Almost a Love Story ~haiku~

A haiku about an almost perfect love story.


Blending the colors
Shadows of red and white
True love's kiss and smiles


So it was then called
Perfect love at its finest
Tuned to its accord.

 

Heartbeats in heaven
Scent of roses and moon paints
For a white wedding


Now fate changed its mind
From truth to deceitful smiles
And scarred someone's life

 

Tears cowardly formed
Staining the lovely white dress
With fragments of heart


A beautiful lie
Crushed everything on its sight
Love's unending cry


Empty sky floating
Creating a scentless song
Memories remain


There are some hurts that you never completely get over. And you think that time will diminish their presence and to a degree it does, but it still hurts because well, hurt hurts.

- "The Story of Us"


© 2012 Mycee. All Rights Reserved.

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Sammiree 3 years ago

(((HUGS)))


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tammyswallow 3 years ago from North Carolina

This is a powerful poem! Love the line "loves unenending cry". Very touching and moving.


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midget38 3 years ago from Singapore

A passionate, heartfelt Haiku.


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

Myz, this is you at your best. Beautiful poetry!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida

Beautiful, Spy! I miss your poetry! Thank you for giving me my 'fix'!


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Made 3 years ago from Finland

Beautiful! I can feel how much the hurt hurts.


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Just Ask Susan 3 years ago from Ontario, Canada

How sad and yet so beautiful.


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tillsontitan 3 years ago from New York

Lovely, well done haiku! "Heartbeats in heaven" was the line that caught me...I hope this sadness is not for you right now. Best to you!

Voted up and beautiful.


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Curiad 3 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

A beautiful blend of Haiku and poetry Myz. Thank you for sharing these very real feelings!


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cleaner3 3 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

emotional , expressive,..... beautiful poetry.

well done ..

Michael


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btrbell 3 years ago from Mesa, AZ

These are: beautiful, perfect, awesome

Thank you!


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kashmir56 3 years ago from Massachusetts

Very beautifully written and touching !

Vote up and more !!! SHARING !


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

Beautiful, especially the last one--


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travmaj 3 years ago from australia

It certainly resonates with me - those hurts that rarely heal and when we think they have - they come back to haunt us. Very well written -very heart felt. Thanks


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aviannovice 3 years ago from Stillwater, OK

VERY well done, Mycee. One can feel the pain and hear the song as it is sung...


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abbykorinnelee 3 years ago from Ripon Wisconsin

Very beautiful


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tobusiness 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Unknown, beautifully done.


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fpherj48 3 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

One word...breathtaking.........UP++++


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Mhatter99 3 years ago from San Francisco

Remarkable job. Thank you


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mary615 3 years ago from Florida

Yes, as others have said: this is a beautiful piece of work.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and beautiful. Just lovely. Passing this on.


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teaches12345 3 years ago

A touching poem. The pain is evident but leaves you with truth.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

@Sammi, Tammy, Michelle, Bill, Sha, Made, Susan, Mary C, Mark, Michael, Btrbell, Tom, Audrey, Travmaj, Deb, Abby, Jo, Paula, mhatter, Mary, Gypsy, Dianna,

i just want to say thank you for these beautiful messages.


Sueswan 3 years ago

Hi Myz,

"A beautiful lie

Crushed everything on its sight

Love's unending cry"

To be hurt by someone that you love and thought that loved you is the kind of hurt you never totally get over.

Take care


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Sunshine625 3 years ago from Orlando, FL

Hi M, You are awesome! :)


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Debby Bruck 3 years ago

Sad ending.


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rajan jolly 3 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

A very touching poem and beautiful!


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Sue, Shine, Debby, Rajan.. thank you for your sweet message!


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Senoritaa 3 years ago

Absolutely gorgeous. Hard to pick yet I think this one's my favorite:

Tears cowardly formed

Staining the lovely white dress

With fragment of hearts


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

wow..i also love the line. thank you so much!


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Capedium 3 years ago from Texas.

Catchy title..

It was worth every seconds if my time..

Voted up beautiful..

Really interesting


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rdsparrowriter 3 years ago

Heart touching and beautiful poem :) Well done!


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Wow, Cape! that was amazing. thank you much


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

thanks as always RD!


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DeborahNeyens 3 years ago from Iowa

Sad but beautiful. Well done.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

thank you so much Deborah.


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

So sad but also tender and with beauty.

A broken heart described with the mind of a true artist. Here's to so many more to follow my friend.

Lots of love

Eddy.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Thank you Eddy!! for such lovely comment. Hugs.


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blondey 3 years ago

Sad poem, of a very sad and broken heart. I hope it has healed some since you wrote it!

Rose


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

Such a sad piece--beautiful though!


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Laurinzo Scott 3 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

Empty sky floating

creating a scentless song

Memories remain

Wow breathtaking...


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tammyswallow 3 years ago from North Carolina

This is beautifully ironic when you say "fate changed its mind." This is the type of poetry that stays with a person. Very powerful with a tinge of dispair. Painfully beautiful!


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Deborah Brooks 3 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Perfect love in a poem in a life time what a concept.. this poem makes me believe and or conceive that it can be

Debbie


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Vellur 3 years ago from Dubai

Beautifully written sad with emotions running rife. Great poem, voted up and shared.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

@Rose, audrey, Laurinzo, Tammy, Deborah, Vellur.

Thank you so much my friends for those wonderful comments.


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tehjib 3 years ago from Bangladesh

Its really 'Almost". Thanks and looking for more!


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Thanxxx :)


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IAmForbidden 3 years ago from A Journey on Finding My Own Destiny

forbidden love...like me.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Thank you! i guess so to.


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Peggy W 3 years ago from Houston, Texas

What an expressive poem filled with love and heartbreak. Beautifully written and composed. So sad if this is resonating from your heart. If so...let the healing begin and never look back. He was not worth your faith, love and trust in him.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Hello Peggy. thank you for reading and for the lovely message.


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KoffeeKlatch Gals 3 years ago from Sunny Florida

Beautiful and sad. I loved it. I couldn't pick a favorite. They're all awesome.


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unknown spy 3 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up. Author

Thank you so much KoffeeKlatch Gals..


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dghbrh 17 months ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

Amazing work really.

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