Clay Money: Poem

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The format on this is a little off, but actually might enhance the meaning and fun of the poem. I hope you'll enjoy it and, as always, I'm open to critiques.


I understand that gambling is an addictive vice for nay people, and this poems seeks in no way to minimize that. Rather, it is simply a view into human beings using poker chips and the personas of men and women gathered around a poker table. I'm am also planning to revise this poem in the next few weeks, so please check back often.

Enjoy!







Clay Money


Smooth clay money denominated

by color. On their face,

painted brightly the words LAST FRONTIER,

lying in furious short stacks of ten,

maliciously marching across

green felt,

three deep and ten wide. The remainder rummage

between my fingers with a dull

ringing

as I watch the faces, numbers, shapes , colors letters fall,

across the felt

seeing how they match up with the ones

in my hand, bringing with them the rising

and fallings

of the stacks.

I’m cautious to release them.

To my right, frightening stacks of twenty,

ten deep

but only five wide, powerful

in a more obvious way. Their owner is careful, but somewhat

more careless then I. He does not finger

his remainder, but merely lets it lay there,

lonely and unstacked. He broods

and stacks

and destacks, seemingly

without worry or care.

When he runs out,

he pulls out green wads of paper

and creates more stacks

of twenty.

To my left, uneven stacks that rise

and fall with haste, without nourishment

and with much frequency, seemingly with no regard

to the faces, numbers, shapes, colors and letters in his own hands,

not to mention the ones we all share

on the felt.

He shuffles his clay money between his fingers,

but doesn’t grow attached as they are tossed

amongst the others

far more frequently than mine—far more frequently

than everyone’s—and are rarely returned

or multiplied. Before long, the holder

and his haphazard clay money vanish

and order is returned.

I smile at the smoothness between my fingers.


all rights reserved. copyright Justin W. Price

Thanks for Reading.

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PDXKaraokeGuy 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Jamie. It's still a work in progress but I love using poker as a life metaphor.


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jhamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

What an awesome poem, it brought back alot of memories of living in Nevada.. Jamie


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Cyndi. I'm pleased that you enjoyed this piece!


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Cool and fun to read. Excellent piece that draws you into the game.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks deborah... I may be revising this one soon...are you following my blog? I'm not putting many poems on my hub anymore


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

wow I felt like I was playing cards. awesome poem

Debbie


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much, Till. I'm actually in the process of going through some revisions on this one, so, come back soon. it may look different! always nice to see you...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Cyndi, I'm glad this has unlocked something for you. I admire poetry and love to share that adoration with others.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

I felt like I was at the poker table watching you and the players around you. I wanted to pick up a poker chip and feel its smoothness between my fingers as I watched to see who would end with the most chips. Different format but definitely interesting. Voted up and interesting. Thanks for SHARING.


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cclitgirl 4 years ago from Western NC

An illustration of how so many of our actions reveal interesting qualities about our personalities. I'm digging your poems: I used to be intimidated, but you've unlocked a key somehow and I feel like I'm understanding your poetry. Nice! :)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, free. I just submitted this to a work shop, so I may come back and revise it. Be sure to check back! Thanks for commenting!


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freetron 4 years ago from Florida

Takes me back to younger days when I traveled more and if a casino was nearby - I was drawn to it like a manget. The ebb and flo of the chips is an emotionally charged internal dance all hid well by a poker face. Well done.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Peggy, I'm glad you enjoyed this and understood the spirit :-)


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Peggy W 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

Your title caught my eye. This really defines gambling and the value of those chips and those who hold them or discard them freely, beautifully. You really captured the spirit of this with few but finely chosen words. Well done and different. Up, interesting and awesome votes!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, Nity. I'm please that you enjoyed this!


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nityanandagaurang 4 years ago

very beautiful poem PDXKaraokeGuy.Every word of it has is telling it own meaning.I am looking for your other poems like this.Voting it up.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, Raci. I'm glad you enjoyed this!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

i used to play poker too when i was not yet busy with HP...nice hand there Justin...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Alastar, not really much into poker machines, but I always seem to do well in vegas on the Price is Right slot :-) Thanks for reading and commenting.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Justin this puts one right there my man, can feel the clay money still. Seriously good piece you wrote. You ought to try the poker machines at Harrah's on the Cherokee reservation over here, maybe you'd have some luck; not too many others do lol.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Susan, I used to play on Poker Stars, but, I cashed out and now I can't re deposit because Americans are no longer allowed to play online poker for money


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

The Russian mob, really .... wow that would be scary. Have you tried Poker Stars? Online and you play for money.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, Kelly. I'm so pleased that you enjoy this!


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RealHousewife 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO

This one is super close to my heart! I love it!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

wd... nah, but it's a nice thought, ain't it?


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

pmc, thanks and you're welcome. Thanks for the votes!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Audrey, it is. Thanks!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks drTruthman. I appreciate the votes


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Deborah. I'm glad you enjoyed this!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Mona. I'm glad you enjoyed. I appreciate your comment!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Vinaya, I appreciate that. That;'s a great compliment coming from such a skilled writer.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thank you so much Ivona!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks for your praise and comment, Aurelio


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Susan, it's not poker if there's no money involved :-) I play at this little club by my house that's owned by the Russian Mob. It's scary and awesome


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Michele, actually, people who don't play tend to win, since they don't know when to let go of a hand and rely on luck :0)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Gypsy for your analysis and comment


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Pickles. It's just something I observe when I'm playing.


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WD Curry 111 4 years ago from Space Coast

Alright! PDXKaraokeGuy is buying!


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pmccray 4 years ago from Utah

Well done. Thank you for sharing, voted up, marked interesting


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Poker is fun! And this is a fun write Justin!


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Drtruthman 4 years ago from Harlingen, Texas

Enjoyed very much. Voted Up most across. good job.


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Very good. Quite unique in format but I loved the title, topic and even enjoyed the flow.

I voted Up, funny, awesome and interesting. Good job.


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Mona Germain 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Unique topic for a poem and evocative style. You played the intensity well and do give the essence of the game. Wow! I agree Vinaya about the metaphor too.!


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Hello Justin, your poetic pattern is very interesting. I always love your stylized writing. Clay money is a wonderful metaphor. Your choice of expression is superb.


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Ivona Poyntz 4 years ago from UK

Hypnotic play


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

I'm impressed by the format experiment -- especially the ability to control space. But I didn't know what clay money was either. Voting this Up and Interesting.


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

PDX, I love poker although I don't usually play for real money anymore. Sometimes on Poker Stars but I do play on Facebook.


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Michele Travis 4 years ago from U.S.A. Ohio

This hub was very . I had to read all of it to understand it. I have never played poker, but it sounds interesting. But, since I have never played it I am sure I would lose....lol

Thanks for the hub!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Awesome. The lure of the numbers and the fun when those stacks rise and the sadness when they vanish unnoticed.


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picklesandrufus 4 years ago from Virginia Beach, Va

Enjoyed reading this poem.your unique point of view of poker was entertaining!vote up


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks my friend. I used to play Daily, now, maybe once or twice a month. I'm glad you enjoyed this!


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echoe0021 4 years ago from Conway, AR

Awesome, I reminds me of how much I miss playing pokers. Wonderful description of the experience.

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