Senryu: Heartfelt Thoughts and Emotions in 17 Syllables

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This collection of senryu—similar to haiku, but dealing with an emotion rather than nature—is dedicated to my friend Dave, who pushed me to write beyond limits I wrongly perceived.

Thank you, my friend.


Senryu for Dave

much sadness and pain

write —
my good friend challenged me

enduring friendship


Friendship

all gold and silver in the world is nothing — compared to true friendship


Compassion

compassion

caring

sharing

helping those different from you —

don’t stop


Daisy

from a seed that’s nurtured

and cared for

emerges a flower —

daisy


Mariposa

out of her cocoon

into the light...

transformation —

a butterfly


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sholland10 4 years ago from Southwest Missouri

Beautiful! Friends are great for pushing us to reach our potential. Voted and shared!!

Thanks for SHARING!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks so much, Susan. Once I started writing today, the words just seemed to pour out of me.


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donnaisabella 4 years ago from Fort Myers

Beautiful, very beautiful Daisy. It brought tears to my eyes. It is just lovely.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

donnaisabella,

I'm glad you enjoyed my writing. This was the first collection of Haiku I've published here. I'm curious to see what the reaction will be.


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thejeffriestube 4 years ago from United States

Daisy, it's perfect! So good! Your talent never fails to amaze me. Please keep writing.


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MsDora 4 years ago from The Caribbean

Great tribute to your friends. Your sense of appreciation shines brightly.


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NatalieSack 4 years ago from Pittsburgh, PA

Lovely haiku.


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Mesmerizing descriptions.

I loved the new you.

Cheers


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

Simply beautifully worded, all five Haiku's simply worded, yet straight from your heart. True and genuine friendships is the Elixir of life. Bravo very well done. Voted Up, awesome and beautiful my poetic friend.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thank you, thejeffriestube (Dave). I'll expand my reply later. I'm a bit overwhelmed at the moment.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

MsDora,

Thanks for commenting. My friends are very precious to me.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

NatalieSack,

I appreciate your reading my Haiku. Thank you.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Vinaya, my friend, thank you.

I hope everyone reads your Rose Haiku. It's beautiful.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Vincent, my friend, your praise means a lot to me. Thank you.

You didn't count the syllables in my Hub title, did you? I wrote six Haiku, not five...


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Dexter Yarbrough 4 years ago from United States

Very nice, Daisy! So very heartfelt!


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epigramman 4 years ago

..well you have some very great people in your corner I see on this page .....and deservedly so ...this is just simply wonderful writing and will be posted on Facebook page otherwise known as Daisy's new place at Facebook - lol

lake erie time ontario canada 11:41am just woke up about an hour ago and I am having my 2nd cup of coffee


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks, Dexter. As you probably know, I like to publish a mix of articles on HubPages. I'm getting a great response to this Hub.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Colin,

I'm glad I provided something to read while you're having your coffee. Thanks for linking to this Hub.


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

Ah I stand or sit to be corrected, yes indeed six it is. My apology offered, thank you for correcting me, now go scribe six more my talented poet:-) hugs


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

How wonderful to have a friend like that! And I am so glad for you that you went beyond your perceived boundaries--these are lovely!


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

I'm not sure if you challenged yourself by saying you'd use 17 syllables, or just counted up what you had. Either way, well done. Voting this Up and Awesome.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Vincent,

I've been thinking in 17-syllable spurts for the past 24 hours. I'm going to have to write more. Thanks so much for your support.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audrey,

You're such a talented writer and poet. Your comments mean a lot to me.

Thank you...amd Happy Birthday!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Aurelio,

Traditional Haiku is 17 syllables...three lines: five syllables, then seven syllables, then five.

I intentionally wrote 17 syllables for each Haiku...the Hub title and each of the five in the article. The title and the first two took the longest to write...it had been a number of years since I wrote anything like this.

The third Haiku took two minutes to write. The fourth and fifth took a minute each.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

great work, voted beautiful and up. Have you read my haiku? I have a few up, but the one's I really like are here: http://hubpages.com/literature/FIve-Thoughts-in-85...


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Justin,

Thanks for reading my five 17-syllable Haiku. I'm glad you enjoyed them.

