Found You - Poem By Cathy Nerujen

"Twilight by the riverbank" by Paolo De Faveri. (c)2008 Paulo De Faveri. More at Pixdaus.
"Twilight by the riverbank" by Paolo De Faveri. (c)2008 Paulo De Faveri. More at Pixdaus.

Out in this cold blue dusk,
distant trucks on the road,
I’m trying to track your words,
as awkwardness fills the silence.
The evening breathes, but
it won’t exhale,
the suspense is killing me.

This foreign land, the smell,
the toasted mellow marsh
and salty stale hot air.
We are silent you and I.
No answer to my proposition.
The willows do not bend,
the bamboo straight and tall,
dark water clogged with leaves.
The reeds make no admissions.
I am a dying fish needing light.
While birds they never speak.

The sun succumbs to the sea again,
and Gaia takes a drink of her.
As blues and yellows turn to greys –
Your parka wrapped around you,
your Nikes pointed inwards,
a plop from a stone you throw,
a ripple tries a half smile –
my arguments are spent –
my soul begins to close on you,
then swallow as you take my hand,
your fingers warm and familiar,
without seeing your eyes,
I see you stare at me.

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About this Poem:

This is a poem about attachment, and about love for a dear friend. It was intended as being dreamlike and abstracted from reality, just as the poet had felt, when writing it. But too many fine details of the moment invaded the writer's conscience. So the scene just forms before us and memory has its way with the writer.

The tone is plain, anecdotal and one of natural speech, magnifying the solidity and reality of the event. An awkwardness from something outside our immediate vision has occurred and we begin at the edge of a swamp in a strange place - where two people are sitting, silently. The muggy dense atmosphere surrounding them threatens to suffocate the narrator, and is so evident. It's narrated in the first person singular.

Despite the tension and the darkly-painted scene in words, the poet eloquently catches the natural beauty in the murky surroundings, in the sunset and the sounds of the coming night. It reveals small clues as to the insight of the storyteller. A friendship in free fall is under threat, and it's resolution finally comes when the other person, who is devoid of close description suddenly hugs the narrator poet, breaking the built up tension.

The poem is in a way, like a sling being tightly pulled back, and then released at the end. The end is upbeat and full of optimism, assurance and intimacy. The poem crafts an arc and flow very simply and fluidly.

Your hand it squeezes mine,
and we turn and fall
into a hug, and then a
real tight hug, as the
air is knocked out of me –
and you whisper sorry and you kiss me.

The dull dark shadows
sound with noise,
as frogs and birds begin their call,
and tegument of dark arrives,
we open our lips and drink the night.
And each other.

Written in mid 2009, and written about a summers evening somewhere in India, some years before it, with a special friend. Two friends... two lovers, separated by something beyond their control, somehow find each other again. Found You is a spontaneous poem. It is written as a love poem and a sweet remembrance of things past.

Dedicated to a beautiful woman, an inspiring writer, and poet, Blaise25 - author of "Toss and Turn. And for Cassy, ever supportive and ever understanding.
Copyright (c) 2009 - 2015 Cathy Nerujen. All rights reserved.

This is part of a series of love poems and romantic poetry in a series I am publishing here on Hub Pages. This is one of many love poems I am publishing in a forthcoming book, due in the second half of 2015.

Toss and Turn by Marifel Dungo

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Cheeky Girl 6 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

Wow, this is wonderful! I really liked this! (I commented yesterday but there was a problem with comment boxes apparently, my votes are still here!) Yes, I read the copy book version you had handwritten, but seeing it here is better. I love the ending here, the resolution, the way it suddenly comes upon us. It starts kind of gloomy and uncertain, then comes right. Well done, Cathy. Very well written! As always! XOX


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Snapa 6 years ago from Belize

Yes I agree, i haven't read poetry for a long time, but I can feel this and imagine it. I know I've been there before. Passionate. Thank you.


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Cassy! Oh, you made the comment already, twice? Tell me later why that happened. Well it was you who encouraged me to publish this and a few others, did you not? LOL! Is it gloomy? H'mm, maybe in the start, but it felt that way at the time, until the sun went down, and things changed. Which goes to show, never lose faith or hope, as I almost did. I love you comments here. (My Mom is lot better) XOX

Hello Snapa: oh, I have a few more poems added here in recent days, feel free to read them, if you like. I think many of us can relate to the poem above, as many of us have perhaps been in that situation, maybe not the exact one but this kind of thing, I mean. Of almost experiencing a rejection or rebuttal. Well, I am always being told I am passionate about lots of things. It can be a strength, but sometime a weakness too. You are most welcome, Snapa.


