Footsteps (rhyming tanka)

Walking in the rain

Mid the strangers and our pain

Footsteps bare refrain

Secret silence they maintain

Of a world that’s gone insane


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

I liked this! Thanks for a change of pace!


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AliceFSpencer 3 years ago from Texas

:) Nice !!!


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Deborah Brooks 3 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Martin this is wonderful.. love it

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Debbie


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travmaj 3 years ago from australia

Hi again - I like this very much - so well, just right! Thank you.


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wetnosedogs 3 years ago from Alabama

wow, this one makes you think!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida

This is deep, Martin. I had to read it twice. Food for thought, for sure!


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shiningirisheyes 3 years ago from Upstate, New York

So true and much meaning in few words.


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jhamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

So powerful and concise. Jamie


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picklesandrufus 3 years ago from Virginia Beach, Va

Had never heard of a tanka, but really do like it. Very well chosen words!


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xstatic 3 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Very nice poetry again!


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always exploring 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

What a picture you drew! Loved it. Walking in the rain, wet shoes..Beautiful!


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teaches12345 3 years ago

Those umbrellas certainly add to the meaning here. I can see it well!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Martin I applaud you and indeed this is a world gone insane. Sigh...


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Poetic Ink 3 years ago from New York, New York

Yup the world appears to have gone mad lol, or maybe its just the media steering things that direction and all. Hah, thanks for unleashing this cool one too, nice!


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breakfastpop 3 years ago

I loved this. It sounds like Obama's first term.


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LadyFiddler 3 years ago from Somewhere in the West

very nice mhatter99


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MartieCoetser 3 years ago from South Africa

Thought-provoking tanka!

Actually, the world is insane because of humans since the beginning, whenever it really was.

You might be interested in this article ~

http://open.salon.com/blog/jlw1/2012/05/18/sunday_...


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midget38 3 years ago from Singapore

Each step we take carries with it immense pain. Thanks for sharing, Hatter.


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rebeccamealey 3 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

Love it, love it! Explains the rat race!


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

Wow, Martin - talk about an about face! I adore this - the words are perfect - as is the accompanying photo..

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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

You know what's going to happen now don't you? Well o course you will inspire me to compose a tanka.

You are a great teacher and keep them coming.

Eddy.


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Genna East 3 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Ohhhh...I liked this very much, Martin. I love rhyme, and there is a lyric simplicity to the words in this Tanka which describe something so powerful and profound. Well done!

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