Fear Not The Jabberwock

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I softly pad my way

windaweaveling through the loamish wildings

full wareness this reach I journ

tis outlanding propriety

knowing well the elden-ones foreveren dissuade

we nubilets stay away

disallowed everen venture this region

of the darper forest

neveren to the pool at the fottom of the aquafell


worry not the jabberwock

worry stead, for it is there wilden maned larns

leap and eat young femines

no, tis grievous feathwinged creatures

swoove and clarch young femines

nay, tis slimpery serplines from the darpest depths

surge up and chelmp young femines


it beknowns itself to me

that as I evellup in womanous shape

so too these tales evellup with me

yearly a scarier monster lawaits

and all disobedient evelettes who dare

bedeffen claritious warrings

who dare disbay

the elden, wisen and protecten ones


but the tales in alarmity fail

to keep pace with my bravity

and I see their weaverings

for the destatments that they truly are

for what they seed and what they sprout

contraposes and become

sweet invitlings to me


with a crop of curiosity and not a seed of sense

I pad out, the darpest wildings my mark

weave my way through pricklings and green most quietly

though I know not why I need be


all day I travel till at last the crashing of the aqualfell

pounds in my ears

I am joyous in my discovery

and fearful in my discovery

what waits for me behind this curtain of green

larns? serplines? feathwinged?

just wisen tales, agree?


I kneedrop to the soil

and fill my breast with breath

then slowly exhale

reach a shaking hand and pull

back the foliage veil


I am ready for all manner of beast

save this

and for the first time in my silent trek let out a little gasp

there splashing and wrestling in the pool

there bathing in the aqualfel are beasts of

luscious note


a man perhaps but interbred an animal of brawn

unmistakable in his flashing mane and coat an iridescent fawn

I can not peel my eyes away as I watch them prad and prance

something in them makes my breath come quick

something in them makes my core burn hot

all sinuet and rippling wet

though carved by a great sculptor

but they are real and very much alive

and that something in me

begins to be afraid


before I had felt so eveful and strong

now quaking at my own reaction within this nubilet frame

knowing now of what I must be wary

I realize even mesmerized

I must not tarry

though surely none had heard nor seen

this evelette hidden in the undergreen


still respectless,

snicker for the eldonones who tried disway

protect me from what?

this glorious gaze?

with cock combed thoughts I believe I've foxed these virile beasts

slowly take back my peds

planning to retreat never to share

this day

and this eye and mind filled treat

I will go back and play the evelette sweet


not wisen to the keenness of the animal olfactory

I have no knowing the screaming scent of our kind

no clue as to an evelette's perfumed ripeness


till a crack of twig crushed loud, half step behind

46 comments

George J Hardy profile image

George J Hardy 5 years ago from Southern New Jersey

intriguing tale it is - love the synoptic language


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you George. This bugger took me months to write. "Synoptic" is a perfectly wonderful compliment making worth my struggle with my first nonsense poem.


PenMePretty 5 years ago from Franklin

Amazing...emotional...I like it a lot!!!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks PMP, I appreciate you comment. :)


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

Randy I really missed you!!

I see you have been to Ireland or some place close to it....lol, no offense to the Irish of course, just a vivid imagination at work,opicturing leprechauns and woodsmen in the forest, fair maidens and gnomes....sorry, got carried away again.

I loved it, took me a while to understand it but, hey, just pretend you're Irish and it's easy to read...there I go again....about it being Irish..What the hell do I know?


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi Cardisa! I think its easier to understand when you listen to it, maybe? Anyway I am descended from Irish pirates on my father's side. Hmmmm.


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

Truly remarkable. I got goosletts on my skinsense listening to you read it. Your months of investment have payed handsomely in this wonderful tribute. Wow!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Giggle! Thanks WB, what a creative comment.


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

I do hope there will be a part two. I'm curious to hear what happened to the young evelette.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Lol! I'm not going there!


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

I did listen to it Randy, and it wasn't as funny as me trying to read it...lol

I understood it quite well when I listened to it.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Oh good!


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

this is really cool randy b. I love how you wrote in your own little language, the elfen language or something thats brilliant, I like the symbolism and how you portrayed men...though nice to look upon sometimes they are dangerous beasts that trap us. haha


Claudia Schönfeld 5 years ago

haha i enjoyed this randy...started to read and thought: i'd love to hear you read this...and then i found the audio...so cool. i've only written one fun poem i think...and this was inspired by luke skywalker...aehmm i mean luke prater who always hunts down clichees...


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hey Nikki! Do you remember The Jabberwocky by Lewis Carroll? This is fashioned after that. I'm glad you liked it :)

I'm glad you found the audio button Claudia, I think it might be easier to understand that way. This was inspired a poem Matt Coughlan posted a couple months back. Give me a link to your funny one!


