Fly on the Wall: Bamboo Haiku

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Having fun with Haiku.

'Fly on the Wall' is an interesting and creative example of having fun with the art of Haiku and doing so, in a manner that requires the reader to consider the potential ambiguous nature of the piece. The reader is left wondering if the haiku was written from a conventional perspective, or from the fly's perspective. In this case it was the fly who was describing the person and what actions were required to get to the person's food.

Determination often pays off for most creatures when it comes to feeding and when matched off against humans, in the right conditions, more than occasionally nature out smarts the human! Enjoy this example of an age old battle that plays out anywhere in the world, at any time and involves the same rivals, as are highlighted here. Haiku is about providing a maximum visual imagery, from a few carefully chosen and simply arranged words. Enjoy..

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Sometimes nature wins first.

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Original Bamboo Haiku


'Fly on the Wall'



Look at him sitting

Fat and lazily waiting

To be fed my meal



The beast’s nature

Is not to share anything

But that will change



This fly on the wall

Has greater expectations

When it comes to food



Buzzing up and down

Creating a diversion

Just to get in close



Look at him sitting

Unable to get the fly

Now eating his food



This fly on the wall

Is far too clever for you

I do love sushi...



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* Original Haiku by Pearldiver *

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whonunuwho 3 years ago from United States

Nice work, my friend, and I too really enjoy using Haiku in expressing my thoughts. Thank you for sharing this. whonu


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Scarface1300 3 years ago

I love it when many differnt haiku are joined in unison on a single theme............. Chris


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi whonunuwho, thank you for that and yes, Haiku as a form of expression really is unique especially when used in its traditional format. Of course I have not followed that formula here... besides, who but one with a sense of humor, would genuinely wish to express a blow fly's thoughts?? :) Cheers for taking the time... take care.. PD


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi Chris, thanks for taking the time to read these Haiku.. yes indeed, it does sometimes add a different slant on the subject and allows each haiku to build on the previous one, as if paragraphs in a short story... it would also fit your writing style mate... so perhaps some more writing is in order... Cheers for your positive support... take care... PD


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LaThing 3 years ago from From a World Within, USA

This is really cool and fun read! Very thought provoking though.....from the fly's prospective, :) Enjoyed it, thanks for sharing.....


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Cheers for that... I'm sure flies have a totally different perspective on what humans and food looks like... having compound eyes also means that everything is multiplied, so I guess they see 100 reasons why they should do what they do! Thanks for appreciating these haiku... take care.. PD


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Randy Godwin 3 years ago from Southern Georgia

I'm sorry I really don't know anything about Haiku, PD. Or most other poetry types either, for that matter. But I liked this derivation of the style. Funny! I hope it was supposed to be, but I told you I was ignorant. LOL!

I think I'll just stick to writing my fiction. Hope you're doing well!

SSSSS


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

I certainly have never considered you ignorant Randy.. and yes, it was intended to be of some humor value to haiku enthusiasts, really just to illustrate that such perspectives can be applied without taking away the basic haiku message... Thanks for taking the time to appreciate this work and your good wishes mate... I hope you're okay as well... Happy New Year btw... may it be a good one Sir... take care... PD


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Mhatter99 3 years ago from San Francisco

Masterfully done. You also did a good job creating one idea with many.


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi Martin, cheers for that, yes hopefully this Fly on the Wall will show that this style can used to provide a greater image of an event, plus that in some circumstances, it's okay if your sushi is shared with strangers! Thanks very much for your positive comments.. take care... PD


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Absolutely delightful. Was itching to swat that fly.


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always exploring 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

I really enjoyed this, very creative and fun to read..Thank's.


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi Rasma, thank you for your positive compliment... glad you enjoyed these haiku and didn't swat the fly... it's bad manners to ruin a meal by killing things at the table! Cheers... take care .. PD


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi Ruby, Cheers for your kind words of review on Fly on the Wall.. both the fly and I are pleased that you enjoyed these haiku.. thanks again for that.. you take care... PD


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

Wonderful and thank you for sharing,

Enjoy your day.

Eddy.


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi Eddy, hope your winter is not too harsh up there.. thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this piece.. glad you liked these haiku.. cheers for your positive input... take care.. PD


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shiningirisheyes 3 years ago from Upstate, New York

Pearl - As someone who has great difficulty with Haiku processes, I thank you for this insightful example.


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Pearldiver 3 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi shiningirisheyes, you are most welcome... glad you enjoyed these haiku and their application here... cheers.. take care.. PD


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Vellur 11 months ago from Dubai

Well expressed in haiku form (my favorite), enjoyed reading.


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Pearldiver 11 months ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time. Author

Hi Vellur, thank you for saying that. Glad you enjoyed this playful set of haiku. Happy New Year btw... you take care out there... PD

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