COOL JACK...by b. Malin

POOL TALK...

I met "Jack" at the Pool today...

I thought he was Pretty Cool,

With his Jet Black Hair,

And his Eyes of Baby Blue.

It was a Beautiful Sunny Day,

At the Pool today.

He swam over to me and said,

"Hi, I'm Jack"...What's your Name"?

I found myself smiling, As I said my name.

I'll play along...I'll play his game.

"Want to swim to the Deep End"?

He said.

I said, "Well"...

As my Man, Lover Man,

Jumped into the pool.

I introduced one to the other...

As they surveyed one another,

And acted... Cordially.

Jack swam away as Lover Man,

leaned in closer to say...

"He's got a Crush on You Missy".

"Oh come now" I say, Blushing slightly,

As I looked Jack's way, to see him waving...

From the Deep End, of the Pool..."Wow" I say,

As Lover Man asks, "Should I worry...

After all, He is a Younger Man"...

Now Jack is back, with an older Man,

His "GrandPa"...

"How did I do"? he says looking straight at me.

"You did fine for someone who is Nine"...

I say...

And then two young girls jump into the Pool,

And Jack is gone...he's no fool...

As they giggle and laugh, as he asks them

Their names...




Comments 22 comments

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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Sly!

And funny...so I voted that way. :-)


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Fiddleman 5 years ago from Zirconia, North Carolina

I love these stories with a twist that you do so well, keep um coming!!


Cheryl Kapelner-Champ 5 years ago

Very cool!

Mother Lightning

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Cheryl Kapelner-Champ 5 years ago

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Love & Peace Always- To a very special writer & poet !

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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Thank you WillStarr, it was a fun piece to write...So glad that you liked it!

Fiddleman, a compliment from you is always treasured. Thank you.

Hi Cheryl, so glad you thought this one "so cool"!


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Truckstop Sally 5 years ago

Love it!! You had me going at first. I thought there would be some drama. I had to re-read to clear it up. Sweet Jack and Sweet Lover Man!


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Truckstop Sally, so glad you loved it...had you going there...all's well that ends well!


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breakfastpop 5 years ago

So sweet!


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Breakfastpops, Thank you!


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epigramman 5 years ago

...well when you write like this - I am your Cool Colin -

as I absolutely adore this side of you - and it's very true too - I love your writing and the 'many different sides' of you!!!!!


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Right back at you "Cool Colin", THANKS...That's probably why I enjoy reading your Hubs and Poems as well.


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thebluestar 5 years ago from Northern Ireland

Well b. you had me going too. I honestly thought at the beginning that Jack was going to be a dog lol Fooled me rightly. Loved it.


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arb 5 years ago from oregon

The poet takes from thread and begins to weave a tale

that keeps the sweet surprise, until she lifts the veil!

Very, very, clever b.


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Thanks Bluestar, I was looking to do something "light" for a change...So glad you enjoyed!

Hey Arb, thanks...It was a fun one to do...My husband loved it!


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daydreamer13 5 years ago

Too cute! Very funny!


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Thanks daydreamer, sometimes you've just gotta have fun and go with it...


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chspublish 5 years ago from Ireland

Nice one. Enjoyed that. Refreshing piece.


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Thanks Chspublish, It was fun and refreshing to write!


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Fossillady 5 years ago from Saugatuck Michigan

Hm, surprising twist at the end, cool lady! At first it reminded me of Cool hand Luke with ole blue eyes! Sure didn't turn out that way! Too cute!


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Thanks Fossillady, just for the fun of it...every now and then...Thanks for enjoying, and leaving such nice comments.


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Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina

Awww, I was wondering about the age of this lover, hee hee. Great piece-lots of fun; I thoroughly enjoyed it. LOL


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b. Malin 5 years ago Author

Hey Thanks Denise...I still laugh to myself about that one! So glad you enjoyed.

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