Bricks- A Poem of Assonance

An Introduction

This is not goodbye


Due to the recent mass theft of hubs by a now defunct online zine, I have decided to not only limit my writing on the hub to mostly general and impersonal hubs, I have also decided thst very little of my poetry or fiction will be published here anymore. I'm focusing on submitting to literary magazines and my own blog and likely won't put anything on here unless I have no plans to seek further publication, after it's already been published or if it's been soundly rejected several times. I do plan to publish every single poem of mine in some form or another besides hubpages, but don't expect to see much poetry from me any more. I do not plan to remove any existing poems from my hub, though I will be revising and editing them.

My poems and stories are too important to me to allow a thief to gain financial benefit and notoriety from them. I trust that you understand. I am finishing up my first book of fifty poems and trust that, for that that want to read my poems, they will seek out my book.

If you follow my blog, you're more likely to read more poems, as well as find out where else I'm published, and when my book is completed. Click on that link above to view or here to follow by e mail!

Assonance

I previously published a piece about Consonance which is the rhyming of consonant sounds. For my example, i used strong S sounds, to ridiculously dramatic effect. View that piece here: Hissing.

Assonance is the opposite. It's a slant, or feminine rhyme, using vowel sounds. The poem that follows using strong I sounds as it's rhyme scheme. Obviously, a commercial poem would be somewhat more subtle in their assonance but I wrote mine this way for dramatic and educational effect.

Examples of Poems using Assonance:

Edgar Allen Poe's "The Bells"

Robert Louis Stevenson's "The Feast of Famine"

William Wordsworth's "The World is Too Much With Us" and "Daffodils"

Robert Frost's "Fire and Ice" and "Stopping by the Woods on a Snowy Evening"

Edna St Millay's "Travel"

and

Dr Seuss's "West Beast East Beast"

My poem, "Bricks", is dedicated to them. I hope you enjoy it!


Bricks


The bricks

are the sidewalk

and have covered themselves

slick

with mud

rain and shit

waiting for the soles

of shoes

to slip

and lose their grip

So they can sip

Iron rich

blood

from broken head

and hip.


All rights reserved. Copyright Justin W. Price, April 11, 2012.

This was originally published on Hubpages under the name "PDXKARAOKEGUY" on the above date. He owns the copyright. If you are viewing this elsewhere, then you are reading stolen content. Please notify the author and the thief immediately and vacate the page.

Thanks for Reading.

PDXKaraokeGuy, also known as Justin W. Price, is an author with Sweatshoppe Publications, which will soon re-release his poetry collection, Digging to China. Additionally, the managing editor at eFiction horror and The New Bridge online newspaper.. Husband to Andrea, father to two dogs. writer.poet.baseball fan. tattooed. He is am amateur theologian with a rabid sweet tooth. He resides in a suburb of Portland, Oregon.He has a poetry book available for Amazon Kindle, and also maintains a blog, FirstBlog. His work has been featured in the Crisis Chronicles, efiction Magazine, The Hellroaring Review, the Bellwether Review, eFiction Humor, and the Rusty Nail. Please visit his profile page for more information. Thanks!


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cynamans 2 years ago from Washington DC

I like this poem. Great job here. Please check out some of my poems. Best of luck in getting your work published.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

How does that relate to this hub?


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PDXKaraokeGuy 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Ben. It sucks to have your work stolen, but, it's part of the risk you take when publishing, especially in an online forum. Thanks for stopping by. Glad you enjoyed this.


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Ben Zoltak 4 years ago from Lake Mills, Jefferson County, Wisconsin USA

Well done pdx. I enjoyed the brick walk. Ive had a few hubs stolen, but hubpages has(as far as I know anyway) always sniffed them out and notified me. Bon luck.

Ben


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Poetic Fool,

that was a boo boo on my part. It's fixed now. Thanks for pointing it out.

