Dawning: A Short Story

 

My eyes awakened with the sun; slowly with a yawn. It was a small gesture signifying the release of a long night and the welcoming of a new day. My hair stuck up in all directions like a cute porcupine full of unlovable quills. Trudging, I made it to my destination: the coffee maker. Half blind, within the endings of a dream-filled coma, I poured the coffee in the maker while smiling at the aroma.

After a few minutes of the counter holding me up, I poured a cupful of hope into my favorite mug. Before I allowed the ticking of the clock to remind me of what I had to do that day, I reveled in the brief ecstasy of consumed sugar and caffeine. Sigh, to-do lists attacked my little world like soldiers breaking into vacations, holidays, weekends, and students' summers. I closed my eyes: sandy beaches, misty mountains, deep valleys, golden rivers, magical places ...anywhere but here. And then I realize that I have a here and I have a job and I own things and I know people. So, I smile a crooked smile, gulp the rest of my brain-heightening coffee, and go put on bright, shiny clothes that match my newly acquired, positive attitude.


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ExoticHippieQueen 5 years ago

Short, but nicely written and packed full of imagery! Very well done, ebower!


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Thanks so much! I appreciate you sharing your opinion.


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vitalesweets 5 years ago from Upstate NY

Beautifully done, and agreed, packed with imagery! I really enjoyed this and the only thing I would change is the photos beside it, distracted me from what I was picturing in my mind! Your descriptive words give even better images :)


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Thank you, vitalesweets! I welcome that type of criticism :). That is so sweet of you; I'm glad my hard work paid off. Thanks again for reading!


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Lucky Cats 5 years ago from The beautiful Napa Valley, California

wOW! What fabulous descriptive metaphors and imagery...so much said in such a short story. Boy, Ebower, you've packed so much in these paragraphs and, I can sure RELATE!!! Very very GOOD!! Up Awesome Funny and I sure love that strong, steaming, fresh coffee in the morning!


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Thanks for your enthusiastic review, Lucky Cats! :) It made me smile and blush. I love my coffee, too!


Binaya.Ghimire 5 years ago

I also think the sun and the light invigorate us.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Yes, the morning is quite a magical time when everything seems fresh and new as the sun greets us.


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ahorseback 5 years ago

Ebower , such is the place we all begin our day .....the coffee maker ! The window . the crutch of the counter , and bad hair!....LOL....:-}


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Unfortunately, this is so true (well, about the bad hair part lol). Thanks for your two cents, ahorseback! :)


5 years ago

The effect of caffeine on one's morning, right...?

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Well, caffeine always makes my morning better. :)


5 years ago

I guess it must feel a bit like putting the plugs in one's gauges, first thing in the morning! :) Make one feel better...

Actually I gave up coffee a number of years ago; I just find that if I keep off it altogether it's just better all round, really.

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Lol; perhaps, but I sleep in mine. Well, whatever works for you. I'm pretty much addicted to caffeine.


5 years ago

Well, to be blunt, caffeine doesn't work for me; had enough!

(Like, your plugs are literally sleepers, worn 24/7?)

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Oh ok.

I sleep in them, but they fall out sometimes. Yes, I wear them all the time, unless I'm cleaning them.


5 years ago

Fall out? I see. Well, maybe if you managed to put in the Ogs that you like, instead of the 2gs, they would be less likely to fall out? (But what do I know?)

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

I'm not sure why they fall out. Yes, maybe my ears have stretched out a little too far.


5 years ago

Well, but a 0g pair would stay in more firmly, I guess. (But you're the expect more than I am...)

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

I just don't want to stretch them any further, but thanks.


5 years ago

Oh yes of course; you wanted to keep a conservative business look, in case you want to be hired in a conservative environment. Okay, yes.

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Right; I guess I don't want to limit myself.


5 years ago

I guess not.

(But I think you do really like the 0g, don't you?)

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

I like how it looks on some other people, but not for me.


5 years ago

Okay. You might even find, anyway, that leaving the plugs out overnight for a few days would cause the gauges to contract just a little so that your 2gs would stay in more easily in the long run.

(Two cents'.)

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

That could be a good idea. I'll think about trying that.


5 years ago

YW. I guess at around 2g it's the opposite to the standard piercings, whereby ppl keep sleepers in them to keep the holes from closing up.

Whereas at around your size gauge the holes aren't going to close up! (Doesn't stop you wearing studs in any other ear piercings further back that you may have, to keep them open, of course.)

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

This is very true. I'll probably just keep sleeping in them and then going on a hunt for them each morning. lol


5 years ago

Whereas other rings in ear piercings further along the lobe that you may have are likely to be clasped more tightly, so they don't come out overnight. It's kind of by their very nature, really.

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Yes, you're correct.


5 years ago

I was just re-reading your short story. 'I poured a cupful of hope into my favorite mug. ...I reveled in the brief ecstasy of consumed sugar and caffeine.'

You have a way of condensing the apparently mundane into expressive, memorable phrases!

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Thanks! *blush* :)


5 years ago

Well, it's true. This is probably why you should either do something like a Master's Degree in creative writing, or else train your artistic/aesthetic sense in some other way: painting, tattooing, drawing, even photography; in some sense they're pretty well related indirectly, at least.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

You're right; all of those areas are related. I hope to get my masters in English someday; maybe so I can become a professor.


5 years ago

Well, sounds good. You've done a lot of work anyway, but if this is what you want, you've also got a lot of work ahead of you, as well.

Blessings.


5 years ago

PS: Re. the continuum among writing, painting, tattooing, drawing, etc; as I see it, they are all about form and expression becoming increasingly a skill, with training and dedication, if the flair is there already.

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Well, that's true. Although, anything that's worth it will require work.


5 years ago

Yes, indeed. Anyway, keep up the looking for courses! Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Ok, I shall (as soon as I get a job to pay for them!).


5 years ago

Yes, it's always the underlying issue, funding. I guess that work/study options work okay for a lot of ppl. In a slightly different sense, too, apprenticeships are sort of based on this idea, too, of combining work with studies.

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Yes, that's true. That's one aspect I guess I had forgotten about.


5 years ago

I guess it all takes planning, anyway. On the one hand, good to be prayerfully open to the Lord's leading. On the other hand, getting plenty of information about study possibilities. It's striking the wise balance between planning in the light of fees etc, while being prayerfully open to the guidance of God, I reckon.

Blessings.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia Author

Yes, both are important!


4 years ago

So, any more short stories or poems in the pipeline?

Blessings.


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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

Right now I'm working on a piece about the Christmas story. I'm sure I'll write another Christmas poem before December ends, but I'm not working on any short stories right now. After this month, I hope to continue my science fiction series: 'No One'.


4 years ago

Well, God bless you with your efforts; you have your youth, clear memory and faculties and imagination; use them while you have them, I say.

Blessings.


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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

Thank you! I shall. :)

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