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blaise25 6 years ago from close to you...

This is so beautiful and breathtaking. I felt like I was there sitting in twilight..This is so passionate and deep, it could resonate much feelings. To some it may mean reconciliation or whatever. But to me, it was bout the mystery tangling of two souls suddenly unravels, when it did, it's just the start.

"We open our lips and drink the night.

And each other."

Very striking! This has been one of the prettiest poem I've read in here. And I'm not saying this becoz it's dedicated to me LOL It's an honor to read your every word. Thanks for such an amazing poem moi friend XOX

PS: What happened in India?


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hello blaise, my friend! Oh thank you for this comment. Yes, it was a twilight moment, and yes, it was two tangles souls. You really get my vibe here, blaise. Are you psychic? :) The poem is a bit incomplete in a way, but that's the way I wrote it and I didn't touch a word of it, just republished in the hub as it is.

Ha. Yes I dedicated it to you, because I said I would. :D

And I am glad you like it. Oh, what happened in India was some unpleasant stuff. I brought a special friend and she hated it - and we were kind of "tangled" and frazzled at the edges. Some stuff I can't say here, but at the river bank we kind of reclaimed what we had, if you get my drift. It lasted another month or two, then we split. But on good terms, she'd still a friend too. (Sent you an email recently, it might help make more sense...).

I love your comments here always, blaise. Take care always! :D XOX


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alternate poet 6 years ago

Glad you called or I would have missed this ! It is a necklace of little memories, I like this.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

memories, lovely poem, just beautiful, Maita


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Cheeky Girl 6 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

Mwaaaah!


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi alternate poet, thank you for the lovely description. "A necklace of little memories..." That makes me smile. I am glad I "called". Will call often. :)

Hi Maita, everyone is remarking on my memories from times past. Thank you as always. Goodness, I am glad to be getting this feedback. Loving this. XX

Cheeky woman, this is all your fault for encouraging me to publish my poetry here. Hahahaha! Love you! :D XOXOX


TattoGuy 6 years ago

"Then swallow as you take my hand,

Your fingers warm and familiar,

Without seeing your eyes,

I see you stare at me.

Your hand it squeezes mine,

And we turn and fall

Into a hug, and then a

Real tight hug, as the

Air is knocked out of me –

And you whisper sorry and you kiss me.

The dull dark shadows sound with noise,

As frogs and birds begin their call,

And tegument of dark arrives,

We open our lips and drink the night.

And each other."

That bit of the poem is just awesome, to say I loved it is an understatement xox


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Art, mmmh, you really like this. Would you believe this was written long before I met Cassy? It's from way back, and I was not having the best of times in the romantic sense of things. This means a lot, and thank you so much for loving it. I am glad you are still here. :) Love always, XXX


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Lifeallstar1 6 years ago

Hi!! I'm so happy you found me so I could find this poem to read. Poetry has to be the hardest thing to write but has the greatest rewards. You did an incredible job!! You say you like to read things that make you think, you also love to write things that make others think and I thank you for it. This was so beautifully done. While reading I came to the first picture and it gave me goose bumps. I can't really express why, but I found it so fitting. It's a simple picture but with your choice of words it really made an impact. I am definitely a fan! Thank you for sharing this private moment with us. Jess


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Lifeallstart1. May I call you Jess? Cassy said you read the three encounters hubs, so basically you know I am that girl! Oh, I wrote poetry a lot back in school. I love the romantic poets, especially Keats and Shelley. Shakespeare's sonnets are divine. But I am forgetting myself in all this reverie. Ha.

H'mm, writing things that make others think, well if they make me think, they will definitely make other people think too. I never stop thinking. My brain never turns off, I'm afraid, unless I am sleeping. I guess I am a dreamer, Jess. And I turn them into poems or writing. Cassy is better at writing other kinds of things than I.

I could never write the encounters, cos I'm basically a chicken. LOL. I am getting back into my writing once again, and I am enjoying it. I have a lot of things I want to write about. It is so nice to see you enjoying my writing, and may I say thanks for these nice words from you. You made my day. :) My picture is under these comments now for everyone to see. What an interesting year this has been. It's like a second life for me. Take care, Jess.


