Forget me - Tonight - and Forever

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Distantly,

I’m awake

Awake,

I dream

Internally,

I’m rotting

Externally,

I smile

I gleam

Far away,

I’m aware

Aware of

the distance

Within, I care

Without you

I’m scared

to breathe

Without you

I’m free

Stay here

with me

tonight,

and forever

Abandon me

yet again,

and always

Once more,

you forget

my heart’s

longing for

your heart’s

acceptance

Remain here

by my side

just one

moment longer

in my arms,

confide

Rest your head

on mine

till time’s end,

in my love,

reside

as we ascend



My desire,

your smile

my wish,

for your kiss

an embrace

such as yours

your taste,

I adore

every contour

every slope

my heart,

I devote

my love

my life

dedication

my sight,

set on you

in your eyes

in your view

in your vision

my decision

is made

just the same

you choose

to evade

every attempt

that I make

to convey

what I feel

my display

of longing

so real



© copyright Ben D.A 2011



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Astra Nomik 3 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

Just heavenly reading these beautiful words. So much honest feelings pouring out of the words. This hub weeps words of love into the hubiverse and beyond...

You are a very gifted writer, Ben.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

kimberly - that was sweet :D thank you!


kimberlyslyrics 5 years ago

I could never forget you tonight and never for sure forever


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

all of that very true Mark...this still remains one of my most passionate ones ever. Probably always will be. Thanks for visiting it. I also brought back a couple older ones in my latest hub. I don't know what happened to Hubpages though...seems pretty dead


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas

I'm glad you reposted this... it's very intimate and as you know I appreciate the short lines... they seem to provide the intensity of what you are trying to say.. you don't mince words and each one carries maximum impact. They are not diluted by an expanse of imagery. She is right there in your minds eye and the short distance between your hearts is filled with the small leaping phrases that convey your commitment to her unequivically... even more powerful than a vow in a church...


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Shalini Kagal 5 years ago from India

Very beautiful and evocative! Your words seem to just glide from one line to another with such ease!


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Daniella Lopez 5 years ago from Arkansas

This is absolutely beautiful. Your way with words is truly a gift. Voted up!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks a lot man


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Two Poles 5 years ago from Morgantown, West Virginia

This almost brought me to tears...never stop writing


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thank you blondey


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blondey 5 years ago

Really enjoyed this one, my thoughts exacltly a while back, beautifully put


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QudsiaP1 5 years ago

Most welcome, sire. :)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

yes ma'am I did :]

Thank you


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QudsiaP1 5 years ago

Thank you Ben, though honestly any fool can read your pure emotion. You write with your soul.

I did email you though not sure if you ever received it.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks 4elements

qudsia, that's true, glad yours did :]

wayne, nothing could stop your poetry train haha, thank you for dropping in


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Wayne Brown 5 years ago from Texas

Hey Ben...if you keep this I'll have to quit writing poetry. Excellent stuff! WB


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QudsiaP1 5 years ago

Stay here with me tonight, and forever, Abandon me yet again,

and always Once more, you forget my heart’s longing for your heart’s

acceptance.

Only a heart can read these words and understand them.


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4elements 5 years ago

thought it was awesome


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks a lot docmo, unfortunately, that doesn't seem to be the case lol

at least not the ladies in these parts...

thanks for the compliments and the read


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Docmo 5 years ago from UK

Ben, your Byronic emotions will make every female heart go weak at their knees. You are a beacon in the darkness, my friend. such intensity, such emotive poetry. I salute thee!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thank you tnderhrt, this one was a major release for me


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tnderhrt23 5 years ago

A dynamic piece, Ben! Well done!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks nighthag, I hope you return, as always :]


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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia

this was beautiful, filled with emotions and so many layers that I am sure I will be back for a reread :)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

wow jessica...shaved ice, how flattering :]

I'm am very happy to hear that, thank you, and come back for more


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jessica.written. 5 years ago from Flagstaff, Arizona

that was delicious. i read that out loud. and the flow was up down up down and just soo graceful. the words melted in my mouth. like shaved ice. rigid but flavorful.

delicious.


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Cheri Bermudez 5 years ago from Maryland

hahahaha there's gotta be a first for everything! ;)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks :] no one has ever used the word "cadence" in a comment haha


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Cheri Bermudez 5 years ago from Maryland

Love it. Great cadence.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thank you kim and christine :]


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ChristineVianello 5 years ago from Philadelphia

Very nice...