I can't believe I did it, but the title of this collection of Haiku is also 17 syllables.

*****

Everyone, please read my friend Justin's collection of Haiku. I know you'll enjoy them as much as I did. Please see the link in the comment above mine.


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makusr 4 years ago from India

Daisy a good read. Haiku is a genre that needs a lot of expertise to delete the words without compromising the emotions.

MAKUSR


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Manoj,

Thank you so much for reading my Haiku.

May I say that I have never read a better description of Haiku than what you wrote in your comment?


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

Great examples of Haiku Daisy ; I loved them and have to award them that up up and away.

Take care;

Eddy.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks, Eddy. Your praise is very much appreciated.


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Daisy this is beautiful!


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missolive 4 years ago from Texas

oh I love this! The simplicity of it all shows the power of well placed words. Thank you for sharing your Haiku

voted up and sharing :)


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Sunshine625 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

Beautiful haiku for Dave. I think he's an awesome guy too! HP's could use more Dave's. I have an HP Dave and he's awesome too!:)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks, Susan! I'm amazed at what I wrote. I still can't believe it!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Miss Olive,

The only problem I see with writing Haiku is that I'm thinking in little 17-syllable bits now. The European geography quiz I've been writing will look funny as a string of Haiku.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Linda,

You're correct about Dave. He's a very loyal friend.


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thejeffriestube 4 years ago from United States

^Dave and 1 other person likes this.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Aargh, Dave!!!


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

Very nice haiku. Beautiful and motivating. Voted up.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Mary,

It's very nice to meet you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

thanks Daisy, for the plug :-)


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

Beautiful indeed, Daisy :)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thank you so much, Ruchira. I have some very good friends.


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asmaiftikhar 4 years ago from Pakistan

beautiful and awesome expression.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

asmaiftikhar,

It's very nice to meet you. Thanks for reading my Haiku.


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vocalcoach 4 years ago from Nashville Tn.

Beautifully done. I am very impressed. I will send this to my friends and voted up and beautiful!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks so much vocalcoach. This truly was writing from the heart.


iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

straight from the heart!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audra Leigh,

Thanks for reading my Haiku. I truly value the friendship of the person who pushes me to write..and write...and write some more...


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pedrn44 4 years ago from New Berlin Wisconsin

Beautiful. Thanks so much for SHARING:)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

pedrn44,

I'm glad you enjoyed my Haiku. I'm so pleased with the response this Hub has received


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Cloverleaf 4 years ago from Calgary, AB, Canada

Hi Daisy, I have new found appreciation for Haiku! My Mum (Movie Master on HubPages) just started it a little while ago but before then I had never heard of it. I really enjoyed how you have expressed your friendship for Dave through this hub - it's very beautiful. Voted up!


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PurvisBobbi44 4 years ago from Florida

Daisy,

That was beautiful--I could feel it was from the heart and soul of a great poet. Very touching.

I voted awesome and beautiful.

Bobbi


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks, Louise.

I have a very good friend who pushes me to continue writing when I think about quitting.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Bobbi,

I appreciate your kind words very much. Thank you.


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rlaha 4 years ago from Spartanburg, SC

Beautifully written! Wow! Voted up and beautiful!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Rani,

It's nice to meet you. Thanks for your kind words regarding my Haiku.


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rlaha 4 years ago from Spartanburg, SC

It's nice to meet you too! :) You are very welcome!


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tammyswallow 4 years ago from North Carolina

Eloquent and beautiful! A wonderful tribute to a special friend. Where would we be without friends like this! Excellent!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Tammy,

Thanks so much for commenting. I started to write a reply to you about my friend, but I realized the sentence contained 17 syllables. I'll have to save my comment for a future Haiku collection.


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Beautiful! Came upon this through pininterest


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Thanks so much, Audrey! I appreciate your stopping by and reading what is a very special Hub for me.


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Wonderful pieces. I like haiku and have fun creating them. It looks as if you really enjoy them as well. Beautifully done.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Cyndi10,

It's nice to meet you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku. I wrote them as a way to thank a friend for encouraging me to write.


