her palms and that pounding of her heart told her this was serious and David was cheating. She mulled it over in her mind for days. How could he? Didn't he care about his family? What should she do? Should she confront him or just ask him? It was a terrible time filled with anger, loathing, and sadness. Thirteen years of marriage shouldn't come to this. Then she thought about the other woman.

She searched her mind for other women in their lives and no one they associated with would fit the bill. She thought about the women he worked with and, Delia! Of course that had to be who it was. She was his personal assistant and he did nothing without her. Well, obviously he did nothing without her. How could she be so blind? That young thing hung on David's every word. Even at the office Christmas party with all the wives there, Delia followed David around like a puppy. She'd shrugged it off as a crush. Seems she did a little too much shrugging! Delia was a new girl, good looking boss, those things often happen. She never thought David would return the feelings. She and David had been solid. Oh he had his dark side and when he was angry his temper flared out of control, but that was part of David. She was always able to keep the boys away from him when he was like that. Most of the time he was a loving husband and father. That's the part that didn't make sense. He was always a loving husband and father. He still made love to her. How could he being making love to two women? Well, it didn't matter what she thought, he was.

What Happens Next?

All of this looking back did no good now. The break up had been ugly and David said cruel and hurtful things. He said Delia was refreshing and full of life, not an old housewife. He blamed her for not keeping him interested. He never really mentioned the boys which scared her more. He moved out late at night though, not wanting the boys to see. Now that she thought about it, that's when the dream started, the night he moved out The man stealing the children in her dream was David!

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billybuc 24 months ago from Olympia, WA

Excellent response to the challenge, Mary. Thank you so much for trying this. I think we grow as writers when we are willing to try that which we've never tried before. It might make us uncomfortable, but it does force us to grow. Well done my friend.


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annart 24 months ago from SW England

I love the flying sequence and it's a scary dream. I think we've all had dreams which include some sort of flying, especially as kids, some good, some bad. You conveyed the idea excellently and the photo of the eagle was perfect.

I've had similar fears and still think 'what if..?', should anything happen to my children or grandchildren, accidents or whatever. That's really scary and that is definitely the stuff that nightmares are made of.

Well done, Mary. Great dream sequence. You went one further than me and included the whole story. I'm not sure what the ending of mine is (that's one excuse to leave a cliffhanger!) but I'm thinking of continuing the story sometime.

Ann


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always exploring 24 months ago from Southern Illinois

Mary, I loved your story. The part about you flying was beautifully written. Funny how I could relate to the theme of your story, fear of losing a child to another woman is maddening. Well done!


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Faith Reaper 24 months ago from southern USA

This is certainly an interesting challenge and not an easy one. Losing one's children is without a doubt one of the worst fears one could have in this life ... which leads to disturbing dreams. Children do suffer most in divorce situations it seems, for the most part, really sad all the way around for all. I will never understand the reasons behind why anyone would leave their children, without even talking to them. Guess it just adds up to pure selfishness.

Blessings


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton

I could guess that if hr husband fought her for the children she'd fear he might win that's what triggered the nightmare... great write kept me so glued so yeah you hit the challenge head on Frank


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always exploring 24 months ago from Southern Illinois

Came back to watch the video. She sure could belt out a tearjerker. Great choice for this piece...Cheers...


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tillsontitan 24 months ago from New York Author

Bill, I wasn't sure I could pull this one off but I do believe these challenges teach us to grow as writers. Your compliment means the world to me.

Ann I probably shouldn't admit it but it is or rather was one of my dreams. Never knew why though. I'll be heading over to your story as soon as I finish here. I wasn't sure where to go with the ending, it kind of wrote itself.

Thanks Always exploring. Fear of losing your children for any reason could certainly drive you mad.

Thank you Faith. Our children are our lives as well as our responsibility. Any time they are threatened the Mama bear in us comes out, whether it's their father or the bully on the playground we'll defend and protect them no matter what the consequences.

Thank you Frank. This was a scary challenge for me but I knew I had to do it. So very glad you found it interesting enough to keep you glued. I am so flattered by your comment.

Who couldn't love Patsy? Thanks for coming back Always.


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Jodah 24 months ago from Queensland Australia

Well done Mary. The dream sequence fitted in perfectly and the story wouldn't be the same without it. I am sure a lot of women have similar dreams and worry about losing their children.


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tillsontitan 24 months ago from New York Author

Jodah, funny, I wrote the story around the dream sequence. I'm sure losing children scares other women too.


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bravewarrior 24 months ago from Central Florida

Mary, you did a great job with Bill's dream sequence challenge!

It's funny... for years I had flying dreams. Still do, occasionally. It's usually when someone is chasing me. I run and start treading air with my arms. Once I get to just above the treetops, I move my arms from front to back, kinda like swimming. I never seem to go higher than the treetops because when I do, I get butterflies in my belly. What's odd, is I never recall how I come back down to solid ground. I wake up once I know I've escaped danger.


