Dog Eyes

Dog Eyes

The sting and the prickle,
Has left an inner tickle;
‘Bout the size of a nickel,
Like the juice of a pickle.

Sometimes it emanates,
And then it radiates;
He simply cannot wait,
For it to ‘vaporate.

When he wined, she whined,
Mind fucked comes to mind;
Her wind helped him unwind,
But her kind was not so kind.

When her fingers make a fist,
And refused to be kissed;
He was fodder to be dissed,
Most everything is missed.

Way down from below.
It was not just for show;
But if everything must go,
Then he should really know.

When her heart made a flip,
And she couldn’t get a grip;
So he just bit his lip,
When he made every trip.

There’s always expectations,
Despite many hesitations;
And life’s fluctuations,
With his miscalculations.

There must be something wrong,
Or was it all along?
Together they might belong,
But that’s another song.


I have faith in my audience, but I just wanted to be clear about the title and what it means. I was trying an experimental point of view to convey the story. It's from a third person point of view and attempted to be both subjective and objective simultaneously -- if that's possible. This is because it's from the mind of, yes, you guessed it, a dog. So, I suppose that makes it third dog perspective? I may have "personified" (or perhaps humanized for lack of a better term) the narrator too much, but oh well, like I said, it was experimental; and, personally, I am happy with the outcome.

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jami l. pereira 5 years ago

I am happy with your outcome too , im not a professional , but i love poetry , and this is really good ! write on! i loov forward to reading more of your work , thank you for sharing this :)

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jdflom 5 years ago from Sacramento, CA Author

Thank you for your compliment. Glad you like it.

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