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

Haikus force us to simplify language and words and focus our meanings more. I love them and your poetry here is wonderful. Awesome writer. :)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Cathy,

Thanks so much for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku. I enjoy the challenge of painting a picture or an emotion with the traditional 17 syllables.


girltalksshop 4 years ago

Very nice! I love these!! : )


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Gwennda,

I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku. They're a challenge to write, but also fun to write.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

Adding my humble kudos.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Perspycacious,

It's nice to meet you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku.


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fpherj48 4 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Daisy....Wonderful Haiku. I'm beginning to really get into "Haiku." They're fun to write and make expressing something in writing, very creative and unique! UP++


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

fpherj48,

I'm glad you stopped by to read my Haiku. I enjoy the thought process that goes into writing them.


iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

Daisy, I loved that you were so proud of this hub you had written!!! It came straight from the heart. It's simplicity was powerful! I especially liked the line stating, "helping those different from you"! It was poignant! Well done and voted up..and shared!!!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audra Leigh,

I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku. Thanks so much for your very kinds words.


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Beautiful haiku Daisy, Voting up and awesome.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Movie Master,

Thanks so much for reading my Haiku. I'm glad you enjoyed them.


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Denise Handlon 4 years ago from North Carolina

Beautiful, Daisy. Enjoyed.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Denise,

Thanks for reading my Haiku. I'm glad you enjoyed them.


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Victoria Lynn 4 years ago from Arkansas, USA

What a great friend. Glad you continued writing. Good job on this. Many votes!


iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

Your haiku is my last read for tonight! You beautiful words made it a pleasure to read ...again!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Vicki,

Thanks so much for your very kind words. I appreciate it.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audra,

Thanks for reading my Haiku a second time and adding another comment. Thanks, too, for your continued support.


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DanaTeresa 4 years ago from Ohio

These are beautiful.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Dana,

Thanks for reading my Haiku and adding your comment.


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Suelynn 4 years ago from Manitoba, Canada

Beautiful Haiku, Daisy Mariposa! Sometimes things are more beautiful when simply stated! Voted up. :)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Susan,

Thanks for reading my Haiku and adding your comment. I appreciate it.


KDuBarry03 4 years ago

I agree with Suelynn, it's beautiful! Sometimes the most powerful messages are easier said with simplicity :) voted up!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Keith,

Thanks so much for your very kind words.

My words just flowed with this collection. It's as if the Haiku wrote themselves. Sometimes I think in groups of 17 syllables.


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secondimage 4 years ago from From a place lost in time and space

Daisy you are a simply amazing poet, so glad to have found you!! so nice to be following you voted up and awsom


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

secondimage,

Welcome to HubPages. It's nice to meet you. Thanks for reading my Haiku and commenting. I appreciate it.


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mythicalstorm273 4 years ago

This is very beautiful. I love how you broke it down as you progressed. That was a very interesting way to do it, but it turned out wonderfully!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Crystal,

Thanks for reading my Haiku and commenting. Haiku are 17 syllables. I've seen some people publish just one poem as a Hub, but I think it's so much more meaningful to publish a group of Haiku as a collection.


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mythicalstorm273 4 years ago

I fully agree that this was far more meaningful. You took the poems and made it into a story with each individual one having a story as well. I really did enjoy how you put it together!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Crystal,

Thanks for visiting again. Thanks, too, for adding your very kind words.


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

Beautiful... beautiful indeed! Wonderful poetry


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Rahul,

It's nice to meet you.I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku.


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vocalcoach 4 years ago from Nashville Tn.

I realize I have read and commented on this Daisy. You're probably surprised to see me here again. The thing is - I needed to think about something beautiful today to take my mind off the arthritis pain. I knew your lovely poetry would bring me what I needed. So thank you again. And I wish I could direct 300 people to you. I'm working on 25 for a start! :-)


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Came back for another read--just lovely!


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Docmo 4 years ago from UK

Heartwarming haiku - these are wonderful tributes to friendship- I am glad your friend pushes you to write. Here's to some more...


