Dreams of Belated Spring...Haiku Style Poetry

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'Air On The G String' - Bach



Flowered sails fight the wind

For the taste of sweet harbors

The monarchs seek...

Sun-tulip hearts that cup

Cold tears from mottled skies

Tremble in the mist.

The robins’ dotting thrusts

Peek into the crisp earth,

Full yet unripened.

Cherry petals blush,

Yielding swift as a mistress

To the bed below...

Where wallflowers stay

The time-jester’s dance,

And long for the kiss of spring.



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JohnDoePoetry 5 years ago from Camden,N.J.

you will get better just keep working at it


Maya 5 years ago

I read this first then read it out loud. There is probably more than one meaning but the meaning I came away with kind of sneaks up on you and hits with a WOW. How we are afraid to follow our goals and dreams, or to reach out in life or for love out of fear of failure. Or because we didn’t think the timing or conditions were right. The wallflower dreams of belated spring. What an amazing retrospective about life Genna. Your usual magic is still writing strong.


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diogenes 5 years ago from UK and Mexico

Hi Genna. Good effort. Genna. I am not qualified to comment on Haiku although I have done several in one verse form.

Here is one.

"A flower died;

The world stood still,

Until it became a star"

But the strict forms are 5 7 5 or something like that. Perhaps JohnDoePoetry might tell us? Bob


DanWW 5 years ago

Dear lady, I noticed our connection with nature plays a significant role in some of the things you write. You look at life realistically, and write about it with beauty, passion and artistry without sounding pretentious. This is an uncommon gift. You go deep, Genna, and do it well.

Haiku does not follow one set rule, but the 5, 7, 5 or a total of seventeen syllables is one, which you followed beautifully. Also, it does not always have to change in perspective in the last line. For example, Basho wrote: ‘Lady Butterfly perfumes her wings by floating over the orchid.’

Your haiku gets my vote. Each section rolls into the next, flawlessly, and is simply brilliant in its subtle, profound message.


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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

I am not a Haiku purist at all. I am a lover of words and beauty. So I enjoyed reading these and indeed they were simple and clean and made sense. I think you did great and encourage you to write more.


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b. Malin 5 years ago

"And Long for the Kiss of Spring"...Wow, for someone who's never written a Poem before, that was Wonderful and Beautiful attempt, Genna...Hope you will continue, I look forward to the Treat!


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sofs 5 years ago

Beautiful.. Haiku in its pure form or not, poetry flows from your hands and thoughts lady..loved it !!


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K. Burns Darling 5 years ago from Orange County, California

I have been writing poetry all of my life, and I have to say that you are off to a beautiful start! I just found you today by way of the amazing epi, and am glad to see that you've decided to stay around if only part-time...Thank you for your follow, it is deeply appreciated!


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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Genna, I am so glad to see you back. I have never written a Haiku but what you have written here is beautiful!


writeronline 5 years ago

Hi Genna, nice work, as always. Did you know though, that the Haiku is such an integral part of communication for the Japanese, that Haiku verses have replaced the traditionally impersonal and unhelpful Microsoft error messages?

Where we in the West continue to pound the desk and mouth expletives, the Japanese maintain the elegance and style of quiet contemplation of that which cannot always be explained, or fixed.

For example:

The Web site you seek

cannot be located, but

countless more exist.

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Chaos reigns within.

Reflect, repent, and reboot.

Order shall return.

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Program aborting

Close all that you have worked on.

You ask far too much.

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Windows crashed again.

I am the Blue Screen of Death.

No one hears your screams.

Yesterday it worked.

Today it is not working.

Windows is like that.

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Your file was so big.

It might be very useful.

But now it is gone.

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Stay the patient course.

Of little worth is your rage.

The network is down.

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A crash reduces

Your expensive computer

To a simple stone.

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Three things are certain

Death, taxes and lost data.

Guess which has occurred.

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You step in the stream,

But the water has moved on.

This page is not here.

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Out of memory.

We wish to hold the whole sky,

But we never will.

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Having been erased,

The document you're seeking

Must now be retyped.

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Serious error.