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

i think i came across it recently when I was looking online for his work. He is a strange character.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

And none too attractive, lol.


brian 5 years ago

i can see the effort it took to create...this is epic and wonderful...loved the language and storytelling...fascinating...


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks Brian, really!


Heaven 5 years ago

I listened to your lovely voice as I read it. A very nice tale of your journey and discovery. The words are very creative too... excellent work.


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Tom Rubenoff 5 years ago from United States

Looks as great written as it sounds when read. Wonderful in a quite Randy way.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi Heaven, its nice to meet you! This piece is pure fiction; let me assure you. ;)

Evening Tom. Thank you so much and thanks for the help in my final edit.


ayala 5 years ago

Great storytelling...perfect !


Rasmithii 5 years ago

What is wonderful is the discipline and skill it takes to not only craft - in this world - but sell it as well as you do. Even as my mind links easier into the "my core burning hot" I still stay in the journey even if we "never share this day." Rasii


lori 5 years ago

I cannot even imagine the amount of work that went into this. It makes me a little tired to even think of it, lol...great job. Your hard work paid off :)


Kavita Rao 5 years ago

Oooohhh... gripping!! Loved the end... what a thrill... what a chill factor!!

And the language totally added to the fascination.. so folklorish... awesome! :)


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Ayala, thank you so much!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you Rasmithii for coming by... and such a delightful comment :)


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you Lori for seeing the work I put in here. My damn computer lost half of my original and I had to remember (didn't) and rewrite that strange language a second time. I don't usually try so hard, lol.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you Kavita, I'm grinning from your comment. I actually think I "earned" positive comments this time.


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blaise25 5 years ago from close to you...

I loved this style and I loved the SoundCloud more..It's sexy. I love the jabberwocky lol


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attemptedhumour 5 years ago from Australia

Bloody hell Randy, i told you i have a bit of trouble interpreting some poetry and you hit me with this monu-mental task. It's epic that's for sure, what it is actually about is cloudy and my brain is a little befuddled. But i did get a kick out of trying to fathom it out and the language is pure creative writing. I think it's great, with the emphasis on think, and that's my, as usual, honest response. Voted up, in the audacity stakes though. Cheers


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi Blaise! Thanks for coming by and taking a listen too!

Howdy AH, sorry if I made your head hurt. Its just a silly story don't worry if didn't all make sense. I'm sure you got the naughty gist of it.


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attemptedhumour 5 years ago from Australia

The what?


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

naughty: indecent; improper: a naughty wink.

gist: the main or essential part of a matter: What was the gist of his speech?

;)


shashi 5 years ago

I liked it so much... lovely...

Shashi

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Om Namah Shivaya

http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/07/...


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks for the read Shashi! Cheers.


brian miller 4 years ago

irish pirates eh? ha...fantastic tale...what impressed me most is your use of language honestly....windaweaveling is a wicked word...but throughout you work well with words...and the tale is tight as well...


claudia schoenfeld 4 years ago

nice...remembered it instantly...and re-reading it..speaks to me of finding the way and breaking free..loved esp. this part..

I kneedrop to the soil

and fill my breast with breath

then slowly exhale

reach a shaking hand and pull

back the foliage veil


Anna Montgomery 4 years ago

with a crop of curiosity and not a seed of sense

I pad out, the darpest wildings my mark

Don't we all :)...very nicely done!


hedgewitch 4 years ago

I can only imagine how hard this must have been to put together, but the end result is delightful and fun, so you labored not in vain. I think 'nubilets' was my favorite piece of jabberwocky, but there are many expressive and original takes in this.


Chazinator 4 years ago

Wonderfully hewn, liminal langauge evoking so many sonic and allusive memes! That you are avle to capture the innocence of the narrator is epepcially refreshing. Seen from her angle such wyrd images do come. I almost want to begin my own poem in the same vein, the same language. But I have not learned it yet, perhaps need to school myself in elven and other runic scripts. Wonderful poem.


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Randy Behavior 4 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

@ Brian The hardest part was coming up with words that people would understand instinctively.

@Claudia Thanks for coming over here and commenting again. You and Brian were a couple of the people who read it before.

@Anna Hi Anna, thanks for commenting.


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Randy Behavior 4 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi Hedge! I think this got the nonsense writing out of my system! I'm glad you appreciate my labors. :)

Howdy Charles. I understand you perfectly ;) You should give it a whirl as I was inspired by another poet's take on the Jabberwocky also.


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manlypoetryman 4 years ago from (Texas !) Boldly Writing Poems Where No Man Has Gone Before...

Loved this continuation of theme of the "Jabberwock". Loved the inventive words and the further tales done in "Jabberwocky" style!


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Randy Behavior 4 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you Manly. I don't know if its a continuation exactly but they do live in the same strange land. :)

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