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teaches12345 4 years ago

You managed to convey your thoughts in just a few verses. I need to work on compassion myself. It sometimes slips away from me. Loved it all!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audrey (vocalcoach),

Thank you so much for your very kind words. I hope reading my Haiku helps take your mind off your physical pain today.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audrey Howitt,

Thanks for visiting again. I appreciate your support.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Docmo,

It's nice to meet you. Thanks for reading my Haiku and leaving your comment. I appreciate it.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Dianna,

Thanks for reading another of my Hubs and commenting in it. I enjoy the challenge of writing Haiku. I find it very calming. I keep to the 17 syllables, but I don't always write in lines of 5/7/5 syllables.


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cclitgirl 4 years ago from Western NC

Wow, Daisy! Beautiful!! I can't wait to start doing some haikus. You, too, have inspired me. :)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Cyndi,

Thanks for reading my Haiku and commenting. I enjoy the challenge of this type of poetry. You'll have fun with it.


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Tracy Lynn Conway 4 years ago from Virginia, USA

This is great, I love the idea of friends challenging and pushing each other. I can feel the love woven through the words. Voted up and beautiful.

Tracy


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Vellur 4 years ago from Dubai

Beautiful Haiku poems, reflects friendship in it's true sense, voted up.Awesome.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Tracy,

Thanks for reading and commenting in another of my Hubs. I'm very fortunate in having such a good friend.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Nithya (Vellur),

It's nice to meet you. One of the things I like best about HubPages is people from all over the world reading and commenting in my Hubs.


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Cathleena Beams 4 years ago from Lascassas, Tennessee

Simple and amazing lines on the value of friendship. I loved every word. Voted up, awesome, beautiful and shared for you on my Facebook. Will forward on Hubpages also if I can locate that link that seems to be hiding again.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Cathleena,

It's nice to meet you. Thanks for reading my Hub, commenting in it, and sharing it. I'm so fortunate to have such a caring friend.


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skye2day 4 years ago from Rocky Mountains

Daisy. Sister this is a brilliant piece of work. Each word a treasure to hold onto in remembrance of growing love. Beautiful indeed. I love the picture. This makes my heart to smile. There is a reason for all things.

Keep going daisy. Love ya.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

skye2day,

It's nice to meet you. You're my 300th follower. Thanks for that.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading my Haiku. I took the photograph on Utö, a small island that's the southernmost island in the Stockholm archipelago.


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ChristyWrites 4 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

I love that you put your first and last names for the last 2 Haikus. Creative and also inspiring for writers! I vote up and will share too.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Christy,

Thanks for reading and commenting in another of my Hubs. Thanks, too, for sharing my Haiku collection on Google+.

There was a time when I had considered stopped writing. I have a good friend who convinced me to continue, and who still encourages me to write.


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Suelynn 4 years ago from Manitoba, Canada

Beautiful, Daisy. It's nice to see how it's done! Voted up.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Susan,

Thanks for reading my Haiku collection and commenting.

They're all 17 syllables, as is the Hub title, but none of them are in 5/7/5 format.


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Jools99 4 years ago from North-East UK

Daisy, great haiku and well done on shaking up the 5/7/5! I find haiku ssssooooooo difficult - very formal. I have written a few but have to really be in the zone - I am too wordy for these compact little poems.

Voted up.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Julie,

Thanks for reading and commenting in another of my Hubs. Sometimes the 17 syllables just flow into my head without my even thinking about it. They don't flow in the 5/7/5 format, however.


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josh3418 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

Daisy, this is awesome! You did an excellent job on this 5/7/5! I have not tied it yet probably because of fear because of how hard it would be, :) But this is an inspirtation and encouragement! Great job, voted up, more, and shared! Nice to meet you my new hub friend! :)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Josh,

Thanks so much. I write in 17 syllables, but my Haiku are a bit non-traditional in that my lines are not always 5/7/5. The titles of my Haiku collections are always 17 syllables, too.


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Sunshine625 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

I hope Dave visits his tribute haiku today since its his birthday! Happy Birthday, again!:)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Linda,

Thanks for visiting again. I posted this Hub on Google+ earlier today, and I reminded Dave to look on G+ for his Hubs.


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josh3418 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

Yeah I noticed that they aren't always but that's ok, it makes your work unique! :) And interesting, I didn't know that about your titles, even more unique! I love it! :)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Josh,

Thanks for stopping by again. Today is the birthday of the friend to whom I dedicated this collection of Haiku. I posted the collection on Google+ when I wished him a "happy birthday."