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Little Kim 5 years ago from Any town U.S.A.

Love hubpages! So many different styles and I learn so much. Thank you!


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Kylo88 5 years ago from dc

yes, and i'm about to have another rant hub about how much i hate it too! lol


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

lol! got a fb?


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Kylo88 5 years ago from dc

yeay! i'm not alone!!

well, i kinkd figured that from the poem so that was really something i didn't need to say....but i'm hyper right now and wanted to say "yeay" so there you go!

I can also say "Yeay!" bacause you listen to good music!! i love soundtracks of games. so far i would have to say Xenosaga soundtrack is the BEST!! lol


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

pk2010 - that means a lot to me, thank you for your time and comment :]


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PK2010 5 years ago from United Kingdom

I love this Ben! The lyrics are haunting and beautiful, the theme powerful. Great piece of work! Your talent is amazing.


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

I know you will. And - It makes you deeper, stronger, more capable of both giving and receiving love which IS.

Hugs.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

rebekah - Thank you very much, thanks for checking this one out. Glad you liked it. Every comment I get is always a joy

Nellie - it's true, it wasn't real. But, unlike every relationship I've ever had, it was true love for ME. True love doesn't have to go both ways, like they say.

True love can go one way, and never die. I'll always believe that.

Thanks again Nellie, and I will be ok, promise


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Ben, I neglected to add the main thing, which you've expressed better than I could have, - that truly feeling love is a treasure and privilege, no matter what the other person feels or how it works out. The pearl in the oyster is being able to feel it. All our feelings are precious treasures, even pain & anguish. Of course, love is the best and feels the best of all others, so we treasure it most. Fact it, it's much better to be one feeling it than anyone who doesn't have that privilege. There is no faking it for either one.

I didn't mean to suggest that she took advantage. I only used an example to point out that if one person - for any reason - chooses not to be with another person, that is the reality and it is always best to know what is real. Only then can one go forth with confident foundations, as well as the precious memories. For her part, there were surely other constraints that weren't visible, but were true for her so she had to consider her course of action as she saw fit as she did.

Your own words said it true,- that she "chose to leave" and "made her choice". It's big of you to acknowledge it without bitterness and to treasure your own feelings & apply them to writing these heartfelt poems to which we can all deeply relate.


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rebekahELLE 5 years ago from Tampa Bay

Ben, this hub is beautiful with the music playing while reading. It certainly sets the mood and the words simply pour off the page. I'm very impressed at your depth and what you allow yourself to feel. If you continue writing with such depth, your words will have no other choice but to make beautiful poetry. Keep writing and don't be hesitant to express what comes from deep within. I'll be back to read more. Thanks for sharing here at HP.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

sligo - I'm not sure exactly what a true poet is, in comparison to one that isn't, but I do tend to think that I write with very strong emotion and feeling. It is how I release MANY years of built up pain. It works miracles, and the comments I receive make it ALL the better. Thanks

Lizzybeth - I'm glad you added another one, because every single one of them is what drives me. Thanks for always reading my work :]

saddle - I personally consider this to be my most emotional poem to date. I actually cried when I read it, paired with the music, and that's saying a lot. Your compliments are always awesome to hear, they mean the world to me, thanks again

Nellie - I guess I'll never be able to tell myself she wasn't worth it, because deep down I guess I feel like we were meant to be. I still almost feel like it wasn't meant to happen the way it did, but I may never know. She was everything to me. The only true love I have ever felt. Its true though, I need to fully move on...and I will.

She never used me, exploited me, or took advantage of me. It was a beautiful connection and I sensed nothing wrong. She just chose to leave one day. I'll never know why.

I know she made her choice, and it won't change, but I write poems like these to remember those feelings, and to keep them in my heart, as well as release pain.

Thank you very very much Nellie

*hugs*


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

YES! The music is perfect for it, Ben. I love that music! Haunting and visceral. It fits so perfectly!

The poem is beautiful, of course. But frankly - though it's clear that YOU really cared, it is clear that her feelings must have been off somewhere else. I do HAVE to ask, though. Why would you want someone, even though YOU really cared/care - if it is not genuinely reciprocated????? Would you want her to pretend? And if she really did care, wouldn't she be there - sincerely, because of it? Well - it does inspire such lovely poetry though.

