Here in This My Labyrinth of Darkness by Manatita

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Here in this my labyrinth of darkness,

I face the rapids of a dark lagoon.

I’m all alone and sad; I must confess,

I feel my chains would not be broken soon.


No summer sheds a light upon my plight,

I face the wrathful shadows of the night.

While autumns’ now a distant memories land,

And springs unlikely to arrive at dawn.


I slowly feel my winters’ discontent,

The heavy damp no help in my dismay.

No shelter; warmth; I sink in my dissent,

I dread the night amidst the python day.


Hope now eludes, what was a charming guy,

She broke my heart, abandoned me to die.

(Sonnet. Penultimate end)

But hark! An angel of the Light, perchance?

Just came to give this me a second chance?

“My husband, Dear, let us go on.” She said.

Eyes now awake to roses strewn in red.

(Final End)

Which ending do you like most?


-Manatita, The Lantern Carrier. 29th October, 2015. Copyrighted.

~ Awakening the Inner Light ~

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pstraubie48 10 months ago from sunny Florida

Either one of the endings could work depending on the circumstances...I lean toward the happily ever after one though...

Well done as usual, Manatita.

Hoping all is well with you and yours this afternoon.

Angels are on the way ps


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bravewarrior 10 months ago from Central Florida

I prefer the roses strewn in red. The wife suggesting that they go home, gives hope to the relationship.


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manatita44 10 months ago from london Author

Shauna.

He he. You know, whenever I write the despairing ones, I feel almost as if my Soul is asking me to change them. So what was meant to be a sad Sonnet, for instance, I changed it a bit to lift it up.

Hi Patricia,

Yes, I agree. One way perhaps is to read them as different poems at different times in public. Thanks for your continued support and encouragement.


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Surabhi Kaura 10 months ago from Toronto, Canada

Heart-touching. The 'Final End' is exquisite - makes me to ponder and reflect. Well done as always!


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billybuc 10 months ago from Olympia, WA

I don't have a choice, my friend. I am much more interested in the journey rather than the destination, and the journey you took was beautifully done.

You were busy yesterday....three postings in one day? You are putting the rest of us to shame. :)

Have a blessed week!

bill


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Jodah 10 months ago from Queensland Australia

A fine sonnet Manatita. Either ending is suitable depending on one's mood at a particular time as you alluded to in an earlier comment.


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manatita44 10 months ago from london Author

Bill,

Chuckle, chuckle, chuckle ... I was busy in Germany and on the plane. Indeed I still have one more and another done only in the last 5 mins. One is to blend with prose for my sixth Anniversary here. Lots of Gratitude, Bro. You noticed all three. Cool!

Yes, Jodah. Too right! Still, I feel that my Soul always wants to lift it. He he. Much Gratitude.


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always exploring 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

I liked the happy ending but connected with the sad part too. There is a small town just six miles from my home that has a labyrinth that I love to walk through. Happy strolling!


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manatita44 10 months ago from london Author

He he. Then I'll come and stroll with you, in a nice way. Together we'll see the Light in the darkness; decipher the code to conquer Life's maze. Lots of hugs, Ruby.


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aviannovice 10 months ago from Stillwater, OK

We don't always need to look with our eyes, an open heart can retrieve more. Well done!


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manatita44 10 months ago from london Author

Thank you very much, Deb. Much Love.

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