Fatal attraction

photo credit: from the movie Wanted (2008)

In the silence of the closet, I could work out every motion she went through just by listening.

Hiding in the darkness of her closet, I was vigilant and staying perfectly still. I was feeling both calm and aroused. I was naked, sexy and dangerous. In the silence of the closet, I could work out every motion she went through just by listening. I heard her turn off the shower. She dried herself with the pink fluffy towel. First her hair, then her long and slender neck, her smooth back, her curvy hips, her tight calves and finally her toes. She was taking her time. She blow-dried her hair. She put on her eye-lift and moisturizer. She brushed her teeth and gargled with a mouthwash which I could smell even through the door of the closet. I could work-out her footsteps approaching. I was psyching myself up. I was ready for action. I went through the plan one last time in my head. I would jump on her. I would be all over her, do what I am best at and make her scream. The closet door opened. The light was transiently blinding but I didn’t need to see well. I jumped on to the half-naked back-lit shadow.

I was snatched by a firm grip around my neck.

“Darling, look what I have here. Don’t worry. It’s quite cute. Not a cockroach, I promise.”

“Ya-ak, a pink lizard. I’m glad it didn’t jump on me. I would have been petrified. You hold it there. Don’t come too close. You do anything funny and I’ll stop talking to you for a week. Don’t look so interested. You can’t keep it. ”

“What am I supposed to do with it? Let it go?”

“As long as you don’t kill it and I am not seeing it again, I don’t want to know.”

Outside the house, he finally let me go. I was glad to have survived the siege. I promised myself, yet again, not to play this silly game ever again. It’s exciting but hardly worth the risk. I headed quickly back to the comfort of the darkness. I suddenly smelled something familiar but somehow felt most uneasy inside myself. My eyes turned into tiny slits and I dashed into the backyard lawn. I might just make it. Their neighbor’s cat had been getting old and much slower these days. I have to go now and promise to write soon, if I could get out of this one alive.

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Mezo profile image

Mezo 7 years ago from Egypt

lo0ol that was good and unexpected

thnx


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SweetiePie 7 years ago from Southern California, USA

A little creepy but you have explained the scene well.


Chan Kwan Hop 7 years ago

It almost takes my breath away. If it prolonged a bit longer, I might need to consult doctor.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Dear Mezo, SweetiePie and KH,

thanks for commenting. glad you like it.


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Cherish77 7 years ago

Lol, that was funny, Totally unexpected.

Hi Sweetie Pie. I haven't heard from you in a bit. I need to read your hubs too.


ellena 7 years ago

unexpected...i enjoy reading it:)


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi Cherish77 and ellena,

thanks for dropping by and commenting. I'm just curious to know exactly what you were expecting. Not sex scenes, I hope. This is a G rated site.


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topstuff 7 years ago

I agree with all others,its totally unexpected.The ending is sadso it must be true.Enjoyable hub.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi topstuff,

thanks for dropping by. You should comment that this can pass as top stuff too. Now I am sad indeed.


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Shadesbreath 7 years ago from California

Benson, you dirty man, I love it. :) Bad luck on the lizard thing. Maybe next time.

Great story, fun read. I'm glad I came across this.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi Shades,

thanks for your kind words. Now I'll go about and boast that Shades loved my story.


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Zsuzsy Bee 7 years ago from Ontario/Canada

Kind of creepy but good story, kept my interest and I was quite glad for the ending

regards Zsuzsy


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Christoph Reilly 7 years ago from St. Louis

Good job. It was a great story and well told. The twist at the end is skillfully rendered. Now, about this little hobby of yours...

Seriously, Great work!


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Mighty Mom 7 years ago from Where Left is Right, CA

Benson, you are very clever and have a vivid imagination!


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Dear Zsuzsy, Christoph and MM,

thanks for the encouraging words. These will keep me going (with my creepy hobby).


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countrywomen 7 years ago from Washington, USA

Doctor & Writer we have a Robin Cook in the making...hehe


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi countrywomen,

thanks for the encouraging words. It's nice to be flattered.


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countrywomen 7 years ago from Washington, USA

If you do get flattered then keep this in mind. Its not what I say that should flatter you but the fact that I consider you worth flattering that should flatter you...LOL


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William F. Torpey 7 years ago from South Valley Stream, N.Y.

Good drama, Benson, and interesting twist.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Dear Countrywomen,

thanks again. Now I'm really glad that you consider me worth flattering. That's even nicer.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Dear William,

thanks for commenting. Hope to see more of you around. Are you a gentleman of leisure full-time or working part-time?


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Shirley Anderson 7 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Very well written, Benson. Such a cute story, too. Like the others, I didn't see that ending coming at all. It was suspenseful with a twist, I really liked it.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Thanks Shirley. I love being cute.


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William F. Torpey 7 years ago from South Valley Stream, N.Y.

I'm retired, Benson. But I keep busy with volunteer work at the Veterans of Foreign Wars Post 3350 in East Rockaway, New York.


g_jenkins 7 years ago

--Reason for not making assumptions when not in a permanent relationship !!


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi g_jenkins,

thanks for dropping by and commenting.


C. C. Riter 7 years ago

Benson! pure genious! You really suckered me in with that one. 'twas good and funny too. You lizard you. The truth comes out, you're that damn Gecko on the Gieco commercials! hehe

Thanx


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi cc Riter,

thanks for commenting. Yes, I'm the full time surgeon, the part time hubber and the "accidental" lizard.

cheers.


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LondonGirl 7 years ago from London

great story - you write really well.


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi LondonGirl,

thanks for commenting. you've made my day.


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Tom Cornett 7 years ago from Ohio

You got me Benson.....this was really cool....now I want to be a lizard! :)


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Benson Yeung 7 years ago from Hong Kong Author

Hi Tom Cornett,

thanks for dropping by and commenting. I think this story is a little pet of mine that needs some re-writing and revision before it can be as neat as your story here:

http://hubpages.com/politics/A-serial-killer--a-gi...

regards,

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