Desperate Wife

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Feelings Of A Desperate Wife

I bake the cake in your memories.

And blow the candle of my tears,

An unwanted guest was there

To remember me, my existence

In the cave of my thought

The witches of pain hunted me,

The soup of sadness served

We cut the cake

With a hope

That one day you would remember,

The way of that road;

And the day of the year

When moments of age are melting,

Clappings and clappings,

Vanish the bird of your image

My heart sighs

On fortune’s song of loneliness

My fair, unwanted guest;

Loneliness in black robe,

Dancing on the floor of life

With a wish

Happy Birth Day

To you lonely soul.

Explanation of the Poem

Feelings of a desperate wife, is a very simple poem with the touch of emotional depth. The whole structure of the poem revolves around the feelings of a woman. And the main theme revolves around three images wife, husband and loneliness. All images of the poem are knitted around the pain of that woman whose dear one is not with him on her birthday.

I bake the cake in your memories, here that woman bake a cake in the memories of her husband. And there were tears in her eyes. Here the image of candle used as a simile to explain the intensity of the image .Loneliness in this poem is the main image an unwanted guest but the only guest to accompany her on her birthday. And that is the loneliness which remembers her that she is alive.

The witches of pain hunted me,

There is intensity of feeling of pain these lines. But desperate woman still hopeful that one day her husband would remember her birthday. Here remembrance of the life partner is more important than that occasion of birthday. Here husband actually forgot her wife. But his wife is hopping that one day her husband would remember, that day even her age is melting like the wax of candle.

On her birthday loneliness claps, and fortunes passes an ironic smile. The bird of his image vanished. Here the image of bird uses to describe the presence of a person in her life was like a bird. Her heart was sighing on the fortunes song of loneliness .Moreover there is no one in her life except her husband. But unfortunately her husband has no feelings for her. Her fair friend is loneliness. But the woman is not in love with sadly she don’t have any option except to accept that unwanted guest means loneliness.

In a nut shell we can say that in this modern period we don’t have time for anyone. That is actually hallowing our relations. We need to stuff these relations with the stuff of love and remembering and sharing others sorrows and joys of life. And the only thing that makes the bond of husband and wife’s relation strong ,is caring and remembering each others in every walk of life.

Copyright© Asma Iftikhar

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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

This was a very sad birthday. To be forgotten on a birthday although they come every year. But this was very sad I broke a tear. Thanks for sharing this great emotional piece of art.

bella


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VENZKHVAM 5 years ago from Milk way galaxy, trying to find a more adventurous place in another galaxy with my great followers

Hi Asmaitfikar,

If the unwanted guest was not in your dream you could have created a happy poem by NOW. But nice penning of lines.

voted up and beautiful


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks bella for reading my poem .and thanks to support me.you are really very kind.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

hi venz yes dear here i use the negative capability to compose this poem.thanks for your kindness.


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

Birthdays are very special in my opinion and how sad to be forgotten on a birthday. Great work Asmaiftikhar and what a beautiful profile name.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks a lot acetanna for stopping and commenting .thanks a lot for support and kindness humble writer.


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Peaceful life 5 years ago from Las vegas

i think ..BIRTHDAY issue in not a serious desperation in a woman life. love is name of compromise and sacrifice. but if a man do real love with his wife, than it's should be remember his wife birthday, fabulous peom********


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks peaceful life.definately love is everytthing.that is actully the food of life.


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hafeezrm 5 years ago from Pakistan

well portrayed touching ones heart.


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Uriel 5 years ago from Lebanon

very touching! the pain portrayed is so genuine and untainted! glad to have stopped here and read this poem, there is nothing worse that being left out and forgotten :/

Glad to be a fan,

Uriel


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Uriel 5 years ago from Lebanon

very touching! the pain portrayed is so genuine and untainted! glad to have stopped here and read this poem, there is nothing worse that being left out and forgotten :/

Glad to be a fan,

Uriel


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks uriel for your kind words.And many many thanks for following me.


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satice_j 5 years ago from via the Bronx, NY

A very different take on the birthday party. It reads so many different ways but still your first intended way. The husband could be alive and forgetful, or to me he could be the husband who is gone, taken home and you are the wife in despair yearning for his presence at the party. Hauntingly beautiful, friend! It was touching, alive, and dark. Nice.


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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia

so heartfelt, each line penned with such sadness that the reader cant help but be drawn in a little and feel your pain. A great write my dear, I hope you have more welcome guests next year


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

nighthag thanks a lot for stoping and liking my poem.here i use the powers of negative capability to feel the pain of a wife.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

nighthag thanks a lot for stoping and liking my poem.here i use the powers of negative capability to feel the pain of a wife.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

nighthag thanks a lot for stoping and liking my poem.here i use the powers of negative capability to feel the pain of a wife.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

nighthag thanks a lot for stoping and liking my poem.here i use the powers of negative capability to feel the pain of a wife.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

nighthag thanks a lot for stoping and liking my poem.here i use the powers of negative capability to feel the pain of a wife.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

satice and uriel thanks for stoping and comenting.


iftikhar 5 years ago

beautiful poem portraying genuine feelings of loneliness and got forgotten that special day by a loved one. awesome to read.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

Thats my honor that you like this poem.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

I think I have seen this woman. Beautiful poem.


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Seafarer Mama 5 years ago from New England

Beautiful poem, asmaiftikhar. Very sadly beautiful. Since I love celebrating my birthday, it would be a very sad day if my family ever forgot it.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks dear you like my poem and many many thanks for commenting on my hub.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks seafarer for stopping,commenting and liking my hub.


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Nsirius 5 years ago from Fukuoka, Japan

"In the cave of my thought" Beautiful! It makes me think about it again and again.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

Thanx Nsirius for liking my piece of poetry.


Anaa Fatyma 5 years ago

hmmm... thts beautiful..


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

Thanks fatima for stopping and commenting on my hub.


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ubanichijioke 5 years ago from Lagos

Once again, an excellent poem. I see the emotion run through the lines. Voted awesome and beautiful. Bless you


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

thanks jioke for stopping and commenting on my hub.


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joseph merlin 5 years ago from Jupiter

Beautiful Hub....yes this moment is really precious and shows true love when your Husband remembers the day.....

Will follow you to read some more great Hubs.


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

Thanks Joseph for commenting,liking and above all encouraging me.Thanks for your kind words.


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rosika 5 years ago

very beautiful poem! I clicked "interesting", "awesome" and "beautiful"....to be forgotten by someone special of your life on a special day of life makes u feel like being worthless for that person and breaks ur heart. Nobody should ever do it!


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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan Author

Thanks roseka for liking my poetry thats my honor that u like my poetry.

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