All shortcuts have disappeared.

Screen, mind, both are

. blank.

How about that, Genna? Lyricism and cynicism in the one form...


Fay Paxton 5 years ago

Genna, I can make no judgment call about your ability to write haiku, as I'm not altogether certain I understand it. I just know, you can put one word on a page and somehow it grows flowers and sparks sunshine. You write beautifully.

up/beautiful


Jon79 5 years ago

Ms. East, your poems are like precious gems. Each word and line is beautifully crafted in a setting to combine reflections of light that pull us in with sharp elegance, warmth and finely edged brilliance. The message I get from this great poem is ‘if only’? As I commented before, my wife and I are fans of your poetry as well as the poetry of a couple of other hubsters. My wife loves your ‘Daniel of Lucid Dreams’. My favorites are ‘Ocean’s Child’ and ‘The Jester’. Good to see you back. Carry on, Ms. East!

On a side note – I was curious as to why some hubsters ignore comments that are not from hubsters? You never do this but some do. Are non-hubsters unwelcome?

The Members and Guests section states that one has to sign in or sign up to post.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

Dear Genna, I know nothing about haiku, but I know this. I like you. Your words paint a gorgeous picture.


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Good morning Genna. Your attempt was beautiful. You do more than write, you create.


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

I have never done Haiku myself but I must say I love this poem, it is lovely, the words brings you to place where you fell free like the birds. Lovely poem.


Marina Lester 5 years ago

Beautiful, your words put a sweet breath of spring into my mind. I can see that fresh flower so clearly, taking a finial shiver as the last fingers of winter fade... And spring blooms. Genna you can never disappoint, you are brilliant as you have both a sharp mind and gentle heart. Thank you...


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

My apologies for not responding to everyone earlier.

@John Doe Thank you.

@Maya You are always so perceptive! Yes, that is one of the meanings of the poem. So good to see you my friend, and thank you!

@diogenes Thank you! And you are right about the 5-7-5. Take care.

@DanWW Hey there. I so appreciate your kind words, and your constructive input about Haiku. Take care, my friend.

@Hyphenbird Thanks for the support; it s always so good to “see” you. :-)

B.Malin Actually, I’ve written quite a bit of poetry in the past, but no in Haiku. Some of my poems are here on the web. Thanks for the visit; it’s always a pleasure. :-)

@Sofs Thank you, Sofs. You are always so kind and thoughtful in your comments. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem. Hugs.


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@K. Burns Darling Thank you, K. It’s my first try only at the Haiku form of poetry. Epi is such a treasure, isn’t he? I have a great deal of respect and admiration for his work. I appreciate the visit and your comments. Have a great day.

@Susan Good to see you, Susan; I am grateful for your wonderful words of support; they mean a lot. Enjoy the day. :-)

@writeronline Thank you for taking the time to read my poem, and for adding your own clever ideas.

@Fay Hello! You make this heart smile with your kind words. Thank you. :-)


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@Jon79

Hello, Jon. Thank you for your glowing comment. And you are quite correct, “If only..” is one meaning to the poem.

With regard to your side note and question on “hubsters,” I have some friends, including Maya who also knows DanWW, that comment here, regularly. Others are from FaceBook, the Web, etc. I truly appreciate the support from non-hubbers, and I know that other hubbers feel very much the same. I think the instances of ignoring non-hubber comments are relatively rare. For the most part, this is a very considerate and thoughtful community. I am pleased you enjoy the work of a couple of other hub poets as well.

Here are a few other hub poets you may want to look into: Saddlerider; Epigramman; Doug Turner, Jr. ChrisCWarner; and other superb writers who have commented here and those I also listed in my Last Hub article.

Thank you for your ongoing support, and please extend my best wishes to your lovely wife as well. Take care.


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@AmyBecherer

Hey there girlfriend. Good to see you, and hope you are well. Thanks for your gracious comments. Hugs.

@Cardisa What a very nice thing to say, thank you. Good to see you!

@Marina Your kind words of support warm this humble heart – truly. Thank you, Marina. Hope you have a great day. :-)


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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

Genna, I don't know anything about Haiku, but i want to because it's beautiful. Thank you.

