Her Spirit Rising Suddenly


No words were said,

my heart ached, my eyes red,

it was as if I was trying to wake

her from the dead,

foggy, nothing was clear,

I tried hugging her for warmth,

for fear,

I saw her lips slack,

her eyes wide,

but there was nothing but black,

a blackness that couldn’t hide,

so I cried, and I cried,

I was in a moment so painful,

as to be unbearable,

disdainful,

her spirit rising suddenly,

with a soft noise,

upwards, traveling,

the fear in me was unraveling,

her ghost glowing,

the fear growing,

and the insurmountable pain showing,

the horror of that night would stain,

my heart pounding,

and rebelling against the strain,

a death distorted,

her face contorted,

my body falling into a convulsion,

fighting the over powering feeling of revulsion,

that woman was my wife,

"You killed me," her ghost whispered,

"You took my life."

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

I see you putting together a new book . Don't ask me how.

Gripping-but that's where you shine, including those scary rhymes, every time.

Good poetic work Frank.

Bless.


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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

When my Dad died and I was leaving the Veterans center I looked up into the sky and saw a cloud in the shape of an angel. I took this as a sign...However I didn't kill him. Scary poem indeed :)


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Senoritaa 5 years ago

He killed her? Really? Ghosts say all kinds of stuff LOL

Anyway, well woven.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Sky for your comments-- and Just ask Susan.. my heart goes out to your dad.. and Senoritaa thanks for stopping by again :)


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AudreyHowitt 5 years ago from California

I wasn't expecting that ending--nice, nice job!! A lot of sense of the character of the dead wife---


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SimpleGiftsofLove 5 years ago from Colorado

Wow Frank! Good job! Up and interesting~


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Deborah Brooks 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

what a great POEM!!! You should make this into a book.. Love it..what a ending wow!!!!! I voted up and awesome...


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Audry and simplegiftsoflove.. And Our Ms Brooks you say the kindest things bless you all


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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

Great poem loved it. Frank, my friend you should make this a good story. voted up.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Writer20 you always have my back thanks for the comments Frank :)


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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

With her attitude and gift for dispensing guilt, he might have thought it. The ending also caught me by surprise but in a good way. Most people would just concentrate on getting there to the other side, not a nagging wife. This makes me remember the Bible verse in Proverbs 21:9. "Better to dwell in a corner of a housetop, Than in a house shared with a contentious woman. "


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Yeah H, it does .. glad you read the Bible too.. instead of using it to hold up a broken lamp, Bless you


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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

It used to Frank. Now it holds up a formerly broken woman. Thanks


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

H, you made me laugh so loud people walking by thought I was nuts.. yeah you r cool..


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epigramman 5 years ago

....what can I say Frank that I haven't said before - you are one of my favorite writers here (in any genre) and you always inspire the epi-man - perhaps it's in the way you write with such deceptive simplicity but yet still affect the reader in a most profound and moving way.

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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Epi for your comment..:)


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Vinaya Ghimire 3 years ago from Nepal

Frank, witnessing the spirit rising up can be a wonderful feeling, but in the situation like this one it is scary.


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Shanders 3 years ago from Port Huron, Michigan

I think Epigramman said it best...what can be said that hasn't already? Simply wonderful :)


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Vin and Shanders for stopping by :)


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Morbid in a good way. Great write!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Wayne Barrett :)

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