Haikus - Needs must

 Wanting to produce a hub but lacking any inspiration came across a hub by Russ Baleson about haiku. They're easy to write, probably impossible to write well but best of all they're fun in a cryptic crossword kind of way...

 

Hat, scarf, coat and boots

The trees unclothed in winter

How fragile we are!

 

An inhalation

is always for the outward

purpose of living

 

Overtaking car

Growing small in the distance

Red light magnifies!

 

A scream leaves the room

The evening sun is painting

Little spider big

 

Defeated again

But we will battle once more

Stubble in water

 

Haikus are smaller

Than other poems to write

Quick accomplishment

 

Where does it all go?

The old boiler needs fixing

Disappearing steam

 

Random Haiku experiment

These are random haiku. I have searched for 5 and 7 syllable sentences or phrases in newspapers, leaflets, ads, books etc and stuck them together in the order I have found them.

Absoulutely free

They have long been recognised

Which is why we hope

 

More convenient

By making the simple switch

I saw the segment

 

The award winning

Leaves you a little surprise

Do you know your rights?

 

The old man was thin

No purchase necessary

Sarah's first post said

 

Takes just four minutes

Anti-social behaviour

When he hit the fish

Comments 16 comments

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maven101 6 years ago from Northern Arizona

Wow !! For a first attempt at haiku your opening expressions were beautifully crafted with visual and verbal content....I find that I can appreciate haiku more fully when read aloud...The " Random haiku " was a bit dicey, and lacked continuity...I would have liked to felt more with your opening line " the old man was thin ", but it didn't go anywhere...however, the last " takes just four minutes....." was very expressive and full of divergent thoughts, with a most surprising visual ending...

You have rare talent, much appreciated, please continue to delight us with your haiku...Larry


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

Your commments are very kind Larry. I was half pleased the random ones weren't up to the conscious ones!


AuthorLMS 6 years ago

very good, I can barely write poems myself :-)


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

Thank-you, I'm sure there's a verse or two just waiting to get out!


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Russ Baleson 6 years ago from Sandhurst, United Kingdom

he writes from his heart

letting the haiku flow through

another hub friend

Hi Hotspur, these are impressive. I agree with Larry about the random haiku. Although they're clever and I'm always one for creative experiment, they're overshadowed by your own. You do have a talent and I look forward to reading more please! Regards, Russ


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

Hey Russ, many thanks for your hub in the first place; I'd read Basho years ago but had forgotten all about haiku until I read your hub. Yes, the experiment needs more trials; may be an interesting springboard for ideas...thanks for the kind words.


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

Great alternative to what we're used to. Great job.


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Cris A 6 years ago from Manila, Philippines

I cannot write haikus as my natural tendency is to let it flow and not be bothered with premeditation. But I sure can appreciate them. Thanks for sharing. I specially like your little experiment, they are so surreal. :D


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

Thanks Mickey Dee glad you liked them.

Hi Cris, yeah I know what you mean - counting syllables isn't my thing ordinarily but a change is as good as a rest...thanks for reading!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

Great job hotspur! From the looks of it you had a lot of fun doing this. Way to make your mark on the form. A wonderful effort.


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

Thanks Dohn, appreciate you reading these; yes I had fun they're like a little word puzzle.


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Sheila Wilson 6 years ago from Pennsylvania

Some of these are interesting reads, though almost all of them are senryu- not haiku. Seems like you had fun with it though.


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

Ok so haikus are about nature and senryus are about humanity? The whole English haiku is probably a non starter anyway - grammatically and culturally but they are fun to do. Thanks for the informative comment Sheila....do I have to rename the hub?![


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Sheila Wilson 6 years ago from Pennsylvania

No, most people don't know the specifics of haiku anyway, so I wouldn't rename the hub. Senryu are about people, pop culture, and are often humorous. Some people consider senryu to be failed haiku, but I think senryu have merit too. Haiku are actually very difficult to do well. Yes, they must be about nature, but that's just one of the rules (and the 5-7-5 thing isn't one of them!). Feel free to check out my hub: http://hubpages.com/literature/How-to-Write-Haiku-...


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s0126phoenix 6 years ago

I love it when people show art made out of the everyday. enjoyed it.


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hotspur 6 years ago from England Author

The plot thickens! - actually the 5-7-5 thing is the bit I liked the 'haiku' for, the parameter helps hone the lines. Thanks again for your erudition. I'll check out your hub.

Thanks s0126phoenix glad you enjoyed, yes, found art can often startle!

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