Hell Wasn't Only For The Dead

Hell Wasn't Only For The Dead

 

As soon as the window opened

he was able to finally smell the stench

in the room,

and its sweltering heat,

the sunlight was blocked out,

by a blood stained sheet,

swarming flies on rotting flesh,

there in the far corner where he wept,

some bodies picked to the bone,

and a blood hound slept,

the man bent and rattled,

and whining like a crone,

there was no particle of compassion or mercy,

everything was just dull and dim,

and then the devil walked in,

the King of Sin,

he stood there looking at him,

drawing nearer,

the darkness was clearer,

fire brushed up against the devil like the tide,

his head inclining to one side,

and standing next to him was a disfigured freak,

the devil’s lips parted,

as if he meant to speak,

but only smiled and shook his head,

that’s when the man realized that Hell

wasn’t only for the dead.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Daughter Of Maat 4 years ago from Rural Central Florida

Brilliant, and so vivid! Hope you don't mind, but had to share it ;)


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Very powerful and creepy, Frank! Well done. Sounds like a good start for a nightmare. :) Voted up and more!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

no D of Maat glad you stopped by this little piece :) Frank


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

TTombs did you just call me creepy? kidding bless you ..Frank


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Hey Frank, Oh, wow! Loved it! "The man got skills." Voted up!!!!!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

lol Cyndi you made my day LOL bless you girl :)


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duffsmom 4 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

Fantastic, eerie and very well done. Yes, the things nightmares are made of put on paper. You paint a very vivid picture.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

bless you duffsmom..:)


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

Through the use of vivid imagery, you have conveyed what you want the reader to feel and see rather than tell. You're one of my favorite authors of all time. Lol. voted up:) Frankie


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justateacher 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Frank...I don't know how you do what you do...but you are awesome at it! Keep it up!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL Marlene you just say the sweetest things.. bless you girl.. you always have my back... thanks for that... Frank and Justateacher thank you for your loyal visits.. bless you too Frank


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Christopher Dapo 4 years ago from Havelock, NC

Beautifully done, Frank, we loved it.

- S. and Chris


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Chris and S :)

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