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Lifeallstar1 6 years ago

Cathy, yes of course you can call me Jess! :-) I think it's great that you and Cassy are such wonderful writers. You are definitely a great asset to Hub Pages! This poem and your other hubs are written so well and it was a pleasure to read. I see your picture below, you are a beautiful person inside and out!! I want to thank you for your email too. That was so nice of you, it really made my day! Thanks again! :-) Jess


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Jess...thanks for this. I am smiling like the proverbial cheshire cat here...I have never seen a busier day on hubs in my life. Maybe it's also because today is a half day, and I have lots of free time. :) Anyway, thank you for saying we are such good writers. Well, some more productive than others certainly, but me being an asset. Okay, call me in a year to see did I get to make it to "Asset Class" Hubber. Ha. Wow, what a day it has been. I am actually smiling here now.

You like my photo, that is cool, I like yours here too. LOL! You must have really good x-ray glasses. LOL! I am glad if I could manage to make your day. We are eating a dinner here; I am eating and typing...haven't done this since cramming for my exams...and I have more comments than ever. Cassy is surprised. I think this is a good thing, and it is certainly boosting my confidence.

Jess, you are a ray of sunshine. Yes, you are now officially getting the Team Cheeky Award from us. Hahaha.

Take care. We will always be here, so we will see you around very soon. (Except when we are eating, that is.)

You truly are a "Life All Star".! :)


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ROMANCER OF LIFE 6 years ago from Honolulu, Hawaii

Wow... Wow... Wow.... very amazing! You are a very talented poet. Your words had me lost in my emotions. Very, very, beautiful. I can't wait for what's to come! Thank you =-)


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Romancer of Life, thank you for the nice comment. Lost in emotions. H'mm, that happens to me a lot too. But then my revenge is to put it into poetry. Ha. Aw, that's sweet. I am publishing another poem very soon. Have a wonderful day. :)


kimberlyslyrics 6 years ago

Completely captivating and makes me thrilled you were kind enough to comment to me, cause now I see you and what a gift, I too have read some of Blaise work, you both need to just go away, how are we to come close in hubbing this talent - so go

lol lol

beautiful read, your choice in words are more than poetic, thank you

kimberly


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi kimberly, I am glad you find the poetry captivating. Whew! I don't have many hubs, so I treasure every comment. Ha. You see me... I understand this, and thank you for this too. Well, I guess I am easy to figure out. I am that kind of person, I guess. Actually, you know what is better than having a gift? Having someone who believes in us having that gift. And believes in us for all the good wholesome reasons.

Your Hubs really impress me, they can be intense, but they move me too. You have had such a life, kimberly. You are that tall Lighthouse that warns us to avoid those perilous rocks nearby, and many lives are saved because of you.

Yes, Blaise is a very decent and wonderful person. But so are many people here in Hub Pages. I am smiling at these words here. :) Well, we are who we are. We are all our own truths.

I treasure these words from you, and you are a good person and thanks for saying this..."more than poetic"...yup, people telling me that a lot lately.

I will read more of your hubs, my Cassy reads your hubs. She is a big fan. Take care, kimberly. Hugs.

Cathy.


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chrissie123 6 years ago

I enjoyed reading this was very beautiful!!!


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acaetnna 6 years ago from Guildford

A beautiful poem, so full of emotion and the perfect picture to accompany it. Thank you for sharing.


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epigramman 6 years ago

.......here come ten my's ...... my my my my my my my my

my my ..... I need not look anywhere else or read anything else for a little while after being moved by this exquisite piece of writing ...and yes I am glad ... I found you!!


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi chrissie, it is wonderful to see you words here. I hope life is good with you, my friend. I have been reading your hubs too. I guess you know already. I am glad you enjoyed the read. Thank you. Pop in and say hello any time. :)

Hi acaetnna: I am trying to say the name out loud, it's not easy. Ha. Thank you for these lovely comments. The emotion is something I would never want to experience again, although the despair gives way to something waaay nicer at the end. I kind of love that picture too, so serene and almost religious in how it looks. Glad you like. I will be checking your hubs! Take care.

Hi epigramman, thanks for the email, Colin. You and your ten mys'. Ha. You are very kind for saying that.

And to answer all hubber here, I am publishing another hub later on sunday 3rd Oct. Thannk you Colin, acaetnna, chrissie and everyone... thanks. :)


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Dim Flaxenwick 6 years ago from Great Britain

You´ve reminded me so much of being young, I´ve gone gooey inside. lol


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Dim: wow, I did? Really? I have to re-check my poetry here now. Hahaha. Aw, this is an cool sentiment. Lol. Okay, I won't ask what age are you, Dim. Take care, and thank you. :)


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brandonfan 6 years ago from Mid West

I'm so happy to be here reading your work Astra! These poems are amazing! Just beautiful!


