An Alcoholic Show


Alcohol produces its own strain

of diseases,

it satisfies, but never pleases,

he wanted to stop,

and many times he would try,

but he really couldn’t remain dry,

he fought back tears,

but he was an aging alcoholic for years,

that morning he had no where to go,

so he drove around town,

putting on an alcoholic show,

his radio blasting

and he couldn’t hear a sound,

early, but he had too much to drink,

he couldn’t think,

and in one eye blink,

the child’s head was lacerated,

but what killed her

were multiple fractures,

his eyes blood red,

child dead,

the thoughts in his head

were thinning,

as the young girl’s bicycle wheels

kept spinning, and spinning,

he wasn’t thinking about the girl,

but the arrest,

and the blow to her tiny chest,

was so violent,

the marks of the car’s grille

was clearly visible on her skin,

she almost broke in half,

because she was very thin,

accident or homicide,

either way

only the child gets that funeral ride.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Wow, Frank, you have really captured the horror, guilt, pain and sorrow of a drunk driver and the innocent victim. At first, I was applaud but made myself read it (the lacerated head got me) and I'm glad I did. We need a "disturbing" button. :)


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

When I first started reading your poem it made me think of an uncle I had, except he died in a gutter somewhere in Montreal. Thankfully he wasn't driving when he died. It's so sad that drunk drivers cause so much pain, suffering and deaths.


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time2rite 4 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

Truly horrifying and an all too real occurrence...you've managed to do it again, Frank! You've told a whole story and captured a grisly scene all in the span of a few lines of poetry: awesome!


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank, your write so true to your heart. This poem is like living here in Las Vegas hearing how many children die because of a drunk.

Voted up, truly awesome and interesting, Joyce.


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Ryem 4 years ago from Maryland

This poem hurts to read only because it's based on a tragedy that happens every single day. This is very well written...had to vote up!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much TTombs for sharing your comment bless you :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

oh im so sorry about your uncle Just ask Susan.. and thank you time2rite for your support and for reading Joyce always good to see you reading my work.... and Ryem welcome to my page :) Bless you all


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Frank, alcoholism is rampant in our family. I am so grateful no one has had the experience you describe so well. It is very realistic.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Close to my heart this one Frank, I had someone killed in a head on collision with a DD.

Shame that its the drunk drivers that always live to see another day and another bottle and risk another life.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks for reading Hyphen and I will have you in my prayers and Rosemay I am so sorry to hear that I too will say a little prayer for you and your family bless you both


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DFiduccia 4 years ago from Las Vegas

Very graphic, Frank—

This would be a great poem for MADD or any other organization posting adds against drinking and driving.

DF


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank,

This happens way too often even with all the programs in place to stop drunk driving. :(

Voted up and awesome

Take care :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Dfiduccia and Sue for stopping by and for reading my piece


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Angelme566 4 years ago

Frank find this bit scary and the way you write it , like i am there on the scene. Voted up and shared !


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Angelme for leaving footprints :) Bless you


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

WOW Frank this is powerful and so tragic. Unfortunately happens all too often in real life.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Gypsy you are so right bless you for reading :) Frank


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

what a brutal way to die...so sad...


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Raci for popping by bless you :)


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

I was scrolling through your hubs and this one really stood out. I really think you should write a book... I'd buy it and I'm sure all of your readers would as well.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for your kind words Phoebe


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Painful, painful piece Frank! Somehow I had missed this one!


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saddlerider1 2 years ago

Very poignant poem, it's clarity comes across lound and clear, DONT DRINK AND DRIVE, but no matter what the law says or does, we are all humans, weak, sel-centered, selfish and many go through life with an "I don't give a dam attitude and will continue to be drugged or drunk behind the wheel" As far as I'm concerened it's first degree murder, not an accident when your drunk driving and taking a life. Well done Frank, it's been awhile, I have been out of the Hubs for almost a year.


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Iris Draak 2 years ago from Boise, Idaho

Thanks to Audrey Howitt for sharing this on her timeline. What a powerful piece.


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cam8510 2 years ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

Thanks for this Frank. Could have been me a few years back. There are some programs that work, IF the people work the programs. I've seen some miracles happen in the lives of men and women who were written off by society. Too many have died this way. I can say this because I am a recovering alcoholic. We are like little tornadoes, wreaking havoc and destroying lives wherever we go. And it goes on until we finally have had enough and reached the lowest point we are capable of reaching. Only then will any program work.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks for stopping by Iris Draak, Cam8510, Audrey my dear friend and you tooo Saddlerider..:) Frank

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