Flat Line - Original Poetry

flat line


Unconscious hearts lie

in hands

willing to help

under the

will of

"Thou" most high.

Sleep in


or spirit fly?

Who chooses

the will;

will not or why?

Death in moments

half seconds count

while counting back

flashes to dulled hearing

barely recognizes shouts.

"Come on now come back,

it's not your time.

" It's not over" yet;

feverish furious attempts

minds on overtime when a life is on the line.


Nor all fluff

up over the clouds

simply fate not to be late

on judgment day?

In a split

life can blow

away one candle lit.

Bide your time in a way

that salts your heart

with hands that hold that day.

Be it "Heaven" or "Hell" do we choose to wait? Or do others alter our fate?

Copyright © September 2011

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Minnetonka Twin 3 years ago from Minnesota

Wow Denizee-this is a very well written poem on the whole flat line thing. It does make one ponder if we choose to stay or go when were at this point. I think some of us are meant to go straight away and some of us are given a choice. A beautifully written piece that makes you do a lot of thinking. Great photo to accompany this poem.

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Denizee 3 years ago Author

Thank you Minnetonka Twin - it does put a spin on was it or was it not our time and I agree - some of us do get second chances -

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Howie Watts 3 years ago

Great poem. I was once in the hospital with my dad after he suffered a heart attack and he was hooked up to the monitor. Long story short...he flat lined (and thankfully was revived and is still living), but the story he gives of the experience is a peaceful one. He does speak of hearing the faint voices of people, getting softer and softer, then back again as quick as he left. I must say though, that those same few seconds that he experienced seemed like an eternity from where I was standing.

I think this poem could also have application to other life events (other than physical death that is.) Sometimes relationships may seem to flat line, but out of nowhere something happens and the heartbeat is back. Sometimes life in general may seem to be flat lining, then some event shocks us back to life to appreciate living again. You could draw lots of different meanings from this wonderfully written poem. Nice work :-)

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Denizee 3 years ago Author

Thank you Howie - I imagine time stood still for you going through that with your father - Happy to hear that he is alright - Yes - some things in life completely dissolve in front of our eyes - and we are left to reinvent a new way to live live. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem.

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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

So nicely done! I am so glad that I stopped by today!

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Denizee 3 years ago Author

Thank you Audrey - your appreciation put a smile on my face -

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