Blood-lines

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A gleam of satisfaction radiated from the Vampire’s eyes,
but only for a moment,
then came the thunderous cries,
he shouted as if he were in pain,
eternal life had its deficiencies,
because while he finished feeding,
and his prey bleeding,
his mind was stimulated as he visualized
and that’s when he realized,
something so monstrous,
even for these night crawlers,
street brawlers,
blood suckers, night trackers,
vein hackers,
A scowl returned to his face,
his uncontrolled anger a distaste,
after his hearty fill,
he just ended his family bloodline
with that last kill.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

Hi Frank,

You were able to deliver 2 things at once...bravo!

There was fear for the audience and then there was fear in the monster himself. voted up since, you delivered it with awesomeness!


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

He killed his last bloodline? OH My ..Frank.. how do you do this? LOL

Great poem.. kept me on the edge of my seat. You scared me.. LOL

Love it

voted up

Debbie


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Ruch.. and thank you too Our Ms Brooks Bless you both :) Frank


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

I love this and I think you already know that I will.

even for these night crawlers,

street brawlers,

blood suckers, night trackers,

vein hackers,

A scowl returned to his face,

his uncontrolled anger a distaste,

I sent you the music to go with it.

You are the the undisputed master of both the Vincent price award , and also P. Barnum best.

Keep up the great work.

You have it down packed.

Bless.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Wow that's one twist ending that really sucks! LOL apolo Frank, couldn't help it my man. Awesome story-poem. Hey, maybe you know this but the dude in your pic who played Count Orlock in that 1922 Vampire movie was reputed to be the real dealio!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

The ending sucks for him--(I know--bad pun----) Irony works well here--made me chuckle --and almost--oh, just almost feel sorry for him!


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

He should of went to the store and purchased "True Blood" before ending his family blood line.


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank, This is a great creepy poem uck sucking blood uck.

Voted up and awesome for real, Joyce.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

dark and brilliant, frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Sky for your wonderful commit.. and Alastar the tales told back in the early days of Dracula are still second to none.. and I wouldn't doubt him being the real deal.. yeah I would LOL :) your comment sucks LOL.. Audrey your the best.. True blood hmm Ive actually never saw that Susan.. thanks for reading my blood-lines.. Writer20 it always good to see you around,, and PDX thanks man you rock! Bless you all


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Frank, I sent you a message as to what I'm referring to.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you :)


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poetvix 4 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

Wow! You put your stellar criminal poetry skills to work on my favorite bad guy, the vampire. I'm hooked and off for part two.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

aaaww you are so sweet


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WD Curry 111 4 years ago from Space Coast

The poem was great in its monstrous conclusion, but the eBay products killed me.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for reading wd curry but vampires got to earn a living too right? LOL clever


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Wow Frank, that was awesome. Creepy, but awesome. Fitting as the old lady and I watched the newest Twilight movie last night. Can't help it, I am hooked I reckon.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for dropping by thelyricwriter :)


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Your descriptions always captivate me.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you for reading VG


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

this leaves so much for the mind Frank...why would he kill his bloodline?and that keeps me wondering...


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for reading my blood-lines Denise... and Raci good to see you on my pages :) Frank


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time2rite 4 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

I can envision the rage on the vampire's face, dripping with blood as his teeth gnash and the victim lays lifeless in his clawed grasp. Awesome, Frank!


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

Another amazing hub Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much time3rite and Phoebe for visiitng my blood-lines :)

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