Foreign Territory


Traveling to the four corners of I

as if I were flat.

As flat and empty as the page, lost for days.

Distant, unfortunate events cloud my judgement.

Talking to the dead, losing it, lost it, out of my head.

Ship wrecked on an island of words,

building a vessel with nouns and action verbs

on a journey for treasure, my adventure, my pleasure.

Searching myself, my mind.

Finding thoughts that have been around for all time.

Who, what, when, why and where?

Rusted and tarnished, busted questions of no value.

A worthless soul seeking valuable trash.

I laugh uncontrollably to the point, it hurts.

Priceless junk!!

Stopping only to catch a breath, I wonder

if the true test is worth its weight in gold?

The trip itself








Copyright © 2011 Daunt'e Loper

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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Man, it's so cool to go through your writing line by line.

Although all good, I love, "Ship wrecked on an island of words," "A worthless soul seeking valuable trash,"" I laugh uncontrollably to the point, it hurts," and "if the true test is worth its weight in gold? The trip itself"...all terrific (and profound)!!!

Oh, and as a hispanic, germanic, muttish mix, nerd, I really appreciated you calling me brother, as I really like the idea of being so..

Thanks, my good friend...let's laugh together till it hurts, hmmmmm!!!


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

bb, you have been one of my biggest supporters here on hubpages and I will never forget that. Thank you


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Oh yeah, remember me when your writing successful screenplays in Hollywood!!!


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

I don't know if i'm that good but if I live to see the day, it would truly be a blessing


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Nobody starts out that good, but with strong will, obsession, training, and a little good luck, there isn't any way in hell to stop you....Good luck, my friend....


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks bb


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

There I am "A worthless soul seeking valuable trash". Wow, Daunte, truly beautifully magnificent. I love it.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you so much for your kind words Amy


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Norma Budden 5 years ago from Nunavut, Canada

Daunte, you have created some wonderful imagery here. I absolutely love this piece!


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you for showing me so much love Norma


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Norma Budden 5 years ago from Nunavut, Canada

You deserve all the love you can get, Daunte. God knows your life has been rough enough; always remember that He spared you for a reason.


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SaMcNutt 5 years ago from Englewood, CO

Incredible. I really felt there with the narrator. "Traveling to the four corners of I; as if I were flat." This line sets it up and draws you in to rest of the poem. I visited "Four Corners" once and laid down as if I was flat and trying to reach out and exist in the different states: of mind, heart, body and soul, or Colorado, Utah, Arizona and New Mexico.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you Sam. I've taken that trip a dozen times before I realized that what I was searching for, I had already found.


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Plarson 5 years ago from Alabama

Daunte- Have you ever thought about writing rap songs? I know other genres of music have that kinda industry, not sure if rap does or not. Then again, the rap world is becoming more and more r & b like every day it seems. But I can so see a Bruno Mars, or a C-Lo Green singing this one. To add to your comment that you realized you had already found what you were looking for....We usually already know the answers to things we question, just mostly we lack the confidence or the conviction to follow through with them. -Paul


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you Paul, I don't know if I could write on that level and I'm not sure if I would want to. This is what I was searching for that was already in my possession. Henceforth, this my art.

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