A Writing Challenge -- The Door to Nowhere, page 2

In the Beginning

Was it really only yesterday?

A young man lay next to his wife, his right hand tentatively stroking her round belly, searching, searching. What would it feel like? A thump? A poke?

He sighed, about to give up. Then she placed her hand over his and together they explored and found it--just below her navel--a movement, a flicker.

Not a thump, or a poke, but a restlessness--like a leaf twirling around and around in the breeze.

The First Touch

Was it really only yesterday?

A new father held his infant daughter. His right hand, calloused and toughened by years of labor, stroking her cheek, amazed at the warmth and softness of her fragile skin. A tiny fist probed the air and then grasped his finger. "What a miracle" he thought as he examined her tiny hands, fingernails barely larger than a grain of rice.

Was it really only yesterday, a father whispered to his daughter "I will always love you. Let's go home."



Training Wheels

Was it really only yesterday?

A father anxiously released his fingers from the rear of the bicycle. A slight wobble left, right, and then........success!

Legs peddle fast and confident. One step closer to...

The License to Independence

Was it really only yesterday?

A father sits in the passenger seat...nervously peering left and right, checking the mirrors and looking ahead--all at the same time.

She's ready. A confident driver, although dad wishes it was still just a bike with training wheels.

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Driving Away

Was it really only yesterday?

A young girl places the last box into the back of her car. "Don't worry Daddy. My friends are waiting for me at the university. I'll be fine. Call you on Saturday."

A father brushes aside his tears as he watches his daughter, his pride and joy, the heart of his heart, drive away.


Falling Away

Was it really only yesterday?

"Daddy, we've found an apartment and I'm moving in with him. I know you don't like this, but really Daddy, he loves me. I know we'll get married soon. I love him so much and I want to make him happy."

Returning Home

Was it really only yesterday?

"Daddy, you were right. It's not like I thought it would be. He's mean. Nothing that I do is right. I try and try but he's always angry.

Can I come home?"

"Please come get me. He's gone out, but he'll be back soon. I'll be at the back door waiting for you. I'm sorry."

Was it really only yesterday, a father whispered to his daughter "I will always love you. Let's go home."

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Carb Diva 22 months ago Author

Emese - thank you for your kind words. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Have a great day!


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Emese Fromm 22 months ago from The Desert

Beautiful! I really love this. It is such a common story, with such a wonderful ending. Yes,a father's love can make a difference. Wonderful story, great way of telling it. Thank you for a great read.


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Carb Diva 22 months ago Author

fpherj48 - Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments. Sometimes great stories come from imagination; sometimes they come from sharing remembrances. My story was a bit of both.

This was totally outside of my comfort level (I write hubs on recipes), but I billybuc and I are friends. He has been challenging me to step out of my zone and spread my wings. I did that in this hub.

I am pleased that it touched you.


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fpherj48 22 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Carb Diva.....OK WOW!! I absolutely LOVE this. It may be my favorite one of all. It moved me to tears. Only wonderful writers can do this...Simply fabulous!! Peace, Paula UP+++pinned & tweeted


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Carb Diva 22 months ago Author

Thank you bravewarrior. I was looking for, if not a happy ending, at least the chance for one.


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Carb Diva 22 months ago Author

Hey billybuc, I knew you would write. Thanks for your kind words and your support. I have looked at the growth of my children as bittersweet--we rejoice with each milestone, but each one also signals a step closer to independence, and a step further away from mom and dad.


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bravewarrior 22 months ago from Central Florida

It's nice to know her Door to Nowhere actually led her somewhere - to safety!


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billybuc 22 months ago from Olympia, WA

Awww, I had tears in my eyes. What a sweet, lovely, beautiful story. They grow up so fast, don't they, and why in the world don't they listen to us?????

Thank you, Linda. You done good!

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