A Vicious Race

The Mid-Night Rose Princess

 

Mara, The Mid-Night Rose princess heard the footsteps outside the palace doors several seconds before Lord K’narf arrived. The warning gave her enough time to stand in a combatant position. A moment later, K’narf was waiting by the entrance, alert. He looked around the Royal Hall and noticed the littered bodies. Most of the dead were of his species, and that was too much for him to take.

Vampires exhibited characteristics superior to humans. Their superior hearing gave them the necessary advantage to sneak up on prey. However, looking around the room told a different story.

Mara, was five feet four and weighed just about 130 pounds, but she stood much taller, and looked far more formidable than her mere stats suggested. Her hair was light brown and cropped back to keep it out of her fair-skinned face. No blemishes, but she did have battle scars. Men in the village found the scars to be very attractive. But because of Lord K’narf’s vampires invading the village, she never had the time to seek out a permanent mate.

” Lord K’narf,” she said relaxed. ” Wondering why your soldiers were defeated?”

The vampire lord shook his head. ” It was not my intention to misjudge you Mara. This was merely a test of your developments. We have no shame in failure.”

” Not yet,” Mara said. ” But when I defeat you, it’s not the shame you need to worry about…it’s certain death.”

He grinned sheepishly.

She approached the vampire and nodded curtly, a gesture he returned.

Without hesitation, the vampire produced his own concealed hand weapon. He swung and missed, and Mara kicked him in the chest. He dropped his knife before she could see, and deception ran through his cold mind.

” Princess Mara,” he said holding both hands in the air. ” No weapons.”

” Drop your…”

He smiled.

” Hand to hand?”

” No other way.”

Biting her lower lip, she had no choice but to comply. It was her upbringing, and a hand to hand combat was in her family blood. She dropped her weapon and he pounced. He was very powerful and fast. He was standing behind her with his eyes burning on her neck.

” You come quick, like all the men I’ve dated.”

K’narf laughed.

She moved.

Then his pale face became serious as he fell into a seated position.

Mara, who had drawn herself into a crouched position directly in front of him, her hand reaching for the dagger shoved into his chest.

” I don’t know how you did it,” he said as he removed a cigar from his lapel and bit the tip off. He looked for a wooden match and found one. He lit the cigar, and took two small puffs. ” I got this cigar from your future.”

She looked puzzled.

” We traveled into you future,” he started explaining. ” But the weapons you humans invented, well, they could destroy the world. We can’t live without humans to feed on. So we came back here.”

” Looks like you can’t live here either.”

He smiled and puffed.

” You look tired,” she said.

” I thought I had you beat,” he replied.

She stood, placed the dagger in her belt all in one motion. ” You thought wrong.”

K’narf coughed.

Mara took the cigar out of his mouth and headed for the doors.

” Mara,” he muscled.

She stopped took a few puffs from the cigar, but didn’t turn around.

” They say that cigar smoking could kill you.”

She took a few more puffs. ” Yeah, and they also said Lord K’narf could kill me too.”

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Hi Frank, looks like you're off to a great morning. I absolutely loved the story. Vampires are my favorite along with tough heroines. Thanks for serving up such tasty morsels with my breakfast! Voted awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL cyndi just bless you..:) really Frank


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ALUR 4 years ago from USA

Even you made me like vampire stories...that's a feat!


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven

Great story Frank. You can even find humor in vampire stories. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Alur.. I don't even like vampire stories..LOL but I thank you so much for visiting Mara.. and Carline thanks for reading my vicious race bless you guys :)


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

I thought I had you beat,” he replied. Lol.. That was funny! I really enjoyed this vampire story. xoxox


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks you so much Love... Doctor.. :) how sweet you can be


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

brilliant story telling


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

I came to read because you write so well, but I wasn't expecting this excellent story of vampires! You have laced this battle with humor and made it a really pleasant read. The only complaint I have is that it ended...I wanted to read more! Well done my friend.

Voted up, awesome, and interesting AND sharing with my followers.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you for checking this out Rahul and tillsontitan I enjoyed writing this piece


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phdast7 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Frank - I am not generally into vampires, but I like the interaction and conversations you create between your characters. Nice. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you PHDAST i decided to jump on the vampire band wagon LOL


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Very clever vampire short story here. My husband loves vampire movies and such. I loved the ones from back in the day, although they were so predictable and kind of goofy too. But your story is interesting as to their exchanges of words. Nice write here. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for checking in on my Vicious Race Faith :)


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wingedcentaur 4 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

Voted up and awesome, Frank!

You presented an interesting dynamic here. The vampires, to here Lord K'narf tell it, actually tried to prevent a human genocide, in order to feed off them, of couse. On another level, though, if Lord K'narf and his brood truly look at humans as a separate, lower order species---one could actually make a parallel case that he, Lord K'narf his specific partisans, were, in their own way, environmentalists!

Nice job, Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

winged I should have known someone like you would read deeper into this LOL thats cool bless you :)


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poetvix 3 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

I love it! Mara is the new superhero to know. Vampires, witty banter, a larger than life, unlikely heroine... sounds like a best seller to me. I love the time travel twist too. He has to still be alive in the future or he could not have come back in the past. Time won't allow such a paradox. Too cool.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL thanks Poetvix for visiting my try at a vampire drama :)


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ

Love this story. I know a really tough 5' tall woman that I can imagine in this story. Laughing about that one.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL bless you Becky Katz :)


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Shanders 3 years ago from Port Huron, Michigan

Great story, really enjoyed it! I would love to hear more on this one :) Awesome job


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks shanders :)


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

I like some vampire stories and this one intrigued me. I wrote one a few years ago, published it here on HP and took it down not long after, thinking HP was not ready for it. Oh, well ... maybe some day I will put it back up. It is pretty dark though. I enjoyed reading this story, Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

Put it up Phyllis I like dark writings and haven't seen too many on here..:)


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Think it would be alright? I cannot find any good pics to use with it.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

its not the pic its the story I enjoy reading yeah go ahead... show your talent in that I know you have


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

Love this Frank, a different slant on the old vampire tale. Well written.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Jodah I wrote this two years ago on here and it still seems fresh to me LOL


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Hmmmm ... I will see if I can find my story and prepare it.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

yes and send me an email so I can read it thanks


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

I do not have your email. The HP newsletter will list it when I publish it.

Are you going to have any sequels on The Vicious Race?


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

No.. that's it..:) Ill be sure to watch out for it thank you


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cam8510 2 years ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

I really enjoyed reading this story Frank. I could envision every move they made. Very well written.


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks Cam :)

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