A Tribute to the One I Love

Update 9 March 2012: I've shared this poem with Romantic Friday Writers Challenge No 33 I love You Because...

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I love you because...

When you enter the room

My axis shifts then I know

You sense me inexplicably


When you look at me

My soul sparkles then I know

You observe me truthfully


When you listen to me

My rhyme resonates then I know

You learn me skilfully


When you touch me

My skin tingles then I know

You worship me generously


When you say those words

My heart soars then I know

You love me perfectly


When you read this

My true love then you’ll know

You rock my world eternally


©Kiru Taye Dec 2010

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tnderhrt23 6 years ago

Beautifully tender poem! You're a lucky gal!


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kirutaye 6 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi tnderhrt23, you are so right. I am a lucky girl and I know it.

Thanks for stopping by. See you again soon. :o))


Tee Akindele 6 years ago

Very fine poem, very fine romance.


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kirutaye 6 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Tee. I'm learning. :o))


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richtwf 6 years ago

A beautiful poem Kiru and I am sure your other half loves this one!

God bless you!


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kirutaye 6 years ago from London, UK Author

I am sure he does too. Thanks Richie. Stay blessed. :o))


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theseus 5 years ago from philippines

beautiful..full of love i can almost taste it..:)


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bcatgray 5 years ago from United States of America

Beautiful!


Justsilvie 5 years ago

What a beautiful birthday present!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi theseus, thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment.

And welcome to hubpages. Come back soon. :o))


scriber1 5 years ago

It doesn't get any better than the honest declaration of heartfelt intent. Thank you .


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thanks Betty. Hope you are doing well. Take care. :o))


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Justsilvie. Much appreciated. See you soon. :o))


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

You are welcome, scriber1. Come back soon. :o))


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland

Beautiful Poem, Love is grand...wishing you both all the blessings in the world. Namaste'


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Erin. Thank you and the same to you too. :o))


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Neverletitgo 5 years ago from Minneapolis, MN

Wow,what a beautiful tribute! I love it, keep up your good work Kirutaye. Thanks for sharing.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Neverletitgo, thank you for stopping by and for your lovely comment. Take care and see you again soon. :o))


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Fiddleman 5 years ago from Zirconia, North Carolina

Excellent hub and poem. Well stated and real. I hope he reads, he will be delighted.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you fiddleman for stopping by and for your kind words. He read it and he is delighted. :o))


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epigramman 5 years ago

..well it dosen't get any better than this - you have said it all - right here right now - and it will live forever and last for a long long time in your reader's minds too!!!!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Epigramman, thank you for stopping by to read and comment. Your words are very kind. :o))


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michael ely 5 years ago from Scotland

Hi Kirutaye, You mentioned that you didn't do a lot of poetry but the stuff i've seen you do has been great. I look forward to seeing you doing a lot more of it.

Michael.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Michael, you are kind. :o))

I'll keep learning and writing, thank you.


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Treasuresofheaven 5 years ago from Michigan

Sweet poem. This is adorable. VOTE UP.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Treasures, thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment and for the vote up too. :o))


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Amber Allen 5 years ago

This is a beautiful and touching tribute of the love that the two of you share. Hold on tight and treasure it.

Amber:)


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Amber, thank you for your lovely words. I will.

Take care and come back soon.:o))


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sherrylou57 5 years ago from Riverside

You gave me goosebumps!! Awesome! Sounds like a love song to me! Happy New Year!!


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

Straight from the heart this creation came forth with all the love in bloom. You are both lucky to be in love, it's a very delicate flower for sure. I wish you both well. Happy New Year...


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

So lovely - it is so great to be in love.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Sherrylou, you're right. It could be a love song. If only i had the voice. LOL.

Thank you for stopping by and see you again soon. :o))


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi saddlerider, its great to see you here and such a wonderful comment too. Thank you so much. :o))


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi acaetnna, thank you for your lovely comment. Love is great. See you soon. :o))


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Very nice. Love the last line about your world being rocked. I take it you're referring to that dapper chap in your photo -- or that's not you and it's a random picture from online. Either way, it's good to see how very active you've been lately. Happy new year!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Doug, it's nice to see you here. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I have been busy but it's not the kind you think. LOL.

See you again soon. :o))


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soozeqsh 5 years ago from Boyertown, PA

Nice poem. I enjoyed it.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Soozeqsh. See you again soon.


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Truckstop Sally 5 years ago

Your words are heartfelt and passionate. Thanks for sharing. I know his birthday was happy!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Truckstop Sally, thank you for stopping by. I'm glad you like it. See you again soon.


