Elaborate Show

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The angels were shocked,

the spirits would glow,

right before them was an elaborate show,

on one counter,

small broken teeth on a silver tray,

and a little girl’s bloodied clothes,

laid out carefully in a graphic display,

the angels with horrified looks,

stared at the other table,

that had the girl’s book bag and school books,

sorrow came in droves,

as ghosts were hovering

over the dead girl’s clothes.

© 2014 Frank Atanacio

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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

Aha this is terrifying and chilling. Interesting, i am in awe. The teeth on display did it for me. I'm pondering out loud, " Who could have done this evil deed? "


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

always, thank you for visiting and its always good seeing you :)


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

It is eerie in its own way Frank. I am sure that the angels handled it in an awesome way to clean it all up. You have written a verse which comes through again. Very good. It gets a thumbs up, awesome and more.

Kevin


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you examiner


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

Wow, what a shocker. The imagery of the teeth is poignant. Makes me remember someone from my childhood who is with the angels now.


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Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

For this horrible thing Angels witnessed above

So this evil will soon burn to hell with a shove

There you go since I missed poetry month. lol


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Flourish and Jackie for stopping by


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Disturbing one here, Frank. Your title is interesting as to that "elaborate show" evil does like to put on for sure, but then there is that after show that burns for an eternity for such evil ...

and the girl who is taken into His arms of where no tear shall ever touch her cheek forevermore.

Blessings


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you faith, bless you


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

This will be quite a shocker for some Frank. Leaves the reader engaged but questioning what came before and after. Well done.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Jodah for stopping by :)


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Oh this brought chills Frank!!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Audrey


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

You never cease to amaze me, Frank. Sad yet awesomely creative to paint a very vivid image in the mind. You are a master with words.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

oh phyllis go on..:) LOL


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

LOL, are you blushing? Come on, you can face the morgue and monsters but not compliments? Silly ol' Frank. :)


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL silly me..:)


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

LMSS :)


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

LMSS = Laughing My Self Silly. Bless you kind sir.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you :)


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

You sure know how to get my imagination running at warp speed. So are you going to tell us more? Please do...


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

always thanks for the revisit..:) always good to see you


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James-wolve 2 years ago from Morocco

Terrifying but amazing story to read.Thanks for sharing!


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parrster 2 years ago from Oz

What is your muse Frank? And could you lend her to me?

Love your work.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much for stopping by James, and parrster... bless you both


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BlossomSB 2 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Bless you Frank for writing this in such a vivid, mind-blowing way. Sad, horrible, but so beautifully expressed in your poetry.


Jane Arden 2 years ago

Woe. That was deep and evil. You have such a mind and I mean that in a good way. Very talented man.


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

If the angels were shocked and horrified, the scene must have been unfathomable for humans. Sickening, but true to life!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Msdora


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Harishprasad 2 years ago from India

Frank, your poetry has a different and very unique taste. In this poem, you have weaved a fantastic imagery both before life and after life. Words "sorrow came in droves " speak so much. Great poem. Voted up.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Harishprasad


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LadyFiddler 2 years ago from Somewhere in the West

Frank please don't get any spookier lol. Well i am sure she has another body in glory. How are you? I've been wanting to write a hub about you but waiting on inspiration LOL.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL hmmm :) thanks Lady :)


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

Lady in your ability I have no doubt :)


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Gypsy Rose Lee 2 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Oh, my this one gave me the shivers. Reminded me of those Old Hollywood horror tales.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Gypsy :)


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ubanichijioke 2 years ago from Lagos

Even the angel was shocked! Then, the tragedy must be a jaw-breaker. A chilling, sad and touching revelation of sorrow. You wrote this so well, Sire.


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Ariel-Cal 2 years ago from Bridgeport, CT

Chilling!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you uban and Ariel, bless u both


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MartieCoetser 2 years ago from South Africa

The death of a child always shocks us to smithereens!

I love the rhythm and rhyme of this poem!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Martie for visiting my show :)


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thelyricwriter 2 years ago from West Virginia

Voted up, awesome, interesting and shared Frank. Brilliant!


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nighthag 2 years ago from Australia

this gave me chills, such a potent story you have told with so few words that i am simply in awe of a master at work...

so very well done!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you thelyricwriter and nighthag for stopping by and reading my show


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PegCole17 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

You can in so few words evoke such heartfelt emotions as shown in the comments from your followers. You're truly a gifted writer.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you pegcole


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Anna Haven 2 years ago from Scotland

You managed to portray a shocking and graphic scene, leaving no closure on her fate and all neatly parcelled in a few lines.

Nicely crafted Mr Atanacio.


Tevon 2 years ago

Anna said it exactly the way I wanted to express it great brief poem


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks soooo much Anna and Tevon for reading my piece


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

You really have a sense of Poe --you can hold your reader in the palm of your hand--


Chillboxpoet 2 years ago

I like the edgy dark-side of your poems, Paulie


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for rereading this piece again Audrey and thank you Chillbox poet for stopping by


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Alastar Packer 2 years ago from North Carolina

The Grand Illusion. And that is not Styx, although they are a pretty good Chi-town band. Ah, Frank, so sorry yours true has missed your writings for a while. You have a special gift for telling things that I, and so many others, can think and become a part of, what you remind us.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Alastar and good to see you


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Peggy W 2 years ago from Houston, Texas

I am sure angels see all kinds of examples of man's inhumanity to man. That little girl would now be in a much better place than whatever happened to her in this life.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you peggy for reading my show :)


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

So nicely done. You have left just enough to the imagination of the reader...leave us wanting more...and yet, it is such an ugly subject we cringe in wanting more. Powerful writing, Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much billybuc for visiting my show


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Lisawilliamsj 2 years ago

Oh my God, that gave me chills! Absolutely hauntingly beautiful!!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Lisa :)


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Ariel-Cal 2 years ago from Bridgeport, CT

thumbs up!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for your thumbs up Acee :) 0.11 LOL


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Patsybell 2 years ago from zone 6a, SEMO

I like your style. Voted up, AI, tweet.


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Frank Atanacio 18 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you again Patsy


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tillsontitan 18 months ago from New York

Frank, few words with powerful meanings and implications. So much for us to think and wonder about. Hopefully the angels brought her home!

Voted up, useful, awesome, and interesting.


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Frank Atanacio 18 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Til...:)


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Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton Author

I don't know what that means, but thank you for being a virtual friend Bless you dear lady


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Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Blossoms and Jane for visiting my show :)

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