Cheers


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland

Genna, you are a true poet in any form! I love this, and all your work. I hope you keep checking in to delight us with your poetry. Its so good to see you again my friend!


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BobbiRant 5 years ago from New York

Great job. I tried Haiku once, but I was not good at it. This one is very nice. I like the flow of the words.


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kashmir56 5 years ago from Massachusetts

Hi Genna, very beautiful written which made it a very enjoyable read !

Have a great weekend !!!


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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

It's 5-7-5, but who's counting!

I especially liked this:

"Cherry petals blush,

Yielding swift as a mistress

To the bed below"


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thougtforce 5 years ago from Sweden

Hi Genna! Even though I don't know any thing about Haiku I enjoyed your poem:) Spring is a great inspiration to us all and your poem is beautiful!

Tina


CalVera 5 years ago

Butterflies that fight wind -- trembling tulips that cup cold rain -- the robin peeking into crisp unripened earth -- the unripened cherry petals falling too early. Are these all signs of what we think is belated spring or just belated in our dreams of what we could have had? I like the wallflowers metaphor too. This is a very clever poem Geena. I love the way you write.


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Esrom Art 5 years ago from Indonesia

Nice expression of spring. Love your simple poem with vivid word. Keep writing poem, you got your talent. Again, nice poem.


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@Always exploring

Good morning. I am only just learning how to write Haiku; it has a unique beauty all its own. Thank you. :-)

@Erin

Hello, Erin. It is such a pleasure to see you. Thank you for your comment; I always enjoy your thoughtful words of encouragement…they work wonders for this heart that is sometimes weary of late. Hugs.

@Bobbi

Thanks, Bobbi. I’m not very good either, but thought I would give it a try; it has a distinctive voice and one I’m not sure if I can master. Enjoy the day. :-)


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@Kashmir

Why thank you…I’m trying my hand at this, which is very new to me. Good to see you!

@Will

Hi Will. Lol…well I had to count, frequently; it seems to be a requirement. I am glad you chose that one for it’s my favorite as well. Thanks so much for your comments. Have a great day.

@Thoughtforce

Thank you, Tina, I am happy that you enjoyed it.


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@Vera

Hey there…how are you? Gee, you guys are good. I didn’t think that people would understand the poem, so it is good to read your comments; thank you!

@Esrom

Thank you; the simple words with a powerful meaning are what I usually aim for. I am glad you enjoyed the poem, and thank you for the visit and words of support.


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epigramman 5 years ago

...in reference to the first comment Genna - don't work on it - you're already better - and better than most of us .....but like Amy, I don't know anything about 'haki' lol lol - and I personally don't like it - lol - but I'm crazy about you and not just because you're the finest looking lady to come along in a red jacket - lol - but because you are a world class writer and have the heart and mind of a true poet - are you back at the Hub for awhile? Always so great to see you at my humble little hub space - it does wonders for my stocks and bonds and my fragile male ego - lol


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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

I just now saw the first comment...your work is superb. Pay no attention.


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marcoujor 5 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Sweet Genna,

I long for spring, as I do for anything you write!

You paint pictures with your words. How silly to be so exacting or critical with a creative genius, as you. I will happily continue to visit you and your reflections.

Have a good evening, mar.


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sunitibahl9 5 years ago from India

i liked it,really nice


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D.A.L. 5 years ago from Lancashire north west England

Hi this is a wonderful inspiring verse bringing nature to life and lifting the spirits. Best wishes to you.


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Wayne Brown 5 years ago from Texas

Since I know nothing of this art either, I am totally impressed by your first attempt and applaud the effort...whatever it is, it's dang good and beautiful as it relates to the emergence of spring all about us. Thanks for sharing. WB


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

I am so sorry I have not commented before this, but things have been crazy of late.

@Epi As I said before, you are such a treasure. Thanks for the wonderful comments! Hugs.

@Will Thank you. You always give me confidence to keep writing. :-)

@Marcoujor I truly appreciate your support and kind words. They lift my spirits!

