Come the Sentinel: a Frank Atanacio Challenge

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This verse follows The Examiner-1's hub "Heaven and Hell".

I have tried to reintroduce the "sentinel" created by tobusiness in her verse of that name.

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Come the Sentinel.

by John Hansen 2014


As April's soul rose from the grave

The demons crowded around.

Ghostly hands reached out to her,

Above consecrated ground.


The Sentinel surveyed the scene

From a tall dead oak nearby.

Then with a shrieking cry it swooped

Through the demonic funeral fray.

The spirits cried as if in pain,

As the black bird stole their prey.

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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

This is soo beautiful. ' As the black bird stole their prey ' Brilliant!


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WillStarr 2 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Very good! Up and awesome.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida

Saved by the blackbird! Nice job, Jodah!


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Jadah, I love how you brought this together, cleverly done. Midnight saves the day. :) Hope you're enjoying your Sunday.


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Bk42author 2 years ago from New York

Love this! Voted up!


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Clever and creative, Jodah. The Sentinel did his job!

Up and more, tweeting, pinning and sharing so HP will know of another contribution.

Hope you and your family are having a lovely Sunday.


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Beautiful write John!


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Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago

Awesome John, I don't want this month to go this fast, I am having too much fun reading wonderful poems like this one.

Voted up, UABI and shared.


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Sunshine625 2 years ago from Orlando, FL

Fabulous! :)


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

That is cool Jodah. We know who came out on top there. I loved it. I gave it a thumbs up and more.

Kevin


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Jodah, this is so vivid, so spot on and so..... darn good. It just set right with me, the wording, the vision it invokes. That image of the woman gives out a powerful presence that links to your stanza. Up,A,B and sharing. You are a fine poet, Sir Jodah.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Ruby. Every story needs a hero.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for the vote up Will, much appreciated.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Yes Shauna, I just had to reintroduce him to save the day.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Jo, I loved your sentinel, so had to bring Midnight back into it to save April from the demons. Sunday was good thanks, rainy.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Glad you liked it Bk, and thanks for the vote up.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Faith, much appreciated. We had a nice quiet Sunday. Had a couple of friends visit, and the best part was that It was raining all day


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading Audrey, much appreciated.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Yes Shyron, I agree. Poetry month has been great, and you know what? Other countries celebrate it in different months, so we can do it again...lol. Thanks for the vote up and shares too.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks so much Sunshine!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Glad you liked this one Kevin, thanks for the comment and thumbs up.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Lady Phyllis, I am glad you enjoyed this, and much appreciate your kind comment, vote up, and share.


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

This is the perfect way to end my day. Beautiful work, John!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Bill, have a good night.


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

I like that you picked the sentinel back up. The black bird was a foreboding touch.


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cecileportilla 2 years ago from West Orange, New Jersey

Very nice.Voted up!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Flourish, yes I thought that too.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading this Cecile, ant for your kind comment and vote up.


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Jodah, I just published a stanza to follow yours:

Angel with Broken Wings and the Sentinel

I like that you brought back the Sentinel, so I went with it also. I hope you like it.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

That's great Phyllis. Going to check it out now. Great title.


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Jodah, this is how I hope our beloved Frank is NOT doing:

http://www.newwaveinstruments.com/humor/misc/compu...


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Haha, I think that could be him by the time this challenge is finished. I don't envy him trying to compile all these into one poem I did it once with my "poem without end" but there wasn't quite as many verses as here and all of them were left in the comments, not separate hubs.


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

Very visual. A good one.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks MsDora.


ocfireflies 2 years ago

Good Morning!

I love your contribution to this incredible tale developing. I love the idea of these challenges and hope to contribute to one at some or time or the other. KUDOS/V+!

Blessings,

Kim


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Good Morning Kim, Glad you like this verse. It is a wonderful challenge. It will be great to read the entire finished poem if Frank can get it all together at the end. it would be good if you can take part some time in the future because you are a wonderful poet. Blessings back.


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

A wonderfully thought of poem.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Devika, glad you liked it.


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AliciaC 2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

The sentinel sounds like a very interesting character! Thanks for another great addition to the story in the poetry challenge, Jodah.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Alicia. My pleasure, this is fun.


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ubanichijioke 2 years ago from Lagos

awesome write! you are doing well, Sire.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Much appreciated Alexander. Thank you.


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truthfornow 2 years ago from New Orleans, LA

This is a very cool verse.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank your for reading truthfornow. Glad you liked it.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

Jodah being a poet is wonderful but being a great poet is you


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Frank, what can I say? Thank you.


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

Another wonderful read from you my dear friend .Voting up and sharing.

Eddy.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Eddy. Your kind comment is always appreciated.


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Dana Tate 2 years ago from LOS ANGELES

Another exquisite poem. The picture with the woman sitting in the grave-yard was scary..... voted up my friend and sharing.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much Dana. That pic is reported to be considered a real ghost.


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teaches12345 2 years ago

Very intense scene with a heroric ending.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks so much teaches12345, I appreciate you're reading this and your kind comment.

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