Enchanted Evening (a haiku)

Evenings orchestration...moments of fond elation...
Evenings orchestration...moments of fond elation...
Windswept clouds shining bright...
Windswept clouds shining bright...
as frogs and crickets chirp in the night...
as frogs and crickets chirp in the night...
Moonshine enchantment spreads...all is well...
Moonshine enchantment spreads...all is well...



Wind swept clouds, aglow,

Enchantment...in the evening,

Sundown's gifting bow.


Birds all fly toward shore,

Frogs and crickets serenade.

Loon's night songs add more.


Clouds evaporate,

Star lights shining through the veil.

Time is growing late.


Moon light comes at last,

Shadows crisscross broad landscape.

Dreams of times, long past.




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Dream time casts its spell...
Dream time casts its spell...

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whonunuwho 15 months ago from United States Author

Thank you Hub Pages this is number 700 and going strong. whonu


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Perspycacious 15 months ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

Out of curiosity, why the comma in the last line.

Fine poem. I like the loons, frogs, crickets, ....birds flying to the shore, and BTW the last line. No place is given to rate this so here is mine:

Thumb Up, Awesome, Beautiful, Interesting.


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whonunuwho 15 months ago from United States Author

Perspycacious, my friend, I believe the comma used comes under "Poetic License" although I do not use commas that often, I like the ...quite alot. Thanks for the heads up my friend. whonu...


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Perspycacious 15 months ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

was this an aberration, or has HP done away with the Thumb, useful....Interesting scoring?


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bravewarrior 15 months ago from Central Florida

Beautiful poem, whonu. But then that's no surprise!

Perspycacious, HP has done away with the thumbs and voting buttons. They say there wasn't enough engagement. I still find myself scrolling up to vote. Why they think people weren't voting is beyond me!


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whonunuwho 15 months ago from United States Author

Thank you for the review and info my friend. whonu


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Minnetonka Twin 15 months ago from Minnesota

Wow, this is an excellent Haiku. I've told you before, I love your style of writing Haiku. I never thought of having line 1 and 3 rhyme or make the haiku long like this. Just love it! Voted up and hit many buttons.


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manatita44 15 months ago from london

Great Bro,

You've mastered it. So Beautiful! And in adding the appropriate scenery, you've created a masterpiece!!

Now, my friend, my Teacher always spoke of Self-transcendence. You've added beauty. Now add wisdom like the ancient Seers did:

(Human Condition)

"Frog in narrow well,

To Frog coming from the sea.

"Sea? No such thing! Out!"

(Dying to Self)

" You desire Heaven?

Camel through the needle's eye.

Or kill attachments."

Then you'll be unique and an absolute genius, my Brother!

Love you, Whonu.


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whonunuwho 15 months ago from United States Author

Thank you so much for your fine support my friend. whonu


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Faith Reaper 15 months ago from southern USA

Oh, your haiku poetry is spectacular! Lovely photos as always.

God bless you


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Patty Inglish, MS 15 months ago from North America

I would like a month of evenings that you have wonderfully described with your Haiku!


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Frank Atanacio 15 months ago from Shelton

love these little haiku whonu..:)


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brakel2 15 months ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma

Love haiku with glorious descriptions and vivid photos. I have tried to write them but not much success achieved. Never give up. You should be proud. Blessings, Audrey


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BlossomSB 15 months ago from Victoria, Australia

700? Wow! It's beautiful and so are the photos.


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aviannovice 15 months ago from Stillwater, OK

I really enjoyed this one!

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