@sun Thank you…glad you enjoyed the poem.

@D.A.L. Many thanks for taking the time to read the poem, and for the lovely comments.

@Wayne Hi there. I am grateful you enjoyed this; it was my first attempt at anything haiku. Have a great day!


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MartieCoetser 5 years ago from South Africa

Genna, I enjoyed these haiku's of yours. Thought-provoking... worthwhile to ponder. Voted up and beautiful.


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

My dearest maiden Genna you are a delicate sculpture with your haiku's of which I to am ignorant of. I have a grave respect for this Japanese artistry of composition and am intrigued. You my dear are a fresh lavender scent in my nostril, every verse you pen I inhale it's sweet bouquet.

Your imagery here is scented with flowers, birds, earth. These lines rock...

"Cherry petals blush,

Yielding swift as a mistress

To the bed below

Where wallflowers stay

The time-jester’s dance,

And long for the kiss of spring."

You are music to my soul fellow poet and I thirst for more of your genius each time I depart from your page. Bring forth more I beg of you, let your heart caress mine and fill my cup with your poetic charm...


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

So sorry it has taken me so long to respond here.

@Martie Thank you; I appreciate your kind words and comments.

@Saddle Well hello there, Ken! So good to see you. (I like your new profile photo.) Thanks for the words of praise that are always so generous. You have a kind and giving heart, and I am indeed honored that you liked this poem. I hope to write more when I have the time. Be well, and hugs, dear friend and wonderful poet.


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Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

A beautiful nature poem, I loved it.


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thebluestar 5 years ago from Northern Ireland

Genna, this too is an area that I haven't tried but your first attempt is lovely. I find poetry in general harder to portray feelings than in writing. I may try to follow your lead and have a go some day in the distant future lol Very well done for spreading those wings. x


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

@Movemaster Thank you; I am pleased you enjoyed the poem.

@Bluestar Hi blue; thanks for the supportive comments. I like writing short stories as well. Poetry releases what is within with fewer words which impart their message and meaning in less time. I find that there are times when poetry is easier to write than a short story, and other times when it is not. :-) I look forward to reading your poetry; you're a good writer.


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Well, quite a party has been going on here. I enjoyed this. Imagery as crisp as an autumn day. I'm glad I dropped in to visit. I remember not so long ago, you announced your retirement from hubpages for a while. I'm glad you gave up that silly notion and returned! Peace, Genna.


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

Thanks, Doug. I don't know how much time I can devote to the hub these days, but am still keeping the faith. Good to see you and enjoyed your visit. :-)


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Emma Zimmer 5 years ago from USA

Wow!! you are amazing at poem writing!!! you should turn this into a song!!! so good, i will read more of your stuff!!!!

~Emmy Zimmer

P.S. could you check out my poems??


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

My apologies for not wrting sooner, but I've been under the weather recently. Thanks so much for your supportive comments; I will definitely check out your poetry as well! :-)


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ubanichijioke 5 years ago from Lagos

Great work. You re good at the use of words. Awesome!


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

Thank you Uban for the very nice comment; it is appreciated. :-)


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Maggie-May 5 years ago from the Island of Cape Breton to the Eastern Shores near Halifax, NS

Hi there Genna, this poem is downright captive--to clarify--you've said so much in so little, but truly wonderful choice words!!!


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

Hello Maggie, and thank you for the lovely comments. I don't know if I will ever try to write another haiku - there are other hubbers far better at this - and am pleased you liked the word choices. :-)


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

Very beautiful work and the photographs were stunning. Anna :)


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Genna East 3 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

Thank you Anna...it is good to see you. :-)


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LadyFiddler 2 years ago from Somewhere in the West

Hey Genna what's up? very nice poem your poetry reminds me of a hubber by the name of Audrey Howitt . Keep up your very creative poetic style.

God bless yo always

Vote up, beautiful , awesome and sharing :)

~~Have a peaceful Wednesday~~


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Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA Author

Hello Lady. :-) My goodness...Audrey is one of my favorite poets. Actually, I think she is a far better poet than I, so I am deeply humbled by your generous comment. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend. :-)

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