Annart's Writing Challenge - Wagon Wheel

The Challenge

I am responding to a writing challenge from Ann Carr to create a story from a painting of her little girl at Burnham Beach. Thanks to Annart for this opportunity.

Burnham Beach

Jillian loved the water, spending almost every weekend at Burnham Beach. Getting away from home was so peaceful that she called it her paradise. Her parents had a new baby, just learning to crawl. She loved to care for Strawberry, but admitted the nearby beach was more fun. She would spend hours on the beach by herself, gazing at the azure colored water, the fish flipping around, and the sun setting on the horizon.Her goal was to become an expert at taking pictures to capture the colors of the sun, fading on the horizon at this private beach. She was a preemie, so now at age thirteen, was a little thing with a dark ponytail, a sheepish grin, dressed in jeans and shirt,

Girl by the Sea
Girl by the Sea | Source

Two Sisters

Her parents were never too happy with her for spending so much time away from home and from Strawberry. They wanted them to be close and for Jillian to have a chance to take charge of her once in a while. However, Strawberry thrived, and Jillian did babysit her every few weeks when her parents wanted to get away for dinner

Baby by Sea
Baby by Sea
Wagon Wheel
Wagon Wheel

The Wagon Wheel Accident

Then, something unexpected happened. Jillian was at the beach and suddenly had a vision of Strawberry in the water, struggling to get to the surface. She didn’t have a face, but she knew it was Strawberry. Then the vision disappeared. Jillian gathered her belongings and ran so fast across the field to their one story ranch house that her legs began to hurt. When she opened the front door, she saw her Dad slumped in a chair with Strawberry sprawled motionless on the floor.

She later learned he was refinishing a small wagon wheel on a chair, while the baby crawled on the floor. Her dad left the room to get juice for her, and while he was gone, Strawberry apparently managed to pull herself up and grab hold of the wheel. It must have suddenly come crashing down, hitting Strawberry. Jillian could see her dad was frantic, and paralyzed with fear that she was dead, and said her mom was shopping. Jillian saw he was not taking action, so she raced to the phone to call 911. She was still breathing, and the ambulance rushed her to the hospital, admitting her with serious injuries that would take a long recovery. Strawberry had broken bones and might need plastic surgery on her face. Thank God, she had a chance to recover.

Prayers for Strawberry

Jillian was heartbroken about her tow - headed chubby ten month old sister with sparkling blue eyes, as she began her recovery with the family spending long hours in the hospital. To their subdued delight, after about three months, she was ready for discharge with some injuries that could be permanent; the little one was on the way back. Every day Jillian stopped by the beach to say prayers for her little sister

The Accident Changes Lives

Jillian spent more time with her sister with the realization that life is short and precious, and she could lose someone in an instant. She wanted to hold on to what she had forever, and thanked God and Angels for the vision that helped save her life. Jillian’s mom reminded her of the strange child’s body that had washed up on the beach near Burnham around that time, making them wonder if the vision was truth or fiction. It haunted Jillian for a long time, and she spent very little time at the beach that used to be the paradise of her life. Priorities changed for the entire family after Strawberry's accident.

It takes but a split second

To lose a little one.

So eyes-ears must open be

Til setting of the sun.

Burnham Beach

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FlourishAnyway 16 months ago from USA

That's quite some story to get from a photo. Very creative and a wonderful response to the challenge.


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annart 16 months ago from SW England

Beautifully done, Audrey. Thanks for taking up my challenge. I love to read the different interpretations.

You've wrapped up an important message in a clever story. The title is intriguing and the characters are crystal clear. Love the poem too. Well done!

Ann


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annart 16 months ago from SW England

BTW, have also put your link into my hub.

Ann


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billybuc 16 months ago from Olympia, WA

Very nicely done, Audrey! I saw this yesterday but I was too tired, and I wanted to read it with a fresh mind. I'm glad I did. Great response to the challenge.


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drbj 16 months ago from south Florida

You do know how to rise to a challenge, Audrey. Brava! And thanks for saving Strawberry's life.


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Faith Reaper 16 months ago from southern USA

Audrey, what a wonderful response to Ann's challenge. I am amazed at all of the different takes from Ann's amazing painting. I love that name Strawberry, how precious, and so glad she was okay.

So true, when things like this happen, our focus changes on what is most important in this life.

Blessings


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Flourish - Glad you stopped by . It is always so good to see you at my site with such nice comments. I loved this writing challenge, and it was fun to do the story. Once you start thinking, ideas come to you. You already know that with all the great articles you write. Hope you have a great day. Blessings, Audrey


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Ann - I am so glad you enjoyed my response to your challenge. It was so exciting to take that beautiful painting and run with it. Thanks for your kind comments. It makes your juices flow to think of a response. Your painting expertise makes the challenge all the better. I wish I could visit the real Burnham Beach. Blessings, Audrey


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annart 16 months ago from SW England

If you're ever this way, I'll take you there. It's only a few miles from where I live now (when this picture was taken we were only a few minutes from the beach!).


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Bill - Good to have you stop by and say such kind words about the challenge. Your challenge piqued my interest, and I had to keep trying. It sure is fun to try it. You may have been the hubber that started all this fun. Hope the heat has let up in your part of the world. Have a great day. Blessings, Audrey


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Drbj - I love to see you at my site with your sense of humor. You must like positive endings to hubs as I do. How could I not save Strawberry? Thank you for your kind comments about the challenge as written. I visited your site today. so look for me. Have a great day. Blessings, Audrey


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Faith - I am so glad you like the name Strawberry, as it seemed to fit. It was great to see you stopped by this hub and left your lovely comments. How true that when accidents happen, attitudes change. I guess it was a learning experience, and a lovely painting to interpret. I must stop by your site, and have a great day, blessed lady. Audrey


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Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

Nice story, beautifully crafted. You have done it very well. But, I feel sorry for Jillian.

Voted up and beautiful.


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Thanks Venka for your visit to my hub and for your positive comments. I am glad you liked the story and understand why you felt sorry for Jillian. I sometimes wish I lived in England where the writer did the painting, as it sounds like nice country. I know you are very smart and are from India. Have a great evening. Blessings, Audrey


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aviannovice 16 months ago from Stillwater, OK

Wow, that tok a lot of creation. This was fabulous, and really comes together very well. I was fascinated with this story.


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brakel2 16 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Deb - So glad you like the hub. Thanks for comments. This challenge encouraged so many stories, and the painting done by Ann is a perfect setting for creativity. I enjoyed creating it, as it really makes you think quickly. Hope you are having good adventures at the lake. Blessings, Audrey


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton

oh my goodness a picture is worth a thousand words.. but not in your case.. what a story you pulled out of that photo.. amazingly creative voted awesome


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brakel2 15 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Thanks, Frank. I really appreciate your commenting on my writing challenge and calling it creative and awesome. I value your opinions, as I know your writing ability is also awesome. I shall visit your site again soon. Blessings, Audrey


Claudia Hatfield 14 months ago

What a beautiful story and great life lesson too. Excellent writing and thank you for using Jillian's name. Love you!


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brakel2 13 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma Author

Hi Claudia - Don't know how I missed your comment. Glad you figured how to make a comment on here. Thanks for reading this hub and for enjoying the story. I was so surprised to see this comment, and it made my day. I love the name Jillian and loved using Jillian's name for the preemie in this story. I think of her when I remember this story. I daydream about my hubs all the time. Hi Jillian. Have great day all. Blessings, Audrey

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