Brooklyn 2 A.M.


The garden spot of the world,

yet there wasn’t a single flower,

Brooklyn 2 A.M. a demented hour,

the homeless bag lady

huddled in the corner, sits,

as the cold air hits

without a warning,

it was the bite and chill

of another winter morning,

the sadness stacked,

the 24 hour diner, packed,

waitresses popping pills,

but were always on top

of the free refills,

a stranger staring into

a stale cup of coffee,

nursing it sip by sip,

thinking about stealing

another man’s tip,

listening to the crowd,

human left-overs, losers,

night-shift workers, drunks, all very loud,

evening girls walking in with chronic fatigue,

gum-smacking, lips pursing,

pimps following, spitting and cursing,

talking the talk,

as cigarette butts littered the sidewalk,

and time stood still

seemingly oblivious of the sadness until,

darkness had its fill,

Brooklyn 2 A.M. humanity at its core,

for real, for sure.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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madmachio 4 years ago from Kansas

Love the picture you make. Great poem!!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks mad...


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Frank, you have an amazing gift to paint vivid pictures with your words. Beautifully done. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

well Ttombs hub pages thinks I am in violation.. hmm I guess my language may be to harsh for them.. but I am so glad you liked it Frank


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Great gritty write Frank! Just great word painting!


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

Frank, I read this earlier and was impressed with the realism (should have commented). You've got that late night Tom Waits blues scene going on. I am shocked that you've been moderated, this is mild compared to some of the stuff that gets published daily here on Hub Pages. Keep up the good work. Regards, snakeslane


Hubert Williams 4 years ago

A poem worthy of Dragnet, Mickey Spillane or the Naked City. Voted up


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Yes, the Dragnet prologue came to mind, as did a set-up for a Raymond Chandler novel. A rhythm of a different place and time most of us would wonder at if we were suddenly transported there. UP!


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justateacher 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Another great one Frank...as always I love the way you make us feel as if we are a part of the scene..


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Wow frank I always love your poems.. they described the city of Brooklyn so well..I have never been there but I can see it with your words.

Love it Frank

voted up

Debbie


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and intriguing. I agree with your very accurate description of Brooklyn at 2AM. Not to mention maybe a derelict or two crawling about smelly garbage cans. However it also depends on where you live. I was born and raised in Bay Ridge. At that time the neighborhood was the greatest. 2AM in the wintertime would find absolutely deserted streets. 2AM in the summertime might even find people sitting on door stoops or by buildings looking to cool off before the heat of the day hits. Unfortunately I've heard the neighborhood has changed and there are lots of Arabs, Russians and other Middle East immigrants and I wonder what it is like now. Especially after reading you descriptive poem.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Audrey and snakeslane for stopping by.. bless you guys :) Frank


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Hubert and X-- and Writer20 oh and Our Dear Ms Brooks, Just a teacher and Gypsy thank you all for having stopped by this diner and leaving a wonderful tip ( your comments ) bless you all


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Your words made it all come alive. I am happy to be in my tiny town at 2 am, especially after reading your raw and gritty poem. Thanks Frank. You never fail in your poetry.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Frank this is definitely one of my faves in your crime/city noir poems. Felt like i was on the night streets in Taxi Driver or something. Wish i knew poetic terms better but you've got 'em righteous in this classic my friend.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Im so glad you're in a tiny town too H--LOL thanks for popping by, and Alastar always glad to have you visiting the diner at 2am LOL thanks for your loyalty bless you both


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

FRANK!!! Your poetry is so awesome my friend. I really like your stories also. You are a talent that one day will get what he deserves. You are big time Frank, so keep reaching for the stars pal.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL thanks thelyricwriter you deserve the same fate..:)


Charles Hilton 4 years ago

Wow! That was nice! Very evocative and well paced!

Way up!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for reading Charles :)


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Moms-Secret 4 years ago from Central Florida

On the outside looking in. I see most of the world like that and wonder...


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

hey moms good seeing you :)


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Moms-Secret 4 years ago from Central Florida

Always good to see you Frank...

I was raised in Bklyn. Thankfully, I was never at a diner at 2am.


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

the imagery is so vivid as if i'm actually there...


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

goodmorning Raci thank you for visiting Brooklyn at @ 2am..:) bless you


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Storytellersrus 4 years ago from Stepping past clutter

Now I am VERY glad my daughter did not move to Brooklyn!!!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Brooklyn is still the Garden spot of the world LOL :) thanks for reading storyteller


lovedoctor926 3 years ago

Brilliant Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Marlene


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Cyndi10 3 years ago from Georgia

Wow, Frank. This was dark, dark with some knockout verses like "...the sadness stacked, the 24 hour diner packed..." and "...seemingly oblivious of the sadness until darkness had its fill..." Your verses made me feel like I was there and very glad that I wasn't.


SandCastles 3 years ago

It's a very good poem but a sad poem. There's sadness is suburbia too; it's everywhere. But there is also happiness, even if it comes in small doses.

At a coffee shop, I saw man drawing pictures and he was really good. I learned that the waitresses let him sit there and draw as he sipped on a coffee. I think they gave him free re-fills. I don't think he had anywhere to live; I'm not sure. He drew a picture for me and wouldn't accept any payment.

Coffee Shop

"Nobody asks why you're here, not alone, not at home, a place to disappear. A woman with a baby, a man, a book, a lady in tattered clothes, an old man telling war stories, everyone with a story, some talk, some don't, everyone with a story and no place to go".


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for the visit Cyndi and Sands thanks for your entry bless you both


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Bettyoverstreet10 2 years ago from Vacaville, Ca.

It is so sad, the homeless everywhere. Have Happy New Year!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Bettyoverstreet10


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tillsontitan 2 years ago from New York

You've certainly described Brooklyn at 2:00 am and I have a feeling many other cities at 2:00 am. The time when all good folks are home and in bed but the city lives with its night people, the ones you've described so well. Oblivious to the sadness....

Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

Keep 'em coming Frank.


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cam8510 2 years ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

I just love how this begins,

The garden spot of the world,

yet there wasn’t a single flower,

Brooklyn 2 A.M. a demented hour

Made me think of tom waits' album nighthawks at the diner.

just love how this begins,


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Cam :)


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

till thank you for stopping by the diner :)

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