Poem- Contrast

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Narrative Poem

So, this is actually my first narrative poem. I was reading one that was featured on the hubpages home page and I was inspired to write one myself. So before I start i would like to thank Pachuca213 for unknowingly and unintentionally inspiring me. I hope you enjoy it. Oh and please give me your opinion of it. I'm even thinking of continuing it if the mood arrives.


I took a step into the dark, 
I feared what was ahead
My brain was warning me of everything 
my body filled with dread

I took a breath to calm my nerves
But that only made them scream out
I stuttered in my footsteps
I stumbled all about

Some people may think me drunk
But I assure you that is false
My blood is hot with poison
My heart seeks for a pulse

But in the absence of my soul
My spirit seeks your cure
But when it isn't there no more
I seek for what is pure

Your brilliance keeps me sane
Your vanity so white
But without your grace here now
My lungs become so tight

I crash into things everywhere
From left, to right, tonight
I cannot find my footing
The darkness is too bright

“Oh help me dear sir you
I cannot find my way
The moonlight isn't here tonight
It didn't come to play”

“Give me a hand or two
Maybe three maybe four
No matter how you do it
Just lead me through that door”

“But silly man there is no gate
No path, No door, No where
Just this alley all around you
And for you, I do not care”

He gave me a push backward
He dare destroy my dream
So now I have nil again
Not even a single gleam

Another step into the dark,
not knowing what was ahead
Hopefully I will find the way
So I do not end up dead

© 2009 Johnathan David

Comments 5 comments

Pachuca213 6 years ago

I enjoyed this immensely! I felt every bit of it..very intense and very good! Wonderfully done!

And by the way- thank you for such kind words about me. I am an ordinary lady who just loves to share my passions, joys and sorrows to whomever will listen...I am honored that you think so much of me as a poet. =)

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Johnathan David 6 years ago Author

Thanks!! I'm glad to hear that you liked my poem. I figure that I should try experimenting with my poetry and I'm glad that this one went well.

And you're welcome! You should give yourself more credit. You're a featured hubber are you not? That should mean something right? But besides that, being a poet isn't about the skill but about the feelings behind them. Those feelings you described are what makes poetry your own. In my opinion, thats all you need to make a good poem. So, Thanks Again for the inspiration and your comment.

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Arthur Gulumian 6 years ago from Pasadena, CA

Interesting poem Johnathan.

Lady_Tenaz 5 years ago

had to come back to read this again...and thank you for being so nice to say that I inspired you. (this is my new profile btw)- JJ

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Johnathan David 4 years ago Author

@Arthur Thank you Arthur.

@Lady Tenaz haha. Come back as many times as you need. And no problem. It's the truth after all.

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