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi brandofan: wow, you are certainly enjoying the poetry here today. I am so glad you liked my "Found You" poem. Thank you. I will be checking more of your hubs too. :)


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Freya Cesare 6 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Really beautiful, dear. I love how you describing the scene. So sweet. Sweet words straight from the heart. Beautiful!


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Freya: it was a memorable holiday in Asia that was not working out the way it was planned. The romance was something I was hoping would blossom, but it withered on the vine. I blame other things for that, but we sat by a marshy river place and watched what might have been the sun going down on our relationship, and then...that happened in the poem. Simple really. Nearly lost the person, then it "boomeranged". Funny how love does that on a girl.

Thank you for the nice comments. I love getting your comments, Freya. :)


NikiiLeeReyes 6 years ago

Wow you say my work is nice; yours is absolutely beautiful! Wonderfully written. Truly impressive as well; its like your standing next to me as I read. Love this.


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epigramman 6 years ago

..every now and then on these pages of Hub I must return to the 'great ones' .. and this is truly a great one.

Your writing is so rich and cinematic Ms. Cohen - there!!!!! ya see - you weren't lookin' and I snuck it in calling your Ms. L. Cohen - lol lol - well my heart is in the right place - and you are what I look for in all great writers/poets - write from your heart and the mind will follow - pure bliss tonight from Lake Erie and although it's cold here you warm my heart with your words!


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hello again Nikki, you are a ray of sunshine! You found me and my "Found You". :) My staple diet, as writers go, is relationships, and especially romance. It's the one thing in life that, until 2009 I was crap at, then I got good, or lucky or both. LOL. I am glad you are finding my poetry and enjoying it.

You impress the hell out of me too. Don't ever stop writing these amazing hubs and poems. The words almost bleed onto the pages. And your photos you pick are a great compliment to your hubs. :)

Your fan, Cathy.

Hello Epigramman: the cinema-loving you that is ...well...you. LOL. I see you are also a fan of Nikki. I am no surprised. Her poetry is electrifying. Colin I think Hub Pages is giving birth to some great writers of the near future. We are seeing it happen around us. It's amazing. Thanks for these flattering words, you know how to impress and woo a lady with your wonderful comments. I am smiling here. People love writers with passion. We can smell it before we spot it. Even out in romantic Lake Erie. :) You words warm too, Colin. Like a burgundy I once drunk. ( Rather too heavily I'm afraid. LOL.)

Take care. I will be reading your new hubs soon, I know you have many. :)


NikiiLeeReyes 6 years ago

wow "Colin I think Hub Pages is giving birth to some great writers of the near future. We are seeing it happen around us. It's amazing" Just gave me chills. You are absolutely right! This is just wonderful--I love sharing my work;; especially with those who appreciate it as much as I do. Im glad I found bot you and Epigramman;; We'll be keeping in touch Im sure of that. Stay safe; and Blessed be.


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Thanks Nikki, You are a star with me already. In your travels you'll discover Cheeky Girl, maybe check her "encounters" hubs about how I met her. It's quite an education. And yes, I meant that about you being a great writer. You have no barriers, no limits. I am sure of it too, Nikki. Yup, I have made a new friend today. Heh. You stay safe too, Nikki.


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Heart Felt Book 6 years ago from New York, NY

THIS WAS A GREAT READ!!! VERY HAPPY I CLICK THIS HUB.. I WAS ACTUALLY TRYING TO CLICK A DIFFERENT POEM..LOL..FANTASTIC WRITING... I LOOK UP TO YOU..THANKS FOR SHARING THIS


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Cheri, I am glad you enjoyed my Found You poem here. Well, what a good thing you clicked me, instead of the other hub, unless it happened to be another of mine. But I hare being greedy. LOl. Thank you for loving the poetry. Wow, looking up to me...that is rare. I might ask you for a reference later. Ha. Kidding. But that means a lot to me. :) I love your powerful hubs as well. I love fearless writers. :D


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Very nice. I love the play on words with "mellow marsh". Glad I found your hubs -- poetry has been my stomping ground since I joined, so it was only a matter of time. Cheers and thanks -- Doug.


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Doug, and thanks for the lovely comment. Mellow marsh, that just came to me, I never planned it. The word mellow just suited it too. Funny how words just offer themselves up in nice unusual combinations. I love poetry. Oh, I will check your poetry if you write it, Doug. Take care. :)


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SkiFACE 5 years ago from The Underworld, A.R.D. (A Robbers Dream)

This is true art in a poetic sense.


