Best Friends A Poem

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Best Friends A Poem

Passed by the years

though we didn't speak

In my thoughts you stayed

with the news I was pained

I felt small and weak

As rain down a window, ran my tears

 

Alas, I have no fear

best friends again we shall be

when the maker calls for me

In the coming years.

First attempt at a poem

 This is my feeble attempt at poetry.  I hope you like it and if not then please let me know what I need to do to make it better.  I am still trying to figure out how to do poetry.

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Comments 34 comments

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I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s 7 years ago

Nice poem! The best way to figure is to keep the thoughts flowing and they figure themselves, I believe. It has been years ago that I actually studied forms of poetry and I don't really hold or recall the rules. To me poems are personal and ones thoughts placed are the best! Look forward to more! :)


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wesleycox 7 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Thank you invictus


ralwus 7 years ago

'As rain down a window, ran my tears' very nice line sarge. You've got it. Nicely done.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

ralwus took the line I was going to use. Great job.


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wesleycox 7 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Thank you for the comments


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Candie V 7 years ago from Whereever there's wolves!! And Bikers!! Cummon Flash, We need an adventure!

Lovely! Thank you!


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Tom Cornett 7 years ago from Ohio

A perfect friend poem...thanks.


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ethel smith 7 years ago from Kingston-Upon-Hull

Thats a great first poem. Look forward to more


\Brenda Scully 7 years ago

just get a pen and paper and just write write write, then edit edit edit.... people are beginning to think I know what I am doing I have not a clue, just fake it man

well done if this your first then youh have talent, write about something close to your heart,


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G-Ma Johnson 7 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

for me it comes from my heart and how I am feeling...Just not to be too revealing...You did a good job and it will become part of you , as you will see...Thanks for sharing...:O) Hugs Loved the pic...


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wesleycox 7 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Thanks Brenda and G-Ma your words are kind and uplifting. I wasn't going to show this but I thought someone would tell ya or nay. Thanks for the ya's


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maggs224 7 years ago from Sunny Spain

I know nothing about poetry, I have never written a poem but I liked your poem it seemed quite powerful to me.


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Kebennett1 7 years ago from San Bernardino County, California

I think it was very good! It is poignant, sad and leaves you longing to be reunited for your loved ones. Poetry that makes you feel, is what poetry is all about! Come home safely!


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Not Telling 7 years ago from Eastern Nowhere

A wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing.


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Mighty Mom 7 years ago from Where Left is Right, CA

I agree with those who say just write what you feel. This poem speaks powerfully. There is no mistaking your strong feelings and sadness about your friend's loss.

I love its simplicity -- that's a huge part of its charm!

Keep writing poetry. You are a natural. MM


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wesleycox 7 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Thanks for the comments, they are well received.


Pachuca213 7 years ago

This is quite beautiful! I loved it!


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k@ri 7 years ago from Sunny Southern California

I don't think it was in the least bit feeble. I think it is very touching and beautiful! Please write more! :D


L. Andrew Marr 7 years ago

This is fantastic mate, genius!

Luke


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Paris Injeans 7 years ago from The Green Hills of Missouri

Years spent in school can not teach you to write a poem. The words will flow aross the paper when the feelings flow from your heart. This was beautiful. Carry on.


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Jane@CM 7 years ago

Very nice. Your words flow beautifully!


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wesleycox 7 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Pachuca, K@ri, Luke, Paris Injeans, and Jane. Thank you so very much for the lovely comments and praise.


philip carey 61 6 years ago

There's a fantastic book called "The Triggering Town", by a famous poet (blocking on his name at the moment). It's a beautiful resource for anyone interested in poetry. Check it out sometime.


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wesleycox 6 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Philip: I will have to look into that. Thanks for stopping by.


poetlorraine 6 years ago

i am wondering where my poet has gone, are you o.k.


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Jess Killmenow 6 years ago from Nowheresville, Eastern United States

Your friend is alive in your thoughts and in your heart. Thank you for sharing this beautiful emotion.

Jess


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wesleycox 6 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

Poetlorraine: I am around but as this is the ending of my deployment, the operation tempo has increased exponentially. I have been busy at work, on here I have also been working on improving my older hubs. Its harder than I thought.

Jess: Thank you for your sentiments and I agree, he died about five years ago. When I heard about it even though we hadn't spoken for about 12 years I was still saddened.


poetlorraine 6 years ago

aslong as you are o.k. so are you going back home soon


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wesleycox 6 years ago from Back in Texas, at least until August 2012 Author

aye, I'm going back home soon.


poetlorraine 6 years ago

o.k. so this was your first attempt.,.... brill, e,mail you soon o.k.


fareeha 5 years ago

i love my best friend


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sarcasticool 4 years ago from New Zealand

Very touching poem. Thank you for sharing.

I came across this when I wrote a similar poem on here. Thank you for sharing.


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khmazz 3 years ago from South Florida

A beautiful tribute to a loved best friend, I dont think this was a feeble attempt, but a wonderful one! Keep those poems coming! :)


Brenda.L.Scully 3 years ago

Wow this is a brilliant first attempt

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