Disasterpiece in The Tick of Time

My first canvas painting.
My first canvas painting.

Entitys existence wore a soiled sole that paved a road of sable suspicion

Blank pathetic sort of face that sketched a curse, the line of life demolition

Enigma came in the wake of the moon to gamble the hand of chances wife

Footprints trampled underfoot across the ribbon of fate calling eternal after life

Uncontrollable hunger that starved the mouth of the skull hollow set thy name

Doom rode in to dark tonight as danger saluted with a stance now proclaim

Hand that tells to man a whisper that lingers every note that tocks

Echoes of darkness that trailed with truth to every tick known to clock

Stares that stiffen up the lip to silence, the sound of deaf that could hear

Words piercing the flesh; fingers of hand that burn with blood to smear

Point of entry rejected, now delivered him to the living tomb of faults alley

Torn asunder from beneath the shadows, whispers out of time the "Grande Finale"

Comments 19 comments

Brian82 4 years ago

Good job:)

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bellawritter23 4 years ago from California Author

Thank you very kindly



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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana

Like a story out of a Grimm fairy tale. Dark and haunting. an urban legend told in a small town, about death and the curse of time. brilliantly written. loved it!

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

wow this was really good.. and damn I love the title too..voted awesome!!!!

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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Hello to a great artist, your poem left me thinking hard about it.

Voted up and awesome, Joyce.

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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Wow, Awesome..Loved your painting..Missed you..

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The original Eman 4 years ago from london

Great stuff bella, the first line blew away and i was in awe of the language used throughout this piece. Great imagery and very intense at times which made it even better. Nice work

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bellawritter23 4 years ago from California Author


Hey hunny, how is it going? Wow all of that my writing ..... thanks for giganasaurus compliment and ego boost :D huge smiles lol Thanks again hope all is well!!

Frank, Thank you very much it was actually written about a neighbor of mine and how he walked his path kinda inspired this so I thank him....Thanks again!!


Long and hard about? If you wouldn't mind me asking the curious cat inquires ;)...Please feel free to answer

Always, thank you very much I appreciate the comment and time taken to comment and read.

O.G. Eman, Thank you I am pleased to know you found it blowing PLEASE feel free of reading some of my other features thanks again it is appreciated!!

Smiles all


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Awesome poem!

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MsDora 4 years ago from The Caribbean

Gruesomely creative with the ring of classical mystery. Outstanding vocabulary. Great job!

Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi bella

"Footprints trampled underfoot across the ribbon of fate calling eternal after life" Wonderful writiing!

Voted up and awesome

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acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

You never disappoint! Sorry I have not been around of late - hope all is well with you.

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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas

Quite an intricate but likely realistic description of those last hours of mankind....a demise coming at our own hands. Thanks for sharing! ~WB

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bellawritter23 4 years ago from California Author

Gypsy, thank you I appreciate the comment!!

MsDora, Thank you I try to be creative with my words and make it work somehow. Thanks for stopping by...

Sue, thanks for stopping by its very much appreciated I'm happy you enjoyed it.

ace, its great to hear from you I have been MIA status as well I am doing better now

fell in a slump but I'm surviving. thanks for

the comment again and hope all is well with you!! I'm glad I never disappoint my readers.

WB, you hit it right on the nail. Yes the last minutes of a man who thought he had the time.

To all have a Marry Christmas!!!


Sueswan 4 years ago

"Stares that stiffen up the lip to silence, the sound of deaf that could hear"

Amazing imagery. Love your painting.

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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

What a grim and bold step into an amazing imagination, Bella. Your writing is always so impressive and so daring. And yes, the title totally stands out. It would make a great title for a book. :)

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bellawritter23 4 years ago from California Author

sueswan, thank you kindly an image I had to paint in words and visually.

Astra, Thanks so much for the compliments. I am glad that I can get a comment of this nature it makes me feel good knowing I can have this type of affect.



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Ruby H Rose 3 years ago from Northwest Washington on an Island

"Disasterpiece" Oh yes, I do love playing with words too. And do I love the canvas, oh mighty yes! On with my reading quest.

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bellawritter23 3 years ago from California Author

Ruby, Thank you very much for commenting on this piece of disaster lol Hope your having a great day!!! Read on sista....

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