All Was Still, All Was Silent ( Part 1 )

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All was still.

      All was silent.


The evening air

was crisp, quiet

Only the slight

rustling of leaves

from the occasional breeze

could be heard or seen

in the short time between

the dusk

and the darkness



The sun dropped behind

the golden horizon

A black fog settled in,

fully encompassing

the last glistening streaks

of dying daylight


Here, deep in the heart

of unknown scenery,

unseen by the eyes

of modern man

Not yet contaminated

Not yet desecrated …


The clock struck nine.

Something stirred…


Something born

in ages past,

bound and sealed

by deep magic

that elders had cast

in a forgotten story

untold by history



The spell’s power

was limited by time,

much of which

had gone by

since the great war

of a civilization

had been raged

against its despised foe,

with determination



Deep beneath the soil,

the sound of chains

disrupted the stillness

with metallic grinding

of enchanted adamant,

clashing with barriers

created to prevent

an apocalyptic event…





© copyright Ben D.A 2011




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Comments 15 comments

Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Interesting. I shall read on.


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Did not intend to confuse. It is a fine line and a time that has passed becomes a past time, and a past time is a time that has passed. Whichever says the most exact thought should be used. I'd have used past for several reasons. But it's not my poem!

For sure, the entire poem is so strong, no stone should be left unturned to keep it so, plus it is leading up to even stronger statements in Part 2! It's excellent, Ben - truly.


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

Oh this is my kind of scribe, it's foreboding and wanting for more, the sounds of chains disrupting the stillness screams of things to come beneath. I'm on the run over to the second chapter with high interest of anticipation. Thrilling read so far Mr Ben..


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Nellie I meant ages that have gone by

Now I'm a tad confused, myself though ;] hehe

Thank you kindly for your great comments and reads :D


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

I was directed by a recommendation to Part 2 first, read it and, of course, had to find out about Part 1. So glad I did. The sequence is right - I'm enchanted. Looking forward to the next part or parts! It's a really good premise!f And your illustrations are superb!

One tee-niney-tiny suggestion: 'passed' actually should read 'past', according to its context here. 'Passed' is the past tense of the action verb 'to pass'. 'Past' is the adjective or adverb describing the event or an action which has happened previously, as in this context. It's a fine line of distinction & I may be reading it wrong:- if you meant that the ages have passed (actively moved right along), or been passed up or passed by. But the context I'm reading is that they are 'past ages'. Besides - it is even nicer with 'cast' further down. ;-)


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

I feel like I could read this forever, there is something familiar about it, like it's a story that I'm reading and I just reached the climax. Very nice. :)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

phoenix - glad it caught your attention! :]

mentalist - though the theme of this story isn't about man being its worst enemy, I did put some lines in the beginning that portray that, glad you noticed

trust me, man won't be fearing itself this time ;]


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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

Mans worst enemy is himself,so intensely portrayed by this Ben.;)


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Poohgranma 5 years ago from On the edge

Very intriguing, will have to read more now!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

Can hardly wait.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

indeeed


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

So ominous... Something wicked this way comes?


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vietnamvet68 5 years ago from New York State

Great write here Ben we are left in suspense, looking forward to your part #2, sounds like we are in for a great write.

God Bless


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks Ellie. Well, obviously the mood and scenery change drastically from beginning to end? Hmm...this is gonna be at least a 3 parter ;]

Thanks for the comment


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

I like the beat to this one, and the picture at the top goes so well with it, kinda makes the bottom one look out of place :P Still, nicely done, Mr. Writings :D

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