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poshcoffeeco 4 years ago from Cambridgeshire

Short and sweet!

I loved it.


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Docmo 4 years ago from UK

Nice work Daisy- personal, positive and describes metamorphosis. beautifully done.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Steve (poshcoffeeco),

Thanks for reading and commenting about my Haiku collection. I appreciate your continued support.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Mohan (Docmo),

Thanks for reading my Haiku collection a second time and adding another comment.

This is the first one of my Hubs in which you commented. During the past seven weeks, you have continually supported my writing. I appreciate that very much.


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Fennelseed 4 years ago from Australia

Beautiful haiku describing a transformation and an emergence of self. From pain to creativity to healing!! Write on Daisy!! My votes and best wishes to you.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Annie (Fennelseed),

Thanks for reading my six Haiku and commenting...the title of my collection also contains 17 syllables.

I appreciate your very kind words. My Haiku seem to write themselves. Group of 17-syllable thoughts often float into my head while I'm not even thinking about writing anything.


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midget38 4 years ago from Singapore

Daisy, a thoughtful, heartfelt haiku., written brilliantly. All my votes.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Michelle (midget38),

Thanks for reading my Haiku collection collection and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed them.


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Nell Rose 4 years ago from England

Absolutely beautiful, Daisy, loved them, voted up!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Nell,

Thanks for reading my Haiku collection. I'm glad you enjoyed them.

I think I might have been a poet in a past life. Most of the time, words flow into my brain in 17-syllable groups, without my even thinking "I'm going to write a Haiku now." They seem to write themselves.


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rajan jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

This is beautiful and a great read. Voted up and beautiful, Daisy.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Rajan,

It's nice to "see" you again. Thank for reading my Haiku collection and commenting. I appreciate it.


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Lady_E 4 years ago from London, UK

Beautifully written. I enjoyed it.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Elena (Lady E),

Thanks for reading my Haiku collection and commenting.

I had a long conversation with my friend yesterday. He told me how proud he is of me for completing the Apprenticeship Program, and he's still encouraging me to write. Good friends are to be treasured.


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remaniki 4 years ago from Chennai, India

Enjoyed every word of this haiku Daisy. Great hub. Keep writing. Cheers, Rema.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Rema (remaniki),

Thanks for reading my haiku collection and adding your comment. I appreciate your support of my writing.


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ignugent17 4 years ago

It is really nice to share with friends.

Voted up and beautiful ! :-)


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

ignugent17,

Thank you for reading my haiku collectiona and adding your comment.


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

I Loved Daisy and Mariposa. It is wonderful that you follow the 17 syllables pattern. (I usually don't)


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LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

Isn't it funny how Best friends know about us more than we know our own self! This was beautiful, and I can, very much, relate to it..... Voting up and awesome!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Vinaya,

Thanks for visiting again. I appreciate your continued support of my writing.

*Daisy* and *Mariposa* are also my two favorite haiku in the collection.

I sometimes think in groups of seventeen syllables. Words just pop into my head that way. I tried writing haiku in the traditional 5/7/5 format, but it just doesn't work for me. Everything seems forced; the words don't flow the way I would like them to.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

LaThing,

It's nice to "see" you again. Perhaps friends can see us better than we can see ourselves because it's easier for someone on the ourside to look in than it is for someone on the inside to look out.


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teaches12345 4 years ago

How creative! I love all your thoughts, especially the friendship idea. Well done.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Dianna (teaches12345),

Thanks for reading my haiku collection and adding your comment. I appreciate your support of my diverse HubPages writing.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

Lovely Daisy....seems your friend has pushed you to bloom! Thank him/her for us because we got to read the benefit of the beauty!

Voted up, awesome, and interesting.


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Mary (tillsontitan),

Thanks for reading my haiku collection. Thanks, too, for your very kind words. I appreciate it.


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Laurinzo Scott 3 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

To write beyond limits wrongly perceived ...incredible daisy, and I am glad that your friend encouraged you so... this is wonderful!

Love haiku, and what a tribute to the form!!!!


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Laurinzo,

Thanks for reading my haiku collection and adding your wonderful comment.

