Broken Promises Poem

Don’t go!!


You promised you would be here to dry my tears,

to watch me grow,

to help me fight my battles

and become a man!


But you lied,

And I’m left here with nothing but memories.

A broken home,

you were the only one holding it together,

but i guess now you are just another story to tell

another line in my scrap book.


Just watch over me

Watch my feelings disperse and fly away

and keep me safe!
You may have broken your promise but i wont break mine. . .
I’ll make you proud, one day!!

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anndavis25 4 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

I feel sadness here. But hope. The fact that you will make the person proud, says you have the strength to be all that you can be. This person left you a blessing.

Up and beautiful. Ann Davis


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richbrayan 4 years ago from London, United Kingdom Author

Thank you Ann for reading this piece :)


KDuBarry03 4 years ago

There is so much emotion in this piece! I get the feeling that the narrator in the poem is saying the last line more so out of sorrow than hope. Definitely left it interpretive; well done!


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richbrayan 4 years ago from London, United Kingdom Author

Thanks KDubarry, I'm glad you liked it!


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MrsBrownsParlour 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

Heartbreaking feelings. vividly expressed! ~Lurana


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

Very emotive :)


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richbrayan 3 years ago from London, United Kingdom Author

Thank you very much @MrsbrownsParlour and @Anna for your kind comments

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