Tanka: My Morning Surprise

Fall leaves blanket the morning lawn.
Fall leaves blanket the morning lawn. | Source


Crimson leaves scattered

Dampened, pressed into the grass.

Such artful promise

Abandoned by distraction.

My child's origami.


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© 2012 Catherine Tally

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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

very well expressed. Thank you.


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arb 4 years ago from oregon

Beautiful, as are the children who left them behind!


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Nellieanna 4 years ago from TEXAS

What a lovely expressive simplicity! I felt I had observed the origami-like random arrangement of the leaves with you.


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kashmir56 4 years ago from Massachusetts

Very beautifully written poem, well done !


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hi Mhatter,

I appreciate the kind comment. Thank you!

I made a small change. Let me know what you think!

cat:)


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Good morning, arb :) I always enjoy seeing you here and appreciate your comments. After noticing that my poem was lacking a verb, I went back and made some adjustments. Sometimes I get a rush of inspiration with little time for writing. Now I am going to treat myself to the backlog of others' hubs that I have been wanting to catch up on. I hope you have a delightful day! Thanks for stopping by.


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello Nellieanna. How nice it is to see you here! Thank you for your sweet comment. I appreciate your stopping by.

My best to you,

Cat :)


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Good morning, Tom! It's always a pleasure to see you, especially since it's a sign that you have power restored. I've been very concerned for those of you in the Northeast and hope that you weren't seriously affected. Thank you for both your loyal following and thoughtful comments. I sincerely appreciate them! I wish you all the best.

Cat:)


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Cat

Beautiful and delightful!

Voted up and beautiful

Have a great week. :)


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hi Susan,

I really appreciate your kind compliment. Thank you!

I send my best and hope that you are enjoying the change of seasons and looking forward to the upcoming holidays. I'm preparing to write a hub about my Top 10 rock &roll LPs.

Cat :)


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d.william 4 years ago from Somewhere in the south

Great poem. Concise and succinct. Great job.


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello d.william,

I'm glad you enjoyed my poem which creates a picture in few words. Some fans of lyrical or rhyming poetry find the Japanese styles to be simplistic and have little appreciation for the discipline involved. Some haiku translations are done in a rhyming couplet style. Thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I really appreciate it!

Cat :)


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Genna East 4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

'Children's Origami' -- what a perfect description! Up + on this clever poem. :-)


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Good morning, Genna. It's always a pleasure to hear from you! Thank you for your kind compliment. I'm glad you like the imagery! My best wishes to you for a Happy Thanksgiving and holiday season.

Cat :)


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

Beautiful, especially the ending!!


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cat on a soapbox 3 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello Audrey,

Thank you for your thoughtful comment. It's much appreciated, as always. My best wishes to you for a happy holiday season.

Cat:)


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epigramman 3 years ago

Just dropping by dear Catherine - to wish you well - and to thank you for your poetic love of nature - I receive a lot of morning surprises up here across from the lake too - especially watching the sunrises across the water during all 4 seasons - but it is a very nasty winter day today with high winds and blowing snow - a good day to be inside and do some cleaning and listen to some nice music - I hope sincerely all is well with you these days and tonight I will watch Oliver Stone's The Doors , again, I saw it once at the theatre when it came out and I bought it cheap on dvd yesterday - sending you warm wishes as always, my friend , and an interesting documentary I saw on Jimi Hendrox.

Apparently he was murdered not death by suicide or misadventure - someone poured too much wine down his throat and he drowned.

Check it out on google under : Was Jimi Hendrix murdered?


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cat on a soapbox 3 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello, Colin. I hope you are keeping snug with your precious cats, good music, and pot of tea. I can only imagine the wind chill factor-brrrr! I was mesmerized when I saw The Doors in the theater. Val Kilmer was fantastic as Morrison! Since Jim settled in LA when at UCLA, he played the local clubs. For me, both the Doors and the Byrds epitomized the late 60s LA music sound, and I was glad that I got to see them! I will check out the Hendrix link. Thank you for that!

Sending you warm wishes too. . .

Catherine :)


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

What a beautiful piece--poignant and multi-layered--I loved it!


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cat on a soapbox 3 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello Audrey,

I have such admiration for your work, so your praise for mine is especially appreciated. I love your newest Fired Breath in the JuJue form and promise to give it a try. Thank you for the lovely compliment!

Cat:)


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

This is such a fine piece of writing-I am sharing it and hope others read it--just beautifully done!


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cat on a soapbox 3 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Audrey,

Thank you for the wonderful compliment! I really appreciate your encouragement and take it to heart. My best, as always,

Cat :)


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

wow cat beautifully written


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, Frank! I hope you have a great day :)


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Just gorgeous!


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

It's always nice to see you, Audrey- thanks for stopping by w/ your kind words! I hope all is well with you.

Take care,

Cat :)


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rebeccamealey 2 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

Very nice! A good tribute to my favorite season!


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artsandlearning 2 years ago from 1518 Brookhollow Drive, Suite 15, Santa Ana, CA, 92705

Very inspirational to the poets intrigued by both haiku and tanka forms! Well captured outdoor scenes featuring delicate moments that reflect the changing of the seasons. It has captured the fleeting moments in time reminding the beauty of everyday life and also the brevity of life.


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, Rebecca! :)


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello Debora, Thank you for your thoughtful comments and kind encouragement. Take care!

Cat :)


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

Beautiful and I now look forward to so many more.

Eddy.


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, Eddy! I appreciate your stopping by.

Cat :)


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

This is still one of the best poems on HP!


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Senoritaa 2 years ago

Beautiful! I actually went back to Origami after reading this.


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Good morning, Audrey! I couldn't ask for a nicer compliment since we have so many talented poets here- you being among my favorites. Thank you for your continuing encouragement and for sharing my work. I appreciate it so much!

All the best,

Cat:)


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello Senoritaa,

Thank you for the lovely comment! It makes me happy to hear that I've inspired you! Take care-

Cat:)


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

How did I miss this one before Cat. The most beautiful "tanka" I have read. Such beauty displayed in so few words.


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cat on a soapbox 20 months ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, John! I take this as the highest of compliments:)


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

since you haven't written anything new I'd just visit old favorites, maybe the lines would sound new..:) bless you

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