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Genna East 24 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

Protecting our children…nothing is more paramount. No wonder she had this recurring dream about the fear of losing hers to David’s dark world and to Delia. This dream fits the circumstances of her life so well, Mary. Excellent story that truly meets Bill’s challenge. Voted way up.


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Nell Rose 24 months ago from England

Great story mary, and yes I can totally understand why she would dream this, what a great story for this challenge! loved it!


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tillsontitan 24 months ago from New York Author

Sha, me too! I guess most fiction is based in fact. I can't tell you how many times I dreamed I was flying. Now that you mention it, I don't ever remember landing either! I soared, high and low, far and wide like the wind. Funny how dreams are shared.

Thank you Genna. I wrote her circumstances around the dream but I'm glad it turned out well. Thanks for the votes too.

And thank you Nell. Glad you found this a good story for the challenge.


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Jo_Goldsmith11 24 months ago

wow! This is a very interesting read. It is so rich with details and held my interest from start to finish. I really like the way you bring your characters to life and it feels like you are right there experiencing it!

Up= awesome, interesting, beautiful! Shared & tweeted. :-)

blessings!


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tillsontitan 24 months ago from New York Author

Thanks so much Jo. Like most writers I never think I've written enough so its so good to hear it made the grade. I totally appreciate your votes and shares.


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mckbirdbks 23 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hello Mary. Sorry I am late, I could not find a landing field. (Ugh - bad joke) Your story is filled with the emotion that you poured into it. The fear of losing a child is my guess the number one position in every parents list of fears.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

That's okay Mike, glad you finally found it ;) For this person the fear of losing a child is the worst fear I can think of and I know many share that feeling.


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MartieCoetser 23 months ago from South Africa

Hi, Mary, what a horrible dream! And its instigator - your fear of losing your boys - is quite obvious.

My story is very much like yours, except my husband's choice at the end of the day. But either way, nothing hurts more like betrayed confidence. However, it does give us wings - we obtain the ability to look down on life, people and all issues.

Merry Christmas to you, Mary :)


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thanks Martie. Hope your Christmas was exceptional!


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marcoujor 23 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

Dear Mary,

I had the pleasure of reading all these beautiful comments after this spine tingling story of yours...

The dream was written with such intimate and precise detail - it's interesting that you were able to develop a personal dream of yours into this compelling piece.

Superbly written - voted UP and UABI and sharing.

Love and hugs, wishing you peace and joy in the new year, Maria


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fpherj48 23 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Well you soar pretty high with your fabulous writing too, GF......I'm glad you mentioned the dreams of flying. In a conscious state I have a morbid fear of heights. If & when I dream of flying....all I feel is fear and incredible panic and a literal feeling in my gut of dread. Tell me that's not weird.

You are not only a great writer but you have such guts...You have responded to nearly every challenge. I applaud you. I'm such a coward.

Thanks for this awesome Hub & for sharing your own dream. Tillie......."Happy New Year!


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Maria it was actually easy to write this one, I had to conjure up a cheating husband, but otherwise ;) Thanks for the wonderful votes and shares GF. I'm returning love and hugs as well as wishes for that wonderful New Year!

Paula, we all have our own irrational fears (mine is bees but I'm getting a little better), anyway, you are certainly not a coward. I've been lax due to the holidays and spending so much time with wonderful grandchildren. My five year old grandson is staying with me for two days so there'll be no writing no either. GF I wish you the very best New Year with a minimum of fears ;)


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aviannovice 23 months ago from Stillwater, OK

A very well done story. You certainly thought this one trough, and t shows.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thanks Deb. I guess it's true, write about what you know ;)


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Vellur 23 months ago from Dubai

A fantastic story, kept me spellbound. the dream was scary, but the good thing is that it was a dream and she did not lose her children in real life.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Of course Vellur, it was only a dream.....but then could it be premonition ;)


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The Examiner-1 23 months ago

That was a very imaginative and creative Mary story. It must have taken a little time to think up. I liked it very much. I voted it up,shared and pinned it.

Kevin


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thanks so much Kevin. Glad you liked it and certainly appreciate your votes and shares.


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Besarien 19 months ago

As a mom I can definitely relate to this kind of a nightmare as well as the fear behind it. Very moving story!


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tillsontitan 19 months ago from New York Author

Yes Besarien, once we become mothers our children are our top priority and there are many fears we deal with. Thank you for reading.


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AussieAdventure 14 months ago from Geelong VIC Australia

I really enjoyed this story. I wanted more and that's the mark of a good story teller. You read a good story and you don't want it to end. So I want more. Great read, well written.


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tillsontitan 14 months ago from New York Author

Thank you so much Aussie. I love that "edge of the seat" feeling. I appreciate your comments.

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