Early in my online life, when all the interaction was via chat - and "comic chat", at that - I liked to roam and see what-all was going on besides in the ageless or seniors groups where my peers hung out. So I visited a teenage chatroom. I came in - and all the chat was either insulting or just inarticulate. But I was not deterred. I struck up a few greetings and waited to see what the responses would be. Mostly - none, but one youngster "whispered" to me - (a feature of that kind of chat ), saying "what are you ON?". LOL.

Well he went on sounding like one of the kids - which he was - 14 or 15, I think, & was from England. Pretty soon he dropped the phony inarticulate stuff and began to talk. I found out he was extremely depressed and contemplating throwing in the towel. Reason? The girl he really cared for.

Seems he had an after-school job as a prop person for a theatrical group, and they were on a world tour. Next trip was to China, and he was going and would be allowed to bring a guest. So he offered that to the girl, who took him up on it, joyfully. He was elated, of course - he'd been crazy about her.

But as soon as they returned to England, she dumped him and admitted she'd only gone along with it to get the trip to China.

I tried to explain that he was better off, knowing this truth, however painful than if she had continued to string him along, using him and exploiting his devotion without returning it. He sort of keyed into it, though it took him some time to really get past it. I haven't talked to him much in some time, but he is a great person and survived the heartbreak. Went on to finish his education and to do what he wanted to do with his life. I've though many time about what a treasure that life is and how sad it would have been, either if he'd had let her destroy it by her rejection OR if - worse - she'd have gone on deceiving him - and making them both miserable.

I never want anyone if it is not mutual, reciprocal and mostly unconditional, Ben. Trust me, we can't change someone else - and if they try to let us, even with good motives, - it backfires for all concerned.

Just treasure YOUR great memories of it when it was going well and don't regret or begrudge what is NOT the way it is now. Your day will come. If she should reappear, don't be too eager. If she is unconvinced in her own heart, even the beautiful poetry you write will produce much less than you deserve for your love.

Life goes on. Hugs and congratulations on another superior hub!!!! It's gotten some fantastic comments, too! I'm absorbing the whole thing!


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

Yes Ben you let loose your power of emotion, tears and loss all in this poem. You truly have an artist's heart, we do feel emotion, we cry, we laugh, we have joy, we have darkness.

To be a great poet, you must have this mixture, for without feeling, romance, love, failure, tears, pain and so much more one can not scribe the was one does. You have the gift and brave heart.

I hope if it's meant to be that you and your lady meet sometime in time again. Around every corner is destiny, keep an open mind and let it flow like your do here with your pen. Well done my friend, Bravo I applaud you....


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

Wow, tons of comments, so I'm gonna add another :) I really love this and the music makes it amazing!!! Another awesome, beautiful poem!!


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

You are thinking-feeling -and writing- as a true poet does.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thank you, your essiness :]


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essiheart 5 years ago from Chicago, IL

This is a really amazing one, it flows perfectly and the message is very emotional. Great job, Ben!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

SheZoe - That is one of the best things a writer could ever hear. It tells me that I am still improving and growing instead of dwindling out. This is actually my favorite poem I have ever written, so I am glad that people agree with that.

Thanks VERY much for that :]


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SheZoe 5 years ago from Idaho, USA

Ben i don't see how you have been able to outdo yourself again but i think this may be the best thing you've written that i've seen so far. i agree with all the others. this one can be deeply felt


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

ralwus - haha, thanks for that...

arb - thanks so much, I appreciate everyone who faithfully reads my stuff, It's nice to know that people are actually supportive and interested


arb 5 years ago

Good morning Ben, "without you I'm free" detachment is absolute freedom,absolute aloneness and absolute emptiness. Love is indeed, a two edged sword. "Better to have loved and lost, than never to have loved at all" Look what it has written. You make pushing buttons so easy for me.


ralwus 5 years ago

i would have said to her a few things in fewer words. But you are not me and tis good, voted up son. git the bitch out of your starving soul.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

to start again - that was a wonderful, flattering comment. It really gives me confidence in my writing, thanks so much

Cheyenne - you cried? wow, thats great, it brings me to tears as well. I'm glad it's powerful enough to do that :D

Ian - Thanks very much, it's awesome to hear you read it multiple times, I personally can't stop reading it, it has so much meaning and feeling for me


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thisismylife9123 5 years ago from Salt lake city, UT

this is so beautiful. i listened to the music and read the poem and i couldn't stop the tears from flowing. who is the lovely heartbreaker that gives you this inspiration, and does she have a brother? i'm out of ideas. >w< haha. bravissima, signore.


