As If I'd Been Dreaming

I saw him from a curious

and disturbing distance,

my soul bound hand and foot,

he was standing in a mist of rain,

and I felt such a dull pain

rising within me,

it was my pain, one that he couldn’t see,

clouds lost to the dark skies,

and I felt that eerie magnetism

burning like fireflies,

which I saw in his dark brown eyes,

so I walked toward him without fear,

it wasn’t to lesson my loneliness

or transform despair,

I felt the passion in his compassion,

and that was something we could share,

I wasn’t shocked to see him there,

so near,

face so clear,

marvelously real,

a face I could touch,

a body I could feel,

my eyes were beaming,

then I woke suddenly,

as if I’d been dreaming

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Storytellersrus 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

I find it intriguing that he should awake from this vision "as if" I'd been dreaming.

I know in dreaming, we often awake at the most intense moment. But in life, what exactly does this mean? He sees this image, thinks he knows who or what it is, but as he draws near he discovers he does not? Indeed, he cannot touch the face nor feel the body? And he is once again bound?

I am not sure this is your intention but it is interesting to ponder. Thanks!


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Story thanks so much for your thoughts..


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Bravo they say to a great play, well done.

Someone put a Huck on your dream , or you Hucked up that dream ? In the mind of a magnificent user of words, I know about your descriptive prowess.Wondering what's there.

Nicely done

Bless.


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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I see this quite differently. Frank was it you yourself that you were seeing?


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Sky.. for your comment and Just Ask Susan you nailed it!!!!!


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Sweet !

I have what I call four of the very best sights in the world. It should also quite easily be the same for every man and woman, but I also know that we are all identically different.

Take a guess.

Bless


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

identically different? like the way that phrase is used.. and I am a lousy guesser LOL


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

the sun is destroying me, where my computer is permanency stationed , I can easily get a second tan , so I say:

Give me the night.

Bless.


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time2rite 5 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

This poem was very intriguing; I wanted to read from beginning to end. I wish I could say I knew who this was you were facing, I thought perhaps your father, but I can see from the comments I was wrong! Very intense and riveting; you paint quite a picture with words: it was as if I were seeing and experiencing it myself.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks again time.. :)


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Storytellersrus 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

I like my interpretation best. hahahaha Seriously, I love that poems have an author's intention and a reader's interpretation. It's a participatory sport where no one loses. Thanks again for the vision.


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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

Great poem, is this a real dream? voted up and awesome.


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Storytellersrus 5 years ago from Stepping past clutter

I walked the dogs and thought about your poem. Aside from being wrong, I thought about the times I have been sure a friend is across the way. I have waved and yelled, only to discover who I thought was a friend, was not. This turns such an event into a surreal moment.

I think there are similarities to your experience in the mirror or whatever. You think you recognize yourself, and move to claim who you are. All of a sudden, you realize you are not the person you thought you were. Ne information appears.

Musing is fun. Thanks for creating this opportunity.


leann2800 4 years ago

This reminds me of a light at the end of the tunnel kind of dream. It seemed more surreal to me like the person walking was God or the soul that was bound was either the dying person to his body or to a relative. I really didn't see the other interprestations until I read them. Good job. Vague enough to stir a variety of thoughts but direct enough to be dramatic.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Leann a wonderful comment thank you :) Frank


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htodd 4 years ago from United States

Nice post..Thanks


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Htodd


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

Awesome... Some of us are our own most comforting vision. How lucky u are my fabulous Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

you're not so bad yourself..hee hee :)


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Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton Author

Storytellerus.. I love you interpretation.. but I always wondered what it'll feel like to see yourself through a dream.. I mean the dream part of you watching the reality... Just Ask picked it up.. I didn't think anyone could because I never shared it... thank you sooo much... and Writer you just rock!

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