The five haiku took me a few minutes to write. It was almost as if they were automatic writing. The title took the longest...I wanted it to be 17 syllables.


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midget38 3 years ago from Singapore

Daisy, coming in again to say this is a wonderful collection of haiku. Thanks for sharing, and am definitely passing them on.


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Michelle (midget38),

Thanks for reading my haiku collection another time. I appreciate your sharing my article again.


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Vellur 3 years ago from Dubai

Came back to read these haikus, beautiful. Voted up once again.


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

Beautiful collection Daisy!


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John Sarkis 3 years ago from Los Angeles, CA

Hi Daisy, and great poem - voted up and sharing on FB with family and friends.

John


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Nithya (Vellur),

Thanks for returning a second time to read my haiku collection. I appreciate your support of my writing.


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audrey,

Thanks for reading my haiku collection and adding your comment. I'm amazed at how many people have read and commented in my collection of short-form verse.


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

John,

It's nice to "see" you again. Thanks for reading, commenting in, and sharing my haiku collection. I appreciate your support.


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Nell Rose 3 years ago from England

Came back for another read of your beautiful poems, so lovely, voted up and shared, nell


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Nell,

Thanks for visiting again. Thanks, too, for sharing my haiku collection. I appreciate your continued support of my writing.


Sueswan 3 years ago

Hi Daisy,

Your haiku is wonderful. So much meaning in 17 syllables.

Voted up+++ and sharing


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Sue (Sueswan),

Thanks for reading my haiku collection and adding your comment. I appreciate your very kind words. Thanks, too, for sharing my Hub.


Sannel 3 years ago

Beautiful work, Daisy! I loved them.

Take care!

Sannel


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Sannel,

Thanks for reading the poems in my haiku collection and posting your comment. All six of my poems have 17 syllables, but some don't adhere to the traditional English language haiku format of three lines with 5 / 7 / 5 syllables.


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marcoujor 3 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Dear Daisy,

Thank you so much for sharing as I had completely missed this sentimental and soulful sampling of senryu.

I learn so much flexibility and creativity from you...I will start thinking in total syllables, as opposed to 5-7-5, as I was limiting myself to the traditional Enlish format.

Your photograph and tasteful borders make your work truly come alive. You have a beautiful name and I love that you intertwined it in your work.

Thank you for giving me inspiration this morning.

Voted UP and UABI. Hugs, Maria


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Maria,

Thanks for reading my senryu collection and posting your comment. I appreciate your very kind words.

Did you notice that the article title is also 17 syllables?

These senryu wrote themselves in a matter of minutes. The words simply flowed into my brain. I hadn't been thinking about writing poetry.

The less structured 17-syllable format, rather than the more structured 5 / 7 / 5 format, seems to work especially well for senryu. Some of the information I found while doing research for my poetry articles stated that it's OK to write in what I like to think of as 17-syllable "bursts" instead of the three-line format. The articles have said that the syllable count is what matters, not the line count.

The photograph is one I took on the island of Utö, the southernmost island in the Stockholm archipelago. The border is one which I created using Photoshop.


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Nell Rose 3 years ago from England

Beautiful Daisy, and very clever! I have never heard of this type of poetry before, so I learned something new! voted up and tweeted.


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Daisy Mariposa 3 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Nell,

Thanks for reading my senryu collection and commenting in it. Thanks, too, for tweeting my Hub.

Both haiku and senryu are 17-syllable poems. Haiku traditionally deal with subjects related to nature. Senryu deal with emotions.


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vocalcoach 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

I decided to read your Senryu as I don't think this was here 22 months ago. I love your senryu collection and the way you created emotions from your own name.

I would love to try writing with this style, but I'm not sure I have enough knowledge and I don't want to look like a fool.

How wonderful to have someone like Dave to encourage you. I wouldn't have wanted to miss your lovely creation. Pinning, tweeting, g+ and sharing with my followers. - Love, Audrey


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Daisy Mariposa 2 years ago from Orange County (Southern California) Author

Audrey (vocalcoach),

Thanks for returning to read my senryu collection another time. Thanks, too, for pinning and tweeting my Hub, posting the link on Google+, and sharing with your HubPages followers. I appreciate your support of my writing.

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