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To Start Again 5 years ago

Wow. Amazing poem, beautiful music. It all psirs together perfectly, the pictures really follow the mood of the song and complete the circle. I love it! Beautiful words and the flow is incredible. I loved how the last lines pick up a bit of a quicker pace when reading (at least when I read it). It's like I can feel your impatience, just wanting that person and praying they understand your need. Beautiful!


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

I have no idea how many times I have read this today. I think these few lines are stunning... i think it's their simplicity which gives then the power:

Far away,

I’m aware

Aware of

the distance

Within, I care

Without you

I’m scared

to breathe

Without you

I’m free

It reminds me of a song I wrote the lyrics for, for a friend of mine a budding pop star (unfortunately, he didn't flower, although he had great stage presence and a good voice)

"When I am beside you, I am beside myself."

Good, Innit.


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

I don't ignore on purpose lol Chris took my headphones, and I get evil glares if I play it out loud :(


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Hush, Ellie :]

did you listen to the music this time, or did you ignore my wishes AGAIN? ;] lol


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

Today is day two, you didn't make it all the way to the end. Close enough? I guess lol


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Ellie, I said 2 days

lol, I accomplished my task

Thank you :]


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

I knew you couldn't stay away lol I see you came back with a bang though xD Love it


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

haha, you leave great comments! I completely 100% understand that. I fell for her in 3 months, and I was under the impression she felt the same. She left, no reason, no explanation. It has never left me. Maybe it never will.

This was "free verse" I suppose, but I think it had a continuous, subtle rhyme and flow.

I never paid any attention to styles and formats, just whatever felt right for the poem

Thanks very much for that long, flattering comment

I would also recommend "sparks birth, flames end" and "descent"


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Kylo88 5 years ago from dc

Wow. This is excellent! From the words to the formatting...just EVERYTHING!! I LOVE it! And unfortunately, I relate to it as well.

When I look for men to actually have a relationship with, there are a lot of qualifications that I feel like I need met. I have never met anyone that has met them, before 'him'. He was perfect! Everything I wanted! And we connected! I NEVER connect with people that fast, if ever. I was ready to give him everything and anything he wanted or needed. I wanted him more than anything. He had my trust, my love, and my whole world in his hands.

I still don't know why he decided to crush it. This was almost three years ago now, and still, poems and reminders such as this just hit me so deeply. Thank you for this though. I feel like the more I get it out and realize that he is still hurting me, the faster the pain will be gone…at least that’s what people tell me.

This poem is excellent btw. I think I've said that already, but it truly is. I love everything about it. And that's saying a lot cause I normally can't stand free verse. But this...this is just awesome!

And am I considered a nerd if I've already heard this song?? Lolz personally I pictured (or heard I guess) the into to Within Temptation’s “Our Farewell”. Not really cause of the lyrics…just the into. Good song thought…

Thank you again! I will definitely have to read more or your poems.

Expect more long-ass comments from the Author Of the Odd!! MWAHAHAA!! lolz ^^


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Yeah, well, let's just say there's some history and truth behind this, just like all my poems. Thank you VERY much :]

glad to have a new follower


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barbergirl28 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

Very deep... It as almost as if you are going after someone who has lost interest and you are trying to win them back. It flows incredible and can be interpretted so many different ways. I read it over a couple times, because I read the comments and realized you intended it to go with the music. It is kind of sad too. Very well done.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Phoenix - I don't rely on email, I just go to

hubtivity and narrow it down to "hubs". That way I don't miss them.

She really truly did. Two years later, I remember every detail about her like it was yesterday. I can't EVER express what I felt for her...never. All I can do is try, through words, through poems. I hope that she sees them as well...if only she knew what she meant to me.

Hmmm, well either way, I am still very pleased with this poem.

I think it is my most powerful one. I really do.

Thanks so much for your support


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Poohgranma 5 years ago from On the edge

Ben - I have not been getting emails about all of your postings! I had wondered but now I'm positive. I guess I'll just have to search every day.