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Rob Hanlon 5 years ago from Epicentre of everywhere

Nice one, kirutaye. So few words express so much, well done.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Rob, nice of you to drop by. Thank you and hope to see you again. :o))


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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia

beautifully said with such simple elegance, loved it


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi nighthag, it great to see you here. Thank you for your kind words. Take care. :o))


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota

Beautiful poetry and touching tribute. Your writing is graceful and so from the heart.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Minnetonka. You are so kind. Hope to see you again here. :o))


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ladyjojo 5 years ago

hey this poem was pretty neat :)


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Ladyjojo.


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Docmo 5 years ago from UK

Nicely done- so tender and romantic. Love it!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Docmo. I'm glad you like it. See you again soon.


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MartieCoetser 5 years ago from South Africa

It is wonderful to know someone who rocks your world.... I have not yet find one that can do it ‘eternally’ for me :))) You are fortunate!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Martie, thank you so much for stopping by. I must say I do feel very lucky. Yours is out there waiting for you. Who knows, this might be your year. :o))


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Mike's Corner 5 years ago from Maryland

Wow what a great poem -- so real and full of grace.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Mike for stopping by and leaving such a lovely comment. Hope to see you again soon.


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b. Malin 5 years ago

How very Beautiful and from your heart to his, I feel the Love.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you B. It is nice to see you here and with such kind comment too.


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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Beautiful poem!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thanks Susan. Have a nice day.


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SweetMarie83 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Absolutely beautiful, such a pleasure to read!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi SweetMarie83, thank you for stopping by and leaving such a lovely comment. Have a nice day.


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Heart Felt Book 5 years ago from New York, NY

this is lovely dear!! great feelings to shadow around! thanks for sharing!!


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you Heartfelt. It's nice of you to drop by. See you again soon.


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skellie 5 years ago from Adelaide

What a beautiful poem. It is nice to know that true love still exists. You must be a great couple :)

Beautiful and up

Thankyou for sharing, great work! :D

Skellie


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Hi Skellie, it's great to see you here. I am grateful for the blessings i've been given. Thank you for such a beautiful comment and hope to see you again soon.


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sarclair 5 years ago

This is a beautiful poem kirytaye.


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Sarclair, thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment. Hope to see you again soon.


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Cheeky Girl 5 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

What a beautiful poem! I love this! You write it perfectly. I love the nice simple three-line structure to each part. Rating up! :)


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kirutaye 5 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you, Cheeky Girl. I'm glad you love it. :o))


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Sparrowlet 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Such a beautiful expression of love! Made me smile. :)


Anna of Anna's Adornments 4 years ago

Dear Kiru,

Beautiful poem.

Fits the challenge well.

Best wishes,

Anna


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Christina Wigren 4 years ago from Norrköping, Sweden

Dear Kiru,

I discovered that I have a Hub account, but it is under my 'real' name Christina Wigren.

Lovely poem! Beautiful. Fits the challenge perfectly. Hope the man in the poem appreciates it.

Best wishes,

Anna of Anna's Adornments


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kirutaye 4 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you, Sparrowlet. I always smile when I read it too. :)


sandra hall 4 years ago

You are a lovely poetess.


Francine Howarth 4 years ago

Hi,

Way to go with rhythm in poetry: perfect words for a song! Lovely, lovely... ;)

best

F


Adura Ojo 4 years ago

Nice one, Kiru.

Well done. Fits the theme perfectly.


Laura 4 years ago

Very nice!


J.L.Campbell 4 years ago

Something about this is very sensuous. Lovely.


L'Aussie Denise 4 years ago

Lovely Kiru. I must admit I didn't know you wrote poetry too. Awesome. Love this ode to a perfect love.

Denise


Talei Loto 4 years ago

Hi Kiru, this is lovely and such sweet sentiments. Thanks for sharing with us. ;)


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Christina Wigren 4 years ago from Norrköping, Sweden

Here for another read!

Anna of Anna's Adornments


Andy David 4 years ago

Hello Kiru.

These are some tender and heartfelt sentiments...a true expression of love. If my wife said it to me like that, even I would go weak at the knees! Very nice and a surprise too.

Andy


Janaki Nagaraj 4 years ago

very romantic indeed.


Madeleine 4 years ago

Such wonderfully romantic sentiments, Kiru.


Donna Hole 4 years ago

Fantastic. Deep sentiments. I am wooed by your words.

.......dhole


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kirutaye 4 years ago from London, UK Author

Thank you all for stopping by: Anna, Sandra, Francine, Adura, Laura, JL, Denise, Talei, Andy, Janaki, Madeleine and Donna. I appreciate your lovely comments

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