I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. I'm currently submitting much of my poetry to lit mags and working on a book of poetry. Once I get more publication credits elsewhere, I'll begin to repost work here :-)


Poetic Fool 4 years ago

Great write up, Justin. Nicely and clearly explained with fantastic examples including your own. It is a shame that you even have to be concerned about having your work stolen but it is a sign of the times. You are wise to take the approach you are. Oh, did you mean to say "consonance" in that first sentence after the Assonance heading? You discuss assonance in the next paragraph. Voted up and more!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Minnetonka... it is odd. I derive no satisfaction taking credit for something that isn't mine. I'd rather make a pittance and be honest then make a fortune and be a liar.


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Minnetonka Twin 4 years ago from Minnesota

Justin-Amazing how you can take the subject of brick and make it so fascinating. Nice job. Sorry to hear about the theft of your work. Sadly, I've been hearing about this so much lately. What's up with these people. Where is the respect. :-0


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

shimmering dawn, i agree,though my blog is a far less likely target then hubpages. Thanks for reading and commenting, and so sorry you've been the victim of theft!


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shimmering Dawn 4 years ago

Strong words indeed...but people have plagiarized my blog, anything you write online is not really safe.. we need to guard our words... Have a blessed day.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Eddy! I appreciate the comment. Be sure to follow my blog so you cna be among the first to read my poetry!


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

Brilliant PDX and I must award my Up up and away.

Take care

Eddy.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Rosemay... Follow my blog. I'm publishing my poems there and updating my publication news. Thanks for reading and commenting! http://pdxjpricefirstblog.blogspot.com/


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Raci, I won't!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks s much Jamie!


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

I will miss reading your poetry but understand your reasons for not wanting to publish them here, I was in two minds myself.

Good luck with getting your work published elsewhere and hope your book is a success.


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

good luck Justin...hey, i don't want to slip on that brick...


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jhamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

I love your example...I smiled a wide smile..Thank you. Jamie


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

I'm going to offer a generic response here, which I don't normally do, but there seems to be some confusion here.

I AM NOT LEAVING HUBPAGES

I am simply changing my focus. if I publish a poem here before it's been published elsewhere, most literary magazines won't accept it. I will still be publishing here on the hub, just a lot less poetry.

i would encourage everyone to follow my blog. i have added an e mail subscription box, so, this should be easy. i have a big announcement on Monday, at it will only be on my blog.

I'm not going anywhere. Please don't unfollow me here, instead, also follow me on my blog:

http://pdxjpricefirstblog.blogspot.com


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

PDX, I hate that you feel this way. You will be missed my friend. Glad we will still be able to read your work though. Justin, it has been a pleasure reading your work and talking football. Take care my friend.


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cherylone 4 years ago from Connecticut

I know how you feel about the thefts, and I feel the same, I hope you do get more on here because I love reading them, I will be checking out your hub as well.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Liked this lots. Will miss not seeing your work here but will see if I can follow along by e-mail. Good luck with getting your work published.


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flashmakeit 4 years ago from usa

Well I am going to miss reading poetry from you. I must admit that I really like how you write about famous singer.


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mary615 4 years ago from Florida

I wanted to comment on your article, but I'm just getting "white boxes" so I'm missing a lot. Just read in the forums this is happening a lot. I'll come back later and see if they will load.

I understand your problem with not wanting others to copy your work, and I don't blame you for the measures you are taking. Good luck.


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

I'm unfamiliar with the different styles of poetry so thanks for explaining them. I'm sorry to hear that you're no longer publishing your poetry here due to that theft issue. However, bear in mind that we also managed to get the site shut down, so I hope you'll reconsider. Voting this Up and Beautiful.


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Vellur 4 years ago from Dubai

You are an expert in poetry and the various methods used to write them,every time I read something new and learn more. Thank you for sharing.


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poet83 4 years ago from Windsor, Va.

Wonderful assonance in this poem! I love it! Voted up and beautiful!


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Express10 4 years ago from East Coast

I enjoyed your poem and am sorry that you have been victimized by people that cannot write what they feel and take others' experiences to pass off as their own.


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Justin, you might think about adding an email subscription to your blog, it is really helpful. And if you have one and I just didn't see it, I apologize.


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Great write Justin. I so understand and I wish you luck in getting your work in print.

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