This lady certainly did a number on you. I'll comment on this end of it since there are no words I can find to express the brilliant job you did with it. I've tracked back and found the time frame and circumstances and all I can say is I hope she reads some of this and either explains why she left or realizes she made a HUGE mistake and comes back to stay! Wicked good, again!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

It makes me shudder as well. This is probably my most emotionally powerful poem that I can recall.

The thing about this style of writing...is how incredibly impacting the short simple lines can be. The way you read them, the way you absorb them, and the way they can combine in so many ways to form different meanings. I think it's safe to say I found my true style in this. I express myself so well this way.

LOVE final fantasy, 7,8,9,10 and legend of dragoon.

those games have drastically shaped who I am. No doubt.

I have Facebook, and google talk.


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Uriel 5 years ago from Lebanon

1- this is simply breath-taking ! God this made me shudder out of happiness and sadness since i am in an emotional pit right now. [i don't know if anyone used this expression before but i think i am running out of words recently]

2- i love the words you use. Sometimes i just forget what the words mean and i try to follow your own thoughts or pace to see what you were thinking back then.

3- i love how you don't need to use lots of words to express your ideas. This all put together i have one last comment : AMAZING!!!!!

are you also a final fantasy fan? how about God of war + plus do u have msn or anything maybe we can share some thoughts online as well as unfinished works/ poems ?


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

yea i listened to it. it brings a bit of drama to it, as if it was happening and music was playing in the background, like in a movie.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Nikki - very glad that you read it carefully, and noticed all those details. Yeah I did a lot of word play on this, I think the rhyme and layout was really unusual. Especially the last verse. Like every line interconnected, forming multiple sentences/meanings. Thanks so much for that comment :]

also, I dunno if you listened to the song, but I find that it intensifies the poem SO much


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

i loved the wordplay in the begining, internally, externally, within, without. awake, dreaming, aware, scared, beautiful sentiment to this poem, and a sad longing. one minute shes here, the next shes gone. and you still feel so strongly, yet you also feel abandoned, forgotten about. The line "you choose to evade every attempt that i make to convey what i feel" i can relate to that all too well, last guy i was so in love with, had committment issues and would push me away, or evade me, deny his feelings, at least i want to believe he had feelings for me anyway. and for so long i couldnt move on, but eventually the pain subsides, and eventually you find someone else, someone better. You may always hold this person forever in your heart, but theres plenty of room in there. great poem, ben.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

epi, you told me your age once...remember? haha thank you so very much sir

acer - you are always get it right

lady - wow, thank you! I really haven't quite figured out the extent of my talent. It hasn't dawned on me. The reason I have so many followers so fast, but I'll take it gladly.

Thanks very much for the read/comment/follow :]


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Lady Wordsmith 5 years ago from Lancaster, UK

You're not 74 Epi, you're 17! Same as me ;)

Ben this poem is incredible, truly. You are so very talented, and I'm not at all surprised to see that you've done so well on HubPages in such a short time. I'm following you!!

Linda.


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epigramman 5 years ago

...not too sure what to say about the 'elderly' part - lol lol - don't tell the 'gurls' here that I am really 74 years old - but I always enjoy what you have to say and what you write - you are truly the 'rising star' here at the Hub - and someone whom I admire very much - well it's time for my afternoon nap and my sexy nurse to put me to bed .......


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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

A passionate sentiment,without you're free,but only free to want to be kept.;)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

bella - promise me. PROMISE ME, you'll listen to the song and read it when you're home. The music amplifies it greatly. Thanks :]

epi - Not sure what to say to that one. You are certainly no slow kid with crayons lol! You're a quick witted elderly genius who seduces the young lassies with your epigrammy love. :P

Thanks!


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epigramman 5 years ago

.....a true poet you are Sir Ben of Writings with a noble and pure heart - it kinda makes me look like a slow kid with crayons - and you 'own' these words because I know 'they' certainly love being in your esteemed company! Ole!!!!!


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

I canot play the tune as I am at work :( sorry pal!

but it moved me across the room on my rolling chair with wheels he he he!!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

bella, wow, thanks so much. I actually managed to write something that makes MYSELF cry. The music, paired with the words impact me like nothing I ever wrote has.

Please tell me you played the song too.

Thanks for being first comment belly bell bel :]


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!

I felt this crawl through my bones Sir....

this style and type you bang on the keyboard just come out so smoothly and naturally. I see your a lover not a fighter! Very erotic piece and thought provoking! Bangin job well done!! Voted up up up up up and up!!

smiles :)

bella

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