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi SkiFACE, I am happy you like my poem. This as art... wow. Thank you for this glowing compliment. I will check out your hubs. :D


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SkiFACE 5 years ago from The Underworld, A.R.D. (A Robbers Dream)

I can't wait for you to check me out, lol and what's wit the tongue, is that an invitation, lol, i'm joking...


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Thanks SkiFACE, um something about a tongue I am missing here. Makes no sense, sorry.


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TheSloneGal 5 years ago

You have what it takes words seem to flow out of your heart so freely and beautifully Your writings are great and beautiful just amazes me I have just now given my hand at writing poems getting the hang some what.

Thank you for sharing your great work on here for us to see and feel


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi TheSloneGal, wow sounds like you are enjoying my poems. Thank you for saying this. My poetry does come from the heart. Sometimes I wonder how they will turn out. But I love writing poetry, it is a wonderful way to express oneself, on any subject. I am so happy you are getting the inspiration to write poetry now. Best of luck in your writing. I am happy to share with everyone, you too. Take care.


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Claudin_Dayo 5 years ago from Southeast Asia

in Korean, found you is chajatta =)

I love this love poem of yours Astra.. .

I hope to write mine soon XD


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi Claudin_Dayo: I am so happy you are reading my poetry there in Korea. Korean music and poetry is fantastic. I did not know chajatta is "found you". Thank you for telling me this, it's nice to know. Best of luck writing your poetry, and I look forward to reading it. Cathy. :)


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BeyondMax 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

Cathy, how sensually touching! Tantalizing, breathtaking flow, such a beauty, wow!


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi again, Beyondmax. The poem is pretty self-explanatory. It's a non rhyming one but it has regular beats in the words, so it grows on the reader, as it's read. This was written as it is here, relatively unedited... which is rare for me. LOL.

Wow, you are certainly reading my poems today. Thank you so much. :)


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Angelme566 4 years ago

Two souls talking in here , no need for words let the eyes speak ..Wow i love this poem , romantic and passionate. !

As you move a reader pal ! Voted and shared !


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dghbrh 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

wow is the only expression coming to mind.....

voted up and all

really loved your poem so much.....still drinking the emotions there......

"We open our lips and drink the night.

And each other.".....

wow.....lovely :-)


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Angel, it was about a winderful person and I being together... and things were a bit frazzled betswen us, as we were caught up in something that was putting a strain on our relationship... but we found each other again and untangled things.... Thank you for the lovely comments and vote too. You are a good friend and I apreciate it so much. :)


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Hi dghbrh thank you for the vote and comments. Yes, it is romantic, like all my poems.... thank you for this today. Have a wonderful day too. :)


IntegrityYes 4 years ago

That is fantastic. I voted up for sure.


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Thank you IntegrityYes. :)


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ROMANCER OF LIFE 3 years ago from Honolulu, Hawaii

Wowzers Honey! This is beautiful... This piece spills romance from beginning to end and I just love reading your writes.

"Drink the night & Each other" Love it... SEXY, sexY, SExy!

Romancer ;)


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Astra Nomik 3 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Wow. Hi Rena. I am so happy to see you back on Hub Pages. please stay around longer because I miss your lovely hubs and poetry and writing. :)

Thank you for the lovely comments on my hub "Found You". It was a weird chapter from long ago in my life, and I am so over it now. b

But the hub catches the mood and how my friend and I (in the poem) became together again, back then. Yes, it does spill romance, and it needed to be told with some detachment and honesty.

Have a sweet day Rena. I hope things in Hawaii are nice today. :)


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Cheeky Girl 3 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

This is one of my all-time favorites from you, Cathy. Starts of in such a quirky way and so unsure of itself and then it erupts in this beautiful ending! The flow of this just gets me completely...

Wish I could write poetry as good.... :P XOX


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Astra Nomik 3 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Oh Cassy.... :P

It was spontaneous... sort of wrote it straight away... kind of...

LOL. I am not quirky.... am I? :P


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Cheeky Girl 3 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

No, the poem starts off in an uncertain frame and then ... like an overturned boat, suddenly rights itself, to the readers surprise. I love how you pulled that off here!

No honey, you are not quirky whatsoever! Meant that in a nice way. :)


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Astra Nomik 3 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space Author

Wow... that analogy of the boat righting itself and reverts to being okay again... Mwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah :)

I wrote the poem, but it was my friend back there who "righted the boat", in the poem, on the banks of that river.

It's okay, I know what you meant. Hehehe. Why am I saying this here?

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