Happenstance - A Love Poem

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At a Glance


(This is a poem inspired by the novel "Message in a Bottle" by Nicholas Sparks. this was published in my blog, and was denied by HP so i need to revise the original content. I was really smitten by the main characters of the story, that I immediately wrote the poem "At a Glance.")


Your eyes are lingering

And creates a deep yearning

I want to uncover what’s within

I want to probe what’s hidden


The remoteness of that stare

I’ve been needing to bare

I can’t even repudiate

It seems not to abate


The riptide gradually subside

And slowly drifts by the seaside

I have a hard time to fasten

This ill feeling that’s contained


My desire is to unleash

All the looming wretchedness

I want us to start a fresh

And free you from neediness



Since the first time I saw you

A spark consumes my ego

Just bear in mind that Happenstance

Is caught in this Parlance…

Message in a Bottle

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

romantic stand.. yeah up and beautiful Raci :)


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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Oh wow! Simply wow! Though I haven't read the novel, but the poem you wrote is so deep even for a first glance!


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shimmering Dawn 4 years ago

Beautiful! Hope is one beautiful thing and romance is another one of those things dreams are made of... Love it. Have blessed day!


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

I have not read the book but I think you have executed your thoughts wonderfully. My favorite lines are:

My desire is to unleash

All the looming wretchedness

I want us to start a fresh


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Silent hurricane 4 years ago from Israel

Beautiful. Just beautiful.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

I haven't read the book but your poem is so beautiful. So romantic and I loved the music. Wonderful

Voting up


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

This is a very beautiful love poem. I love the music. I must see that movie! Thank you..


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

yeah, Frank...maybe i'm a hopeless romantic...thank you for your presence...


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

oh, thank you Senoritaa...yeah, the original title was At a Glance for that's the theme of the novel...loving in an instant...maybe that's the quality of the heart...it can, if we'll only listen to it...


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

Thank you Shim for that delightful comment...maybe we all do love Romance and the Happy ever after...but in the novel Nicholas takes us to a different ending...Have a blessed day too!!!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

Yes, Vinaya...they could have started afresh, yet it didn't happen...I am still haunted by its ending...thank you Vinaya for the thoughtful comments...


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

thank you Silent hurricane for the amiable comment too...Take care!!!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

Hello rosemay, the novel is a must read...it leads us to a different perspective of love...and you'll eventually love Garrett for he writes beautifully...


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

Hello always exploring...I haven't seen the movie either...but I have read the novel...it's a beautiful story that will surely move our hearts...and wish to have that one true Love...


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QUIZ2012 4 years ago

Deep poem. I like the images which come up upon reading the words.


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ahorseback 4 years ago

Raciniwa , You have touched upon two things I love , Enya and Messege in a bottle!....awesome job girl. I often wonder why poetry is so easy for some [like you] and others like me.........:-}


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

thank you Quiz2012 for visiting my hub...and for the welcoming words...it's quite a relief...


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

yes, ahorseback...for I believe that love can be felt in an instant and can be expressed right away...thank you for the comforting words...I really need it...


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

I can't begin to tell you how jealous I am of your poetic talent! My own poems look like I had shaken up a jar of random words, but yours is sheer perfection! Will you have a book of poems published?


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

hello Phoebe....thank you for the generous comments...until now the thought has not come to mind...but who would not be thrilled to have a book published?it would be a dream come true...hopefully a guardian angel would touch the heart of a publisher...


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CloudExplorer 4 years ago from New York City

Nice one Raciniwa, I like the word play here, cool stuff indeed. Tough words to tackle yet it works beautifully, voted up!


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

You definitely should look into it. Your work is amazing!


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makusr 4 years ago from India

Raci, a poem as beautiful and lovely as you. Who is the object of desire here, the desire itself seems to come out and ask this. Lovely,

MAKUSR


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

as intense as the feeling Cloud...thank you for taking the time to read my hub...have a great day!!!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

thank you Phoebe for the vote of confidence...now, I'm contemplating of pursuing it with God's help...


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

oh, a double pleasure for me Manoj...being lovely and beautiful is force to be reckoned with...thank you for visiting and the wonderful comment...it certainly makes my day...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

Nice job, Racini


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

thank you Justin...have a great day...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

you're welcome and you too!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

a smile goes out to you...and me too...


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poet83 4 years ago from Windsor, Va.

Excellent poem! There is a very poignant emotional theme here and I can surely relate to it. The pictures are awesome too! Thanks for sharing!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu Author

hello poet83... thank you for leaving a wonderful comment and for taking the time to read...have a great day...

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