Enemy In Disguise

I'm holding an empty place inside my head.

Building a fortress where your demons cant get in.

All of the bullshit you created and spoon fed.

Im securing the hallowed chambers , to defend my shattered heart.

Your love was tainted and tore our souls apart.

Cutting through the chains of torment your love only brings.

Locking away the pieces of my shattered , hollowed dreams.

Throwing away the key of forgiveness so no one can hurt me

...Again....

You said you were a friend. But in the end your just an enemy in disguise.

Choking on the ashes left from love remaining ties.

You lied!

Feeding demons with tears from my darkening eyes.

Yes, you are such a good friend, GOOD FOR NOTHING IN THE END....

I'm burning away all these memories.

Ive held on for all these years.

Spreading the ashes over the hole I filled with tears.

Breaking free tonight this all will end.

You will live to regret every last unforgiven sin.

by Zayleen pain

~to my unforgivable best enemy Johnathan

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smga22 4 years ago from Dhaka, Bangladesh

Nice Poem


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Zayleen Pain 4 years ago from lost in my own minds lines Author

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my art. I hope you enjoy some of my other works.


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

wow a powerful write Zayleen. is this humor or is it what you really feel.?


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Zayleen Pain 4 years ago from lost in my own minds lines Author

Unfortunately my dear Cleaner it is how i feel about him. My ex "husband" if you will, destroyed my pride and completely ruined my self-esteem for many years. But fortunately for me I finally overcame that and this is what spewed from my pen.


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

I like that you have broken apart your phrases. it reads so much better now . Like i said before this is a powerful write , but when poetry comes from deep inside whether it is sweet or dark , thats what makes great poetry. you have a poets talent which is unique . keep up the writing.


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Zayleen Pain 4 years ago from lost in my own minds lines Author

Thank you so much. I love hearing from you it always boosts my confidence and inspires me to write. !!!!


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

any time you need a boost to your ego , drop me a line . happy to help.

every once in a while I need inspiration . a person hits a wall every now and then they go looking for inspiration. you have to find wherever you can . in a flower , on the ground ,in the air . explore your world and you will find all over . It is there you just need to open your eyes wider . With your talent , I'm sure you can write about anything . try it .


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Zayleen Pain 4 years ago from lost in my own minds lines Author

I definitely will! thank you....Im also going through and editing alot of my poetry feel free to check out the revisions.


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

I can see that. after looking at two. It really helps to keep that kind of structure in your writing . it emphasizes the feelings that way . certain words that you want the reader to feel . the other way, the feelings are lost because the words run on together. i have been inspired by your write and in the process of writing you a poem . It is called "the pain of Zayleen. " I am going to make a hub with it okay? . Do you want to see it when I finish or just let you know ?


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Zayleen Pain 4 years ago from lost in my own minds lines Author

Yes!!!!!! Yessss !!! Please let me know I am blessed to have found you here my poetic-minded friend. You gave me a smile that will last forever!

thank you


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

i am almost done Zayleen, give me about an hour then I will post it okay.?


